SUZIE!! I like it, it's wonderful. at first I thought it was a D/Hr, but after reading it through again more thoroughly I saw that it was Tom/Merope.
The poem describes their 'love' amazingly. how at first Tom didn't even care if she existed, then she was all he thought about.
really good poem. usually I don't read much poetry, but this is really good.
Author's Response: WILL!! :D D/Hr? Hmm…no-ones ever thought that before. :p I’ve always had Tom and Merope in mind for this poem. :) Admittedly this is one of my least favourite/earliest poems, but I’m glad you like it anyway. :) *huggles* ~Suzie
Oooh awesome poem! The flow is amazing and it has a very nice rythm, sort of quick and gives you that feeling of something ending too fast, like their "love"... I really loved it, thanks for an excellent read! *puts on favs*
Author's Response: Ooh thanks for reviewing MQ! :D *huggles*
Nice, Suzie. This really captures Tom's feelings well. I like how he realized that something was off and he didn't really know the woman he was with. This is one of the stranger relationships in the fandom and it is always interesting to read about. :D
Author's Response: *giggles* Thanks Elle! I love writing about Tom and Merope - we know so little about what they were like, so it's nice to speculate sometimes! Thanks for reviewing! ~Suzie
I think you've really captured the relationship between Tom and Merope! I really like how you have Merope start out meanigless to him and end that way too, gives it more a closed feeling. You can hear Tom's confusion out of this, too, though, and that he can't understand why he suddenly loved her.
A really great poem!
Author's Response: *squees* Thanks so much for reviewing! That was exactly the sort of mood that I was going for and I'm so glad that you thought it came through. :) ~Suzie
I love this poem. I not much into poetry, but I can read this one over and over again!
My faveourite part would have to be the last lines:
Never together, never knowing, never matching —
As we always will be,
As we always were -
*squee* Love it!
Author's Response: Thanks :) I'm glad you liked it. *hugs*
Oh my gosh, I squeed when I saw this was up. And then I SQUEEEEED when I saw the and/ocean break! HOW did you do it? Yay!
This is such a good poem. The meaning is clear and at the same time emotional and touching. You captured the feelings really well. The poetic devices are also great. (Forgive me, I'm in a very emotional mood right now.) :)
Thanks for thanking me! :)
Author's Response: *Thanks Jennifer for thanking me for thanking her...* rofl...sorry I hadn't gotten round to pming you yet...*hides* I'm really glad you like it, thanks so much for the help!! *rejoices about line breaks*
I'm really not very good at concrit when it comes to poetry, but I wanted to leave a review anyway. I think this poem is a really interesting take on Tom Sr. and Merope.
Maybe I'm not reading it right, but it sounds to me like Tom may have actually loved her at one time, and not just because of the love potion. Sadly, Merope drove him away by continuing to give him the potion and hiding her true self from him. It actually made me feel sorry for both of them, which is quite an accomplishment, since I tend to dislike both of Voldemort's parents in general.
Anyway, I thought it was a really good poem, and I was glad to see that you got the whole big space between "an" and "ocean" to work. *thumbs up* Good luck with whatever you decide to work on next!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the tip about the gaps! I was stressing for ages trying all these different tags...but yay, it works now! :D *squee* The meaning that I was trying to convey was really about how Tom really believed that he loved Merope, because of the potion...and yet somehow sensed that perhaps this wasn't what 'true love' felt like. And aww, I don't actually hate Voldy's parents at all (i only hate him!)..they couldn't help it... :p