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Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 07/19/08 18:19 · For: 2. A Potion and a Promise
aaww!! that was so sweet!! i loved it!

Author's Response: Thanks for the kind words. I'm happy you liked it!

Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 07/19/08 18:13 · For: 1. Brewing Lessons
nice first chapter, but i do feel really bad for remus.

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, he does have a tough time of it, doesn't he...

Name: shewolf2000 (Signed) · Date: 12/03/07 22:10 · For: 2. A Potion and a Promise
Awww, how sweet! I loved it! I especially like the part towards the end when he's talking about how the potion lets him keep his "self". It really made his character for me in this story. I love Remus so much.

Are you planning on writing anything more?

Author's Response: Thanks for letting me know you enjoyed the story! I appreciate your kind words. I am still writing, but I've been posting at somewhat smaller fanfic sites these days. I have a LiveJournal account (shimotsuki), and in the sidebar you can find a link to "index of all stories".

Name: werewolfs_fan (Signed) · Date: 06/11/07 8:22 · For: 2. A Potion and a Promise
Very good. It is well written and I think your characterizations are spot on, especially Horace Slughorn!

Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to read the story and leave a comment. I'm glad you liked Slughorn -- he was a lot of fun to write.

Name: J_Bird (Signed) · Date: 12/20/06 17:25 · For: 2. A Potion and a Promise
Awww how sweet. :-)

Author's Response: Thanks -- I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Name: mock_turtle (Signed) · Date: 10/24/06 0:53 · For: 1. Brewing Lessons
I never thought of negative points on the wolfsbane potion. you're smart.

Author's Response: Just the thought of Greyback on Wolfsbane... rrrgh. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Name: Starmaiden (Signed) · Date: 10/20/06 23:42 · For: 2. A Potion and a Promise
Yay, an update!

Tonks’s nervousness and inner thoughts are perfect for a woman who’s essentially trying to do an unreturnable favour for the man she loves. Being a burden to someone is a real strain on a relationship.

Remus is so sweet, and entirely in character.

The flicker of panic in his eyes was gone in an instant. If she hadn't been looking right at him, she would have missed it. Then his expression went completely neutral, perfectly calm, revealing nothing. His defences were back up — those walls of self-protection that she'd worked so hard to break through.
Beautiful. As is Tonks’s solution to that problem (ha).

Ah, yes, I was wondering if this conversation would crop up – the ego that resides in every the nicest males: “Thank you, but no matter how right you are, I can do it myself.”

That night, he had been torn between wanting something very, very much and believing that he didn't deserve to have it.


Again, excellent. The revelation is very significant, but the way Tonks figures it out and then responds is even better, and a good showing of the analytical, calm side of her personality that allowed her to be an Auror.

Brava! I’m sorry I’m not better at articulating what makes this so brilliant, but since I’m not, I’ll just leave it there. I intend to read the rest of your work at another (not late night/very early morning) time. And please, don’t stop writing!

Author's Response: Thanks for staying around for the conclusion of the story, and thanks once again for your detailed and generous review.

I'm glad you thought Remus was in character. I find him a fascinating mixture of rock-solid strength and deeply hidden loneliness, and I wanted to show that inner vulnerability without making him seem like a wimp.

Aha, "...the ego that resides in every the nicest males..." -- actually, I wasn't thinking of this as a male-ego effect, but more the reaction of someone who is trying to convince *himself* to stand firm against a nearly irresistable temptation, because he doesn't want to add to the burdens of someone he loves.

(I do hope to keep writing when time permits -- thanks for the encouragement!)

Name: Fading (Signed) · Date: 10/13/06 17:41 · For: 1. Brewing Lessons
Good start! I'm looking forward to the nexty chapter and hoping that you'll include some Lupin-y goodness soon! =)

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! Lupin appears in Chapter 2...he's got a surprise for Tonks, but she's got a bigger one for him.

Name: EtherealElation (Signed) · Date: 10/12/06 23:57 · For: 1. Brewing Lessons
Oh... I like this one a lot. Nice take on a Remus / Tonks - The first one I've read, actually, bu ' very good. I like the fact that it takes place after HBP, and McGonagall as Head and all. Very nice!


Author's Response: Thanks for your kind review -- glad you like the story. It takes place after HBP, but only by a few weeks, so Tonks and Remus are still getting used to each other (as we'll see in the second chapter).

Name: Starmaiden (Signed) · Date: 10/12/06 19:24 · For: 1. Brewing Lessons
Yay, a new Remus/Tonks story! I keep a very close eye on this particular category.

Promising premise. Sure, Aurors need N.E.W.T.s in Potions, so Tonks would be qualified to brew Wolfsbane if anyone would.

"I have a N.E.W.T. in Potions," she replied, attempting an ingratiating smile (not generally one of her strong points).
Heh heh. Very good. Tonks is great at disguises and probably to some degree at acting, to go with her Auror work, but this is rather against her nature.

Great characterization for Slughorn – the ambition, the calculating mind, but with that small degree of sympathy. It doesn’t come through often, but it is there, and you’ve captured both sides of him excellently.

He opened the door as soon as she knocked. "Miss Tonks. So delighted to meet you. Please come in." He showed her to a very soft armchair and settled himself into an even softer one. The office was large, but it was cramped with overstuffed furniture and strewn about with knickknacks. Slughorn even had a roaring fire going — in July. Tonks found the whole atmosphere rather oppressive.
This part right here is extremely well done. You have captured Slughorn’s style of speaking, his personality (the cushy chair), the “things” all over that make him feel important, and Tonks’s reaction to the whole thing. Additionally, your phrasing and flow are fantastic.

Great beginning. Grammar, characterization, plot, all are terrifically done. I’ll be watching for the rest of this!

Author's Response: I really appreciate your detailed and encouraging review, and I'm glad to hear you're enjoying the story. (Chapter 2 is nearly finished and will be submitted soon.) Slughorn surprised me, actually. I didn't expect him to be so much fun to write when I started the story...

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