Why does Sirius, in every story of yours, always make me crack up? He's hilarious!
:D This made me laugh!! Perfect fluff - I love it! :)
Hi, MagEd
This was really sweet! The characters were portrayed perfectly, and the whole piece was really lighthearted.
It wasn't overly fluffy, it was simply enjoyable to read. There were some very funny lines mixed in there too, such as James's "I promise, Lily, I’m not . . . you know, or —”. I also found Sirius's reaction exceptionally funny.
Just a couple nitpicks (sorry!). "Her Muggle alarm clock hadn't gone off." I'm pretty sure that in GoF, Hermione informs us that electronics don't work at Hogwarts because all the magic messes with their systems. And there's just a typo where Lily says: "Come o,n Potter." I assume it's meant to be "Come on, Potter."
This was a very cute piece -- well done!
~Midnight Storm
I liked this bit of fluff, though it was a little disconcerting to have the narrator perspective switch back and forth between Lily and James without any sort of clear break in between the two or any pattern at all. I also thought the end was a little weak. It's hard to see Sirius giving those reactions, with that dialogue, but I really thought you did James and Lily great justice.
aww this is so cute...love James healing her back...the beginning of this scene seems eerily similar to the one in Someone with Lily and Sirius...hmm
Funny but it was kind of odd I liked that you actually made it in their time because most people always have Lily thinking things like he is sexy and stuff and Im like do you really think people said sexy in like the 1960s at Hogwarts no I dont think so -so overall it was pretty good I have my own theory of ho wthey go together though but Variation is always awesome.
I love this story. It's so cute. I like the line Sirius said at the end. It's so Sirius.
Wow--this was amazing!! I love James' speech and Sirius' reaction with his absolutely "Sirius-ish" statement! Very good writing!
Pure Beauty.
Your an amazing writer, keep it up
that was a sweet story. I really liked it. really the perfect cliché. I loe your stories.
I LOVE THIS FIC SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
wow, I mean! this is the very first fic that i liked haha de verdad muy bueno.
I loved the way u make lilly resist him (well as much as she could) u're a great writer u even make me want to have broom closets at my school hahaha well also very good job on describing each's personality so crediblly(it's that correct?? sorry i'm not british or anything so i'm not sure ¬¬) well keep on that way I think J/L it's THE couple for romance fics WELL DONE..
adios xD
hehe :) I love broom closets! I wish there were some at my school... anyway, I love it, especially the ending!
lol i loved it!! it was perfectly fluffy and funny, and it had sirius!! wonderful job!!
I liked this fic. It was funny and normally I don't like one-shots but you got yourself a winner.
Haha I loved this story! You're a great writer and I can't wait to read your other stories. I love fluff and one-shots! Thanks again for a great read. (:
hehehehehehehehehe.
PERFECT.
AND FLUFFY.
