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Reviews For After the War

Name: FriendofMolly (Signed) · Date: 07/02/08 22:21 · For: Chapter 2: Surprises
Beautiful when it comes to Harry and Ginny. A bit scary with Ron. More, more, more. and soon, soon soon!!!!!

Author's Response: Someone actually emailed me the other day asking when I was going to update...truth be told, I haven't thought a lot about it...But now that it has been brought to my attention that it is somewhat rude to keep my readers waiting for such an extended period of time, I'm sorry. And I am currently writing CHAPTER THREE: A LETTER FROM THE MINISTRY! Thanks for staying committed, and I'm sorry once again. Keep your eyes PEELED! Andrea

Name: Will_the_Ranger (Signed) · Date: 06/19/07 16:26 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
I love this fic. Amazing.

Name: maze (Signed) · Date: 06/03/07 10:22 · For: Chapter 2: Surprises
Interesting and well written.Will be looking out for updates.Keep it up.

Name: quick_quotes_quill (Signed) · Date: 05/29/07 4:35 · For: Chapter 2: Surprises
very nice story
um... why are the chapters the wrong way round? I read this one then the other one then this one again to help it make sense!

Author's Response: I really don't know. I was just trying to figure that out myself. I will have to go tell a mod. Thanks for reviewing! I am glad you enjoyed it! ~Andrea

Author's Response: Okay, guys, sorry for any confusion! The problem has been solved! ~Andrea

Name: moody s friend (Signed) · Date: 05/20/07 20:33 · For: Chapter 2: Surprises
Great story .Keep witing.I hope that with love,wounds will heal.I am waiting for the next chapter.

Name: hansangel93 (Signed) · Date: 05/11/07 20:28 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
AAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! I want to know what happensnext! POst the next chapter! and fast!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: My beta is currently working on it. I will have it in the queue ASAP. Keep your eyes peeled for it! ~Andrea

Name: Euphrates (Signed) · Date: 05/11/07 16:15 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
...you're freaking me out. Is Ron okay? *hyperventilates*

I think this is amazingly well written, even as a first, introductory chapter. You write very well, in my opinion. Great details, actions, etc. Good job.

In a few places, however, I think the dialogue was a bit off.

i.e: "...I turned around and ran because I didn't want to go to Azkaban for trying to turn someone into a slug and killing him instead on accident. ď

ďWow. What curse did Malfoy shoot at Ron?Ē

There, all Harry has to say is 'wow'? Is he happy, shocked, amazed...? I just think it progresses too quickly.

Other than that, however, this was a great chapter. It really makes me want to read more. *pokes*


Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Kate! It means a lot. I will have to go check those sentences out; I get what you mean. I don't know how I overlooked them...... ~Andrea

Name: Potter Kids (Signed) · Date: 04/29/07 7:42 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
love it

Author's Response: Thanks, chapter two, "Surprises", should be in the queue by the end of the week. Be watching out for it! Thanks, ~Andrea

Name: helgaandgodric (Signed) · Date: 03/10/07 11:07 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
Oh my! I'm so curious as to what's happened to Ron!

I really like where you're going with this. It's well written, and is able to update us as to what happened while at the same time keeping with the story. But I just want to let you know that "Muggles" is capitalized. Besides from that, it's lovely!

Kate -> Knight of the Turnip Table

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I will change that ASAP. I had no idea I didn't capitalize the word. I should have the Second Chapter, "Surprises", in queue by the end of the week. I am finished with it, I just need to send it to my Beta. So, watch out for it! Thanks, ~Andrea

Name: solemnlyswear_x (Signed) · Date: 02/25/07 19:33 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
Ah, cliffhanger! =O

Anyway, I really liked the first chapter! You did a great job of just setting the scene at first Ė letting the reader know whatís going on with Harry and everything. And then, you got the plot going with explaining Ronís accident. The story really caught my attention from the beginning!

One of my favorite things was the small details you added in there. I loved how Colinís camera was flashing, and that Luna helped with the decorations. I also thought that describing the peeling paint on Ronís door was a nice touch - it showed the reader how long has passed since the days Harry used to spend at the Burrow.

There was one minor thing I noticed that you might want to change.A big hand reached down to help him up, and he looked into the face of Kinsley Shacklebolt.
It should be Kingsley, not Kinsley. =)

Also, this isnít a problem or anything, but I was curious as to why you had Neville kill Draco. I know it was sort of unintentional on Nevilleís part, but itís actually one of the things Iím interested in seeing if it will happen in canon- if he has enough ability/hatred to kill someone. [If I made any sense...] Iím not disagreeing with your choice or anything! Just interested in what you thought. =)

Well, I really liked the story so far, and I hope youíre able to update soon! Iíll be waiting. =D

Author's Response: Wow, thanks for the constructive review. I love it when people are so willing to help out; it is something so small, but means so much to me. I didn't even realize it was spelled wrong. Thanks for pointing it out. I will now go and sue my beta for an incomplete job. (kidding-sad attempt at humor). About Neville: He is actually one of my favorite characters. He just seems to stick out like a sore thumb, for some reason. I kind-of feel sorry for him, but I know he is more important than he thinks he is. That is part of the reason I decided he should kill off Draco. He seemed to deserve after all the hell JKR has put him through. You are right, it was accident, but he just wanted to prove to people, and more importantly, himself, that he wasn't just a useful lump. He wasn't planning on killing him, but he was really upset that Draco could just walk away after hurting one of Neville's friends. I am currently working hard on the second chapter; I am hoping to send it to my beta ( I may have to find a new one....) very soon. I am so glad you like it so far. I promise, it only goes up...... ~Andrea

Name: ProudxHufflepuff (Signed) · Date: 02/18/07 18:37 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
This is fantastic, hurry up and update!

Name: Queen_of_Fire (Signed) · Date: 11/22/06 14:10 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
great job! i can't wait to see what happened to ron

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I am working hard on second chapter......

Name: Ron x Hermione (Signed) · Date: 11/21/06 18:34 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
Aww... that was so sad! It was very well-written. Very good how you kept the readers guessing what he looked like too. Very good job.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. Currently working hard on 2nd chapter.

Name: Winged Artemis (Signed) · Date: 11/06/06 19:06 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
Ooh! Ooh! I want to know what happened! ::jumps up and down:: Update soon update soon!

Author's Response: lol-Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I will update ASAP.............

Name: potterholicxxo (Signed) · Date: 11/05/06 19:52 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
omg GO ON! i need to hear something else!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! I'm glad you enjoyed it! I'll try to update as soon as possible!

Name: Zacko Borni (Signed) · Date: 11/04/06 20:01 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
Hey! This is a pretty cool story. Jenn recomended it to me and I really like it.

Jenn and keh- I think you both make good points.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, Zacko. I'm glad you liked it. :)

Name: kehribar (Signed) · Date: 11/04/06 19:30 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
lol.. sure Jenn, after all, my comment is just as personal as yours - you have a good point, too. Anyway, it's up to Andrea to decide, right? ;)

Name: Jenn22291 (Signed) · Date: 11/04/06 18:53 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
lol, The Mrs. Weasley thing was my fault. I told her that it might be slightly OOC for Mrs. Weasley to act that way. After all, Harry is like a son to her too, right? Sorry.

Author's Response: Don't worry, I think you made it better. I do think that the way I had it was slightly OOC, but I do think that I should have kept it in there, just cleared it up some or something.

Name: kehribar (Signed) · Date: 11/04/06 18:36 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
Let me first say:

I loved it.

Really! The pattern you follow is great: the introduction is short and informative, things happen fast, and then, when Harry comes out of the hospital, it smoothly slows down, keeping up the pace with a welcome home party. Great job!

One thing slightly disturbed me, though: do you really thing Harry could so easily get over something that terrible? What I mean to say is, I think Mrs. Weasley could be feeling somewhat angry to Harry - she may not rationally think that what happened to Ron was his fault, but being the mother she is (remember the boggart scene in OotP?) I think you can describe her sorrow and possible anger towards Harry a little more in depth. And I think Harry would feel terribly guilty, in fact - I mean, his heart sinks to the bottom of the Earth when Cedric is murdured just because he was with him: he blamed himself for telling Cedric to take the cup with him, therefore he thinks it's his fault that he's death. Now, the people in question is not a fellow student whom he didn't have anything in common, but his very best friend. And also, Ron is injured primarily because of him. So I figure he'd feel absolutely terrible.

And, dear, what happened to Ron? Noooo, what did you do to him, you author!!! ;)
Okay, I know you're not going to tell me. Yesss, the ending is spectecular - there's no better way to guarantee that whoever reads the first chapter will wait for the second.

So it means, I'll be waiting for the next chapter - I need to make sure Ron's gonna be okay:)

Author's Response: *whining* But, but, but, Jenn made me change it......*clears throat* No, I agree with you, but I also agree with Jenn. Maybe I should have putted something in there about her being a little more upset. But, anyways, thanks for reviewing, Ayse. It really means a lot to me. I'm glad you liked it, and I will update as soon as possible with the next chapter.

Name: Jenn22291 (Signed) · Date: 11/04/06 18:30 · For: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry
*squee* Hey Andrea! I have to say that I'm as excited as you are about your story being validated. I disagree with one of the previous reviewers, I don't think it started out dully. I like the improvement that you made to Mrs. Weasley and Harry's conversation that we talked about. You did a great job. I really like this story, and I can't wait to see the next chapter! *adds to favorites* :)


Author's Response: Thanks Jenn! Thanks so much for reviewing! This all would not be here if it weren't for you. You really are the best. Thanks again for reviewing!

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