Reviews For Empty Lust
Reviewer: BuckbeakBeyond
Date: 10/27/06 18:53
Chapter: Empty Lust

Pretty good for a newcomer :) I liked your use of choppy sentences, and I also liked the lack of predetermined structure. I always feel that free-form poetry expresses emotions better than distinctive rhythmic structures. I especially liked the lines:

"These feelings of numbness,
This feeling of guilt.
This pain is ripping me whole."


A nice interpritation of our beloved werewolf's thoughts. Bravo!

Author's Response: Thanks sooo much! I'm glad you like my improper style of poetry (lol). Thanks again!

Reviewer: Dorcas 4 Sirius
Date: 10/23/06 12:48
Chapter: Empty Lust

I really liked it. I liked this bit best:

"Wake me from this nightmare.
So I can go home.
Save me from this Hell.
I don’t belong.
This life isn’t wanted.
This soul isn’t free.
Just let me go,
It's all that I plea"

Author's Response: Thank you sooo very much!!! I'm glad you liked it.

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