Reviews For Internal Battles
Reviewer: sudeshna2kool4u
Date: 01/07/07 6:17
Chapter: Chapter 1

I HATE YOU! I SIMPLY HATE YOU!

lol, just kidding! WHY THE HELL HAVE YOU PUT UP THIS HANGING POINT? WHAT THE HELL DOES DUDLEY TO WID HERMY? oh please tell me, just can't wait!!
i'm sure i'll come to this ron/hermione section at least three times a day to check whether you have updated or not! Dying for an update! Will something terribly happen with hermy? Will ron be a hero? oh god!
a few complaints though: please do try and make hermione a little more... wel... matured than ron. i mean, she always falls into tight spots, but not ron, as usually, it is the opposite.
second, don't think i have ever read in any hp buk that hermione is beautiful. i mean, sure, she luked cool on yule ball day, but that was just a fluke, remember? just pointing out. i think u shud point out her smartness and brains more than her beauty, cuz that's exactly y ron loves her...

neway, these are just small flaws. i bet they are just too small to outdo the marvellous plot of ur story... i mean, it's just too interesting. I love it... You are a marvel! Cheers!

Author's Response: First, Thank you for not really hating me. Second, Thanks for your honesty. I have not received a review like this except from one of my Betas. I love defending my work and am glad to address your points. 1) As I have responded in another comment, This is a romance fic that takes place over only a few weeks. I am not making an attempt to write book 7, just expanding on a simple moment as I imagine it COULD happen. 2) I am not PICKING on Hermione, but, as this is a romance fic, is there not supposed to be a damsel in distress? AND, when we are dealing with teenage boys and hormones, the female is bound to be the center of attention. 3) With regards to Hermione's maturity, I think she is mature as ever - and I don't think that I dumb her down at all - but what we are seeing here is Ron catching up. Also, mature or not, at 17, we all got-or will get, a little "silly" when it comes to boys. Silly-confused-frustrated, or what ever. Also, something new to Hermione, there is no logic, book reading, or an article in Witch Weekley that will help her to figure out how to aproach their delicate and unique budding romance. Back to Ron catching up...and this touches on Hemione's look...I think that I-or atleast I tried-to depict Ron's evolution. He and Hermione have gone from Bitter friends, to best friends, to caring more about the other's safty, to now, wanting and needing more. Ron has finally recognized Hermione for what she is and his recognizing her beauty - her individual and unique beauty, her smile, her presence. He is begining to recognize the feelings that have been surfacing just under the surface for some time now - since she couldn't go to the Yule Ball with him, I think. No, Jo never states that she is beautiful, but the Yule BAll was not a fluke! She is a naturally pretty girl who choosed to prioritize her mornings differently and doens't put a lot of effort into her appearence. At 17 however, I imagine, although not stated as though, she probabally sepnds a little more time at it. After fixing her teeth, Jo did note an improvement and Krum thinks she is pretty. Hermione seems to have been so far over looked by boys (but I think three are more noticing than Jo bluntly states...Cormack?) because of her presence. She is a leader and a rule following-goody-too-shoes...or atleast that is how she projects to her peers, other than Ron and Harry since they know better. That sort of "lable" is intimadating and slightly unaproachable. So, in a nut shell, she is not ugly, but not a breathtaking-head-turner to everyone...but Ron has finally decided that Hermione-as a complete package-is exactally that! Thanks SO much for reading and pointing out these items. I am EXTRA Happy that you like the story enough to continue to read it - dispite what you consider, my oversites. Keep reading! Emily PS...keep reading...Dudly gets his worth!

Reviewer: joeboo
Date: 01/06/07 19:15
Chapter: Chapter 5

Hurry up I hate cliffies


Author's Response: Kept your intrest though...didn't I! Cahpter 6 is in the queue! Keep reading and keep leting me know how much you hate the Cliff-hangers! They keep coming though! :-)

Reviewer: writa_sista
Date: 01/06/07 9:35
Chapter: Chapter 5

OMG!!! what happened??? Ok sorry...ur fanfiction is really good but why is Hermione always the one that gets in trouble??? Make something happen to Ron or...I don't know.

Author's Response: My beta asked why I was picking on Hermione too, but realize that this story only takes palce over about two weeks. And, when teenage boy hormones are involved, the girl is always going to be the center of conflict. And this is a romance fic...isn't there supposed to be a damsel in distress? Glad that you think it is good though! Keep reading and tell a friend!

Reviewer: maze
Date: 01/05/07 7:51
Chapter: Chapter 5

I love the progress of this story.Juicy and interesting.please update soon as I can't wait to know what the boys are going to do with the peeping Tom.
p.s.he deserve any form of punishment and I won't feel sorry for him.


Author's Response: I posted chapter 6 just moments ago! Thanks again for reading!!!! I enjoy knowing what you think!

Reviewer: DracoLuva4684
Date: 01/05/07 5:16
Chapter: Chapter 5

OMG!
This is my favourite story!
I love it!
It's getting soooo good!
Please update soon!
I need to read more!

Author's Response: I am glad that you are enjoying it...the best is yet to come!

Reviewer: kati6110
Date: 01/05/07 1:50
Chapter: Chapter 5

Ewww, Dudley is creepy! You are a great writer. I love your story.

Author's Response: thanks for the compliment! dudly is a creep and he deserves what is coming...

Reviewer: 00cedricis2hot2die
Date: 01/05/07 0:03
Chapter: Chapter 5

ahhhhhh cliff hangers suck ahhhhhhh
ok i think i'm calm now. i just adore your story. you are a very exellent writter.
as you have probobly noticed i am not the most patient person but seriously would dudley stoop as low as to become a "peeping tom" (i just quoted the other reviws as i have no idea as to how i should put that into my own words) well i am looking forward to the next chapter
Love Alexandria

Author's Response: I got you thinking with the cliff-hanger though! Personally, slimey, rude, obnoxious, and filthy bastard come to mind...and came to mind as I was writing that scene! But it made for a GREAT "what are they gonna do" moment! Tell a friend how much you like it! Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: harrylikesredheads
Date: 01/04/07 20:34
Chapter: Chapter 5

oh my! what has dudley done? good chapter, i like the progress that ron and hermione make. they're getting so mature!

Author's Response: I know! I kind of feel like Dumbledor's death is a Huge turning point for everyone... Gald you enjoyed it! Will submit tomorrow!

Reviewer: LiaWitch20
Date: 01/04/07 19:43
Chapter: Chapter 5

OOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH Noooooooooo
No another author with this "mean actitude" of leaving us hanging in such a so abso-bloody-lutely tensed situation!!!!!

*breathing* Ok...I'm calmed now, hehe.
Ron is SO sweet, being so amazing with Herm and "getting pointers" to used with "some greasy nosed girl".
And about the greasy nosed girl, hehe I really laught about that, I remembered Ron in 1rst year!
Don't make us wait too long please!

Author's Response: Oh, now....be nice! I got your attention though! I am glad that you picked up on the "dirty nose" bit. I though it was ironic! I am going to submit chapter 6 tomorrow! Yeah!

Reviewer: wishingforthehallows
Date: 01/04/07 18:06
Chapter: Chapter 5

I have good news and bad news.
The good news - I SUPER LOVE YOUR STORY!!!!
The bad news - I am not a patient person.... Please times a million post a new chapter as soon as possible.
I mean it, I just can't wait!! Thanks for giving me such excellent HP reading while I'm waiting for my precious Hallows. I love it!!!!!!

Author's Response: I am glad that you SUPER LOVE IT, and I am glad that we have something in common. My husband says that I have the patients of a hyenia (sp?) on crack! I am honored that you not only consider this entertainment, but that you also consider it excellent! Thanks so much! I (and 3 betas) have worked very hard! I will submit chapter 6 tomorrow! Is that soon enough...it is on my work computer...and I am at home now. Keep reading and tell a friend!

Reviewer: DarkPrincess0206
Date: 01/04/07 17:54
Chapter: Chapter 5

OH MY GOD!!!! What is he doing in the bathroom? Peeping tom! I sure hope you get those 2 stories up soon. =)

Author's Response: I know...the rotten bastard! he he he I am waiting on the first chapter of the 2nd story to be validated and chapter 3 of that story is with the beta now...but it needed LOTS of work! Gotta get it right!!! Thanks for reading and tell a co-Potter lover about it!

Reviewer: books 4 ever
Date: 01/04/07 17:20
Chapter: Chapter 5

WHAT THE *#@$!!! What is Dudly doing to hermione. is he a peeping tom! hope you up date soon!!!!!!!!! love the story!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Save your *#@$'s for the next chapter...I think you'll laugh! I hope so anyway!

Reviewer: wishingforthehallows
Date: 01/03/07 23:50
Chapter: Chapter 4

I LOVE this story. Can't wait to read ch.5. It's on the list but I can't read it for some reason. Keep up the EXCELLENT work!

Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, it lists the chapter even if it hasn't been validated some times! Silly I know! But the Mods are doing the best they can! LOVE your pen name...that's cute! Keep reading...and tell a friend! PS...have you reaad Tangled? It is featured right now and is a REALLY great story!

Reviewer: maze
Date: 01/03/07 7:33
Chapter: Chapter 4

I difinitely can understand Harry's outburst. I may have done worse. Those two are really stubborn and i am lost for words!Please update soon.

Author's Response: Thanks! I have posted chapter 5 and it will be validated soon (we hope!) The story is done and the beta was JUST sent the last chapter for reviews and revisions! Keep reading! :-)

Reviewer: casiopeia
Date: 01/01/07 18:10
Chapter: Chapter 4

Loving this!

Author's Response: I'm glad! Tell a friend!

Reviewer: DarkPrincess0206
Date: 01/01/07 13:45
Chapter: Chapter 4

First of all, OH MY GOD! Second of all, please just post up 5 stories at a time. A girl can only take so much torture.

Author's Response: Thanks for the encouragement! I am wokring on getting story '2' posted...paooibly this week! It is "done" but needs beta help! I am currently working on story '3'...and it is funny that you mention 5 stories, because I just had an idea for a 5th...it might be a missing moment fro story '2'! Keep reading...it is getting real good soon!!! A little juicer I think!

Reviewer: crazyhpgirl
Date: 12/31/06 13:24
Chapter: Chapter 4

This is definitely going in my favorites! Harry is so philosophical all of sudden. When did he become such an expert on love? The bloody hypocrite!

Author's Response: Well, I think that Harry has always been philosophical...just not as openly. Expert on love...well, I might have streached that part a bit...he could have been "madder" and "blunter" with them, but all in all...he's Harry and he's right! Thanks for reading and a special thanks for letting me know how you feel!

Reviewer: EruditeWitch
Date: 12/31/06 1:09
Chapter: Chapter 4

I LOVED this chapter. I thought it was brilliantly done and well thought out. You got the characters almost right on the ball.

Author's Response: Thank you for the compliments! No one will ever get them "right on" except for JKR as she will ultimatley make the decision about them as it is...but I try! I hope you keep reading! It is getting really good!!!

Reviewer: DracoLuva4684
Date: 12/30/06 0:17
Chapter: Chapter 4

OOHHHHH!
I want to read more!
This story is sooooooooooo good!
I love it!
Please update soon!
I need to know what happens next!
Great job, and keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thanks! I have shapter 5 ready to go and it will go up on 1-2-06!!! I am really pleased that you are enjoying it and hope it lives up to your high expectation. I must thank my beta Dan. He is great and REALLY helpful. Good things are getting ready to happen for my favorite pair...if they stay on track and out of their own heads!!! Enjoy and keep lettimg me know what you think!

Reviewer: kristeen_jeanne123
Date: 12/25/06 20:20
Chapter: Chapter 1

totaly LOVE it! exelent job! i love ron and hermoinie in this one ;)

Author's Response: I am glad! You will really like what is coming!

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