Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 05/19/08 17:34
Chapter: I Don't Do Snogging

haha great ending! I loved it! 100000/10 {BeccA}

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading, and it makes me happy that you enjoyed my story!

Reviewer: I_LUV_MOONY
Date: 02/01/08 8:28
Chapter: I Don't Do Snogging

Hello, again! It's been quite a long time since I was last here, so I thought I would re-read and give you a better review than my first. I hope that's okay.

I usually start my insanely long reviews (and trust me, this will be insanely long) with my initial reaction to the story.

I LOVED it.

Second, I always do a couple grammatical/formatting/whatever nitpicks from the story, It isn't meant to offend, just help.

“Hey, mate,” Sirius said easily, cheerfully rising to his feet as if it was completely normal to make such a dramatic entrance.. He was so incredibly graceful, thought Remus wryly. “We’ve been wondering where you’d gone to.”

Too many periods after 'entrance.' I'm sure you were overexcited to get this story in, seeing as it's so AMAZINGLY AWESOME.

“Just thinking,” Remus muttered, rubbing the back of his neck absently.
“Ah. Don’t you do that enough as it is?”


Formatting error. It's really not a big deal, but some people can get really bothered about it. No, I am not talking about me, I promise.

“I do. I can see it in your eyes that you love me. I’ve seen it for years. I reciprocate it perfectly. It’s exactly the way that best mates feel about each other. The four of us Marauders are extremely close, and we all care for each other. But ever since meeting you, Remus, I knew that our relationship would be different from anyone else’s. I don’t know what it is, but we just…go together, you know? We’re right for each other. As right for each other as the best of mates are supposed to be.

What you feel isn’t weird or gay, Remus. I feel it, too. We just love each other is all.”


Now, this one can be fixed in two different ways. You can simply move that last chunk up to the rest of it, or you can put a quotation mark before the last chunk.

There, that wasn't so bad, was it? Now is when I take out my favorite excerpts and exclaim fangirlishly over them.

Remus loved Sirius more than anyone, and he reasoned that he probably always would. James, Peter, and his Uncle Romulus weren’t far behind, though.

I'm not sure if this was supposed to be humorous or not, but I took it as humorous. I just love how it's like an afterthought. It seemed like Remus was really focused on Sirius, but then he remembered that he has two other friends and an uncle. I just found it funny. :)

But ever since meeting you, Remus, I knew that our relationship would be different from anyone else’s. I don’t know what it is, but we just…go together, you know? We’re right for each other. As right for each other as the best of mates are supposed to be.

What you feel isn’t weird or gay, Remus. I feel it, too. We just love each other is all.”

Yeah, I know, I pulled this one out again, but I really like it. You captured the caring, friendly, loyal side of Sirius perfectly. And I also like how in this entire story, Sirius is more sure of himself than Remus. They have contrasting personalities, and you really showed that.

Okay, usually this is my closing statement, but I'm going to do something special with you. Your characterization was simply divine, and I'm going to rant about that for a couple of paragraphs.

I loved your Sirius. Absolutely loved him. He was the kind, caring, loyal friend we all know and love. He was in character throughout the whole story, and I loved his speech.

Remus=MINE! Just kidding (although I would take him if I could). He was absolutely awesome in this story. He was a bit sarcastic, but this was the side of Remus one doesn't normally see. It was the. . . I want to say weaker, but that doesn't really sound right to me. Defenseless? I guess it was the Remus he hides from everyone else. The weak Remus that really isn't sure of himself. But anyway, however you want to describe this side of him, it was awesome.

Now their interaction. You really showed Sirius as the dominant part of their relationship. That's the right thing to do, considering that Sirius has the more dominating personality. Sirius was like Remus' guide in this story, which I liked. He was really someone Remus looked to when in need. And vice-versa. I, as the reader, see that Sirius can also go to Remus. And let's not forget that they love each other very much. :)

*glances up at rest of review* Wow. There's three minutes of your life you're not getting back. Anyway, great story, great characterization, etc. Hope you've had a nice day! Best wishes!






Author's Response: Wow. For the first time ever, I must say that I'm glad you did waste three minutes of my life. What an amazing review! I love these types of reviews that point out my mistakes as well as the things reviewers thought I did right. I should really go back and fix all the formatting things in my stories. It's so time-consuming, though. I'll do it eventually. Anyway, thanks a bunch for the nice surprise. It really made my day.

Reviewer: NoxSomnium
Date: 12/19/07 10:44
Chapter: I Don't Do Snogging

Yay! Thank you so much for firmly expressing the belief that love does not have to be romantic. I feel that way about my brother, and several of my friends, but it's totally platonic. It upsets me when people think that two people who are not related, or even sometimes are related (yuck) can't be really close to one another without it being romantic or sexual. If I start ranting I'll never stop. But thank you.


Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I love getting reviews, especially when I'm not expecting them. This was a realy fun story to write, and I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Siriusly Mr Black
Date: 09/10/07 13:51
Chapter: I Don't Do Snogging

Brilliant fic, really deep, and got tonnes of tensin and stuff. Really reminds me of the kinds o rumours that fly around my school, and the kind of people they are focusssed at. I think you did a superb job

Author's Response: Thanks! I didn't know I was being "deep"...Lol. Yeah, the people at my high school were REALLY mean to classmates they deemed 'unacceptable'. I think one girl even transferred because they were so awful to her. And it tickles me that I earned a 'superb'. ^__^

Reviewer: I_LUV_MOONY
Date: 03/23/07 22:10
Chapter: I Don't Do Snogging

That was a very intense fic, it was also satisfying. You see a lot of fics about Remus, but I don't think I've ever seen one that actually shows the taunts that he might've had to go through. Thank you for shedding new light on an old subject.

Author's Response: You're welcome! ;) Glad I could help. You have no idea how ceaselessly delighted I am that people keep reading my stories. It's AMAZING!

Reviewer: DogLover4Life
Date: 12/18/06 21:25
Chapter: I Don't Do Snogging

Wow... I always imagined Sirius and James to be the best of friends. I wish I had a true Mauraurder.

Author's Response: Mmmm, don't we all.

Reviewer: private_ryan
Date: 11/16/06 17:48
Chapter: I Don't Do Snogging

:] wow, this was really good. i really, really liked it.
“I don’t do the snogging thing.”

Author's Response: Thank you for reading!

Reviewer: Pussycat123
Date: 10/30/06 10:08
Chapter: I Don't Do Snogging

Hey, how come this only has two reviews? It was good! I liked it, especially that end comment. I always kind of thought that it was Sirius and James who were the tightest friends, but this way works just as well ... after all, the reason I love Marauder era so much is because you can expand on these things so much ... Good job anyway, I'll stop waffling now =D

Author's Response: Thanks! I really appreciate your kind words. I didn't say it in my fic, but Remus' best friend is Sirius, and Sirius was quite close with Remus. But James and Sirius were better friends. I too believe that Sirius and James were the closest of the four. Thanks again for the review!

Reviewer: lumos_aeternum
Date: 10/25/06 0:02
Chapter: I Don't Do Snogging

Interesting shot of a story. The only canon-related criticism I have is that the Marauders were all in the same year in the same house...so meeting James sometime later and him introducing them to Peter is a little far-fetched unless that was at the welcoming feast. Otherwise, good job. I could really feel that awkward moment where Remus was waiting to see how Sirius would respond. Much of that section had repeated instances of awkwardness that shown through, as I'm sure it was meant to. They were at an odd stage in life dealing with advanced forms of relationships that most guys at their age would see as more of a "gay" thing (no offense intended to anyone - just stating the facts of that matter). Bravo...good to see you're still at it!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! As for the 'same year, same house' comment you made, I was thinking that Remus and Sirius met on their very first train ride to Hogwarts, and they were all introduced then. All introductions were made long before any of them were ever Sorted into Gryffindor.

Reviewer: I lovesmesomeHarry
Date: 10/24/06 23:18
Chapter: I Don't Do Snogging

I like this! They have a bond and I like the way you explain it! keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you!

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