I don't think I've laughed so hard at a story in quite a while. I love the way you were able to manipulate Ron and Hermione into going with the twins.
The actual shopping centre and their reactions to all things Muggle were utterly hilarious! I do wish they'd gotten on the excapator though. After the ride up on the lift, I would've thought Ron might not want to risk losing his lunch.
Excellent story! And, definitely worthy of a Wittiest Writing nomination!
Author's Response: Wow, Wendy - thank you so much! I wrote this for a challenge ages ago, I'm so glad someone is still reading it and laughing at it. It was fun to write, the Weasleys just do humor so well, lol. Thank you so much for nominating it!! *turnip hug* ~Gina :)
First sentence: "Wait for the peons!" What the heck is a "peon"?
Hehe! That was fun. Very fun. Nice work!
Author's Response: Hi again! Thanks for the review. "Peon" is a bit of a slang term. Dictionary.com defines it as: "any person of low social status, esp. one who does work regarded as menial or unskilled; drudge" So it's a bit of a poke at Ron's "elevated" status as a Prefect, though I suppose the word might be a bit too slangy, especially in the UK. Hm. I"m glad you asked! I am also glad you still liked the story and had fun. Thanks for reading this story, and for the lovely review - I really appreciate it! ~Gina :)
What a wonderful piece! I love Fred and George! And that particular magazine with the cars and women ... that's exactly what I'd imagine the boys would get for Mr. Weasley.
Author's Response: Hi Sandy! Thanks so much for reading this story! I wrote it quite a while ago, I'm glad it still holds up. Can't you just picture them all snickering over a magazine, and Hermione huffing off? I'm glad you like that. Thanks again for reading and for leaving such a nice review!! ~Gina :)
Very original adventure. I liked it a lot!
Author's Response: I'm so happy you liked it! I wrote this a while ago, I'm glad someone is still reading it! It was a lot of fun to write. Thank you so much for the nice review, I really appreciate it!! ~Gina :)
So, you like the Weasley boys too, huh? :D They are brilliant. I love characters about which I can write a good humor fic.
But the other characters were wonderful, too! It's so rare, anymore, to read a fic with really well-formed characters, but I completely believed yours! Especially Ron - I could see him saying and doing everything you wrote. Good job, and good luck with the challenge!
Author's Response: Hi there! Thanks so much for coming by to read this story! Yes, it is fun to write about the Weasley boys. :) I'm glad I kept everyone in character. Thanks so much for the great review! Good luck yourself! ~Gina :)
Fred and George, what are we suppose to do with them? Very well written, I loved your descriptions of the boys encountering Muggle objects. The idea of talking to the shooping center was great, because you could have lots of reactions insrtead of one.
Your charactizations were spot on. Taking a the number of characters you did, placing them in a completely new enviroment, and keeping them in character was great! Plus who doesn't love Molly when she's mad?
Good job, and best of luck in the challenge.
Author's Response: Hi Gonz! Thanks so much for reading this story! Yes, Fred and George - what a pair. ;) They were in the last challenge as well, and they are just such fun to write. I'm glad I was able to write everyone in character - challenging, when they are in a completely new and non-magical environment! And that's the second comment I've gotten on Molly Weasley, how about that! Thanks so much for the review, I'm glad you liked the story! And another round of good luck to you, I really did like the Etch-a-Sketch. What fun! Thanks again! ~Gina :)
*waves* Hi Gina! *returns some turnipy confetti* I loved how you had their reactions to more than one Muggle object. It made the story way more interesting. And the magazines. *snort* Typical Fred and George. I also liked the little bits of Ron/Hermione romance. This was a great story; good luck in the challenge!
Author's Response: Aww, you're so nice! :) Thanks for reading this story, I'm glad you liked it. It was fun, especially the bits with the magazines. I totally think its typical Fred and George, and I think Mr. Weasley might like them too. ;) I'm glad you didn't find the R/Hr bits out-of-character, since this is set fifth year and they *still* aren't technically together! Thanks again for reading the story, I'm glad you liked it. Good luck yourself - go Ravenclaw!! ~Gina :)
*Sigh* And sorry for the double-review, but can you believe I only just got the title.
Author's Response: Hi again! I'm glad you got it, did you like it? Funny story there - my original title was "Mall Rats." :) LOL! But then I realized "mall" wasn't a big word in Britain so I had to go back and change "mall" to "shopping centre" and there went that title. I also had to change "elevator" to "lift" and hence the new title, which I think is a bit silly, but so was their trip to the mall - I mean shopping centre. ;) Thanks again for the review!! ~Gina :)
Ooh - I've been waiting for this to come up ever since you mentioned it on the forums! And can I just say - Yay! Absolutely hilarious.
I love the way you characterised just about everyone in this story, and I honestly can't remember Mrs. Weasley being any scarier. Really. And the elevator incident was just priceless. I especially liked this line:
To his surprise she took his hand once more, called the twins a rather rude name, and led him toward the exit.
It's short and simple, but somehow just... really funny! I'm nervous about posting my entry now...
Again, this is a brilliant story. Good luck!
Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for the great review! I am so glad you stopped to read this story and I am thrilled you enjoyed it. I am really glad you liked the characterizations, for some reason I thought readers might find some of the characters a bit "off" and I'm still worried someone will zing me for it. Ah well, it was fun! Please don't be nervous about posting your own entry, I can't wait to read more stories in this challenge! Good luck with it, and thanks again for the great review! ~Gina :)
I think this was great. The only thing that I would have changed is that Harry and Ginny would have been adventurous enough to have come along too.
Author's Response: Hi! I'm glad you liked this story! I definetely thought about sending Harry and Ginny along on the adventure, but ultimately I thought Harry was probably not in the mood for shopping with the twins at this point in his fifth year and wanted to stay in character with book five. I made Ginny stay behind to watch over him, although I think she probably would have had a good time with Hermione! It was fun to just focus on the Weasleys, and hopefully Harry and Ginny had a nice time in Diagon Alley on their own. ;) Thanks for reading it and leaving a review! ~Gina :)
very good story. funny
Author's Response: Hi Kelpie! Yay for the first review! I'm glad you liked this story. It was written for a challenge in which a witch or wizard encounters a Muggle artifact. And of course the Weasleys sprung to mind! I'm happy you found it funny, since I was definetly going for light-hearted at the very least. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, I really appreciate you following so many of my stories! ~Gina :)