loved it! only one nitpick- since Ginny's a seven of a seventh, then Molly was part of a family of 7... and there were only three Prewetts in your story... still loved it! 123456789/10!!!
SQUEEE!!! I loved this one, too. It was fabulous, and I'm definitely going to read the rest of the stories about the Prewetts later - you've got me hooked. Thankee! You're such a beautiful writer! And I loved Gucky, it was amazing how they all really believed in him, you know? Beautiful. Absolutely. You're wonderful.
THIS IS AMAZING! I love it. It's funny and realistic, and somehow ridiculous enough to actually make the reader care about this spray bottle full of insecticide. I can definitely see why it won the challenge, and I am outraged that this is only the sixth review for it. I actually got a bit teary-eyed when Gucky "died." Gucky is short for Good Luck-y, right?
Anyway, do you have siblings? Because I have a younger brother and sister, and the sibling relationships were perfect, just like real life.
The story reminds me of the E. Nesbitt books, like "Five Children and It," except your story doesn't have stodgy, old fashioned writing, and your story has three-dimensional characters.
My favourite line was, "An image of the little spray bottle using Fabian’s bed came to mind, with Molly feeding it some kind of gourmet breakfast, although it seemed unlikely that the spray bottle should need to eat."
I also really liked the part where Molly was mangling the lyrics to her song.
Basically, to sum up this ludicrously long review, your story was scrumdiddlyumptious with awesome sauce. (That's a compliment, by the way.) And now, I'm off to read your gauntlet piece!
xD Thank you so much! Personally, reviews feel like icing with this story because the fact that it came first feels like... Yeah, like it's been reviewed a lot. You know, just to be semi-literate and all.Uh-huh, that's where Gucky's name came from. Although, for an interesting side-note, I really wanted to use it because my younger sister (when she was very young and learning to talk) used to call herself 'Gucky', instead of 'Miki'.
Not much resemblance. Odd girl. And talking of siblings, I am so amazingly glad that you liked their relationships! Just personally, I've never met siblings who operated just like this, but it felt natural, considering the circumstances of their upbringing and their personalities.
Thank you-thank you-thank you! for all of your lovely comments ^^ Now I'm off to see the review(s) I apparently have for my Gauntlet piece.
So cute! Such wonderful imagery. What a wonderfully woven story! I think these would have to be my two favorite lines:
"Most of their remaining night, Fabian and Gideon spent trying to think of ways to impress the spray bottle." Just the thought of trying to impress a spray bottle!!
"He was rarely scared of anything — not because of bravery, but because he just didn’t care about all that many things, because he was stupid." How like a child to think this way! I loved it.
You have to tell me, though... what was Gucky? I totally didn't get it... I still loved the story in spite of my ignorance!
Hey, it's you! *Mad waving*
^^ haha. Gucky was a can of insecticide. You know, the ordinary stuff from the shops that you spray to get rid of bugs? An aerosol can is just that kind of spray can, and can be insecticide/hair spray/etc.
XD It's so funny to try and slip into a child's state of mind to write this kind of story. You know, especially more than one. It probably doesn't look like it, but I spent quite a while trying to construct and properly write the sibling dynamic.
*Shuts up about psycological jargon*
Thank you so much for coming and checking out this story! And then even more for reviewing ^^
I can definitely see why you won! This was a beautiful story. It had funny parts, it had sad parts, it was just an overall great story. Good job! *huggles fellow Turnip*
Thank you, and thank you for going to the trouble of reviewing. Turnips for the cup!
Oh... *giggles again* That was really, really good. Gucky the spray bottle... Ah, the joys of childhood innocence. I love how you started it with a quill and captured the reader's attention before heading into the storyline that was even more captivating. Great work yet again on characterization, and overall awesome job!
Bravissima, yet again, and many more,
Ooh - thank you!
Complements on this story apparently turn me into a fluttering ninny. Perhaps it's because most of the characters are practically OC's. Although, then again, it doesn't necessarily take all that much to turn me into a fluttering ninny.
I'm delighted that you enjoyed this story, and thank you for the detail about the beginning; I was hoping that'd work out well. And, of course, thanks for the review!
Hi! Congrats on a wonderful story! This was just adorable. I can see why you like the Prewetts so much, you have given them wonderful personalities and really brought them to life. I thought you did a great job writing the interaction between Gideon, Fabian, and Molly. I really liked how close they were. I loved the conversation Fabian had with Gucky while the other two were trying to steal a potion for the poor sick can, it was great! All of the dialogue was good, and your overall style was really consistent throughout the story and fit the tale perfectly. This is a wonderful entry for the challenge - good luck!! ~Gina :)
Thank you so much! I did my abormally-already-finished Gauntlet story on Gideon too, so I've been having heaps of fun with their personalities - the stories are so contrasted. I'm glad they come across well in this one ^^
I really liked how close they were.
^^ And I'm glad that worked, too. I have such a weakness for close siblings, and I love the idea of Gideon acting the parent. *Huggles Gideon*
It's funny how the entries to this particular challenge seem to be Weasleys, or, in my case, Prewetts. They all fit so well, and there's such a selection of them!
Anyway, thank you again for reviewing, and good luck with your story too!
I love the story so much, and I won't ever get tired of reading it.
3 thumbs up!!
Oh, shucks - you're just saying that ^^. Thank you so much for reviewing, on top of everything else, and where did you get that extra thumb?