Good job! I liked you writing tactics, keep showing us some more work.
Besos
Marwa
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
omg. I seriously thought it was Hermione's POV the ENTIRE TIME!!! lol and then I read the part that was like "That's why tonight, I finally knew. When Ron came down the boys' stairs with Her, and Harry was nowhere in sight, I knew. I knew I was out of luck. I knew I couldn't keep pretending Ron really wanted to keep going out with me, not any more. I knew She'd cut me out. I knew She'd won." I was like, wait a minute WHAT?
Author's Response: Heh. That was thw passage that was meant to show what was happening. :) Thanks!
Author's Response: Author's Response: Heh. That was the passage that was meant to show what was happening. :) Thanks!
I never really liked Lavender anyway
Author's Response: Oh well, never mind. :)
oh and btw..i knew it was levander from the start!! haha smart huh? lol
Author's Response: Congratulations. :)
aww! now i feel soo bad for her!! is that ur point tho?? is that how you want us to feel?...i feel soo bad. us gurls can be such bitches can't we ? lol..not that hermione did anything..but u do kno wat happened next dnt u? lavender told all the gurls abt wat hermione "did" with ron, and then they'll shut her out right? ugh the suckiness...gd fic tho....im positive ur a gurl(ddnt check ur name yet..i will in a sec)...and if ur not...srry! no offence meant lol.
Author's Response: Well, it's reasonable to feel a bit bad for her, she was hurt too ... I don't suppose Hermione would have too many problems, everyone probably had a pretty good idea of what happened. :)
Ooh... Lavender is a quite bitter dear, isn't she? *smiles* Love this one - who wouldn' ? ' hard to feel sorry for Lavender when she's calling Ron her "rag". Great story!
~Juli
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, Lavender's not in a good mood here. :)
that was so cool. you had me until the end. i thought a couple of things were a little out of character for Hermione, but I never suspected this. really good!
Author's Response: Thanks -- that was the effect I was going for. :)
I knew it had to be Lavender's pov! Hermione wouldn't call Ron a bastard and say it felt good. I liked how you used that moment in the HBP to build a story upon. It was very original!
Author's Response: Thank you -- with the 'felt good' I was trying to evoke the punch in the PoA movie, which never did seem that much like Hermione anyway! Mind you, I wouldn't be surprised if she called Ron some very nasty things in the privacy of her own thoughts. :)
It's very good, but I thought it was Hermione's POV, talking about Lavender in HPB.
Author's Response: Thank you -- I was trying to draw out a certain degree of analogy between them!
Oh, that was really nicely done.
Ginny vs. Parvati, Seamus vs. Cormac -- very well thought out. (Although McLaggen could be a Scottish name, couldn't it?)
Author's Response: Thank you -- glad the parallels worked. As I understand it, the Scots form would usually be 'MacLaggen' and the Irish form 'McLaggen' -- although a lot of Scots do have Mc names too, yes.
oh! I thought it was Hermione's POV at first! It could work either way! Very good read!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
VVEEERRRRRRRRRRRRRYY Sneakey!
You had me fooled! Great Job!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
OMG I so thought that was Hermione. That was brilliant!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
I like it. I can see why Lanveder would be upset though I am not much for the couple Lavender/Ron. But I can see how Lavender would be upset losing Ron to someone like Hermione.
Anyways, I like it. You did a really good job. Keep writing.
Author's Response: Thank you -- I don't think Lavender/Ron would ever really have much chance given Ron's underlying feelings for Hermione, but she definitely did seem upset by the breakup. :)
