This was really good. Sad but beautifully written.
I really liked how you distinguished between them being colleagues and not friends.
Author's Response: Thanks! I knew making them friends would kind of go against the whole "no happiness" thing, so tried to think of a word to describe it better ... anyway, I'm glad you liked it. Although maybe now it would be slightly different, because surely if she loved her husband so much, she would remember the pain of losing him? But anyway, I'll stop pointing out my own plotholes and move on ... thanks again!
hey...had to write a little more...
i always read all the reviews after writing my own...in one of your responses i saw something about your original fic writing...could it be possible to get access to some of them? coz your writing gives the impression that you are really good at creating new characters...so your originals are bound to be as good as your fanfics.
i forgot to mention something in my first review...in this fic, the minister's words sounded too polite to be spoken to such a brutal murderer(that's what Sirius was to the world)...then again, maybe his tone was more scared than polite...
also...the part in the end where we find out more about Mistry, i.e. her being married and all, halfway through being shocked, i felt like...yeah...of course that's the way it was...
err...sorry for blabbering so much! like i said...i just HAD to write it all.
P.S. loved the name Mistry...the phrase "Serious Mystery" keeps coming to me!
Author's Response: Um, I'm not quite sure what you meant about her being married, and whether it was a good or a bad thing, so I'll just move on to the other stuff. I'd never noticed "Serious Mystery" before but you're right! And I think the minister probably was just scared, and possibly he could tell what Sirius was feeling. No matter what a person's done, love is still love, right? Although mostly he was probably scared. As for the originals ... I'm afraid not. It may sound odd coming from someone who posts internet fanfiction for everybody to see, but I really don't like showing the original stuff to people ... weird, huh?
umm...i don't really know what to say...just that i HAVE to say something...
it's...i dunno...beautiful is the right word, i guess.
"We must have been really happy if the Dementors took away everything I knew about him" - it touches you.
one thing bugged me a little though...if they were about the same age, then they must've been in Hogwarts at around the same time. then, with the marauders' reputation and all, shouldn't she have recognized him?
P.S. on a lighter note...one of this days i'll just sneak into your head and kidnap a couple of you bunnies!
Author's Response: Hmm, that is a good point. I think she did mention that she didn't remember much of Hogwarts, though, so that'll be my excuse! (In reality, you're absolutely right). On an advice-y note, if you want inspiration, I'm not going to say it's easy, but you should take it from everything you see. Also, anything starting with the words "What if ...?" or "I wonder how ...?" For example, "I wonder how Sirius figured out that being innocent would keep him same because that's not actually a happy thought?" and "What if there was a woman who told him so?" Anyway, thanks again for reviewing!
:( Wah...she died! That was wounderful though!
Author's Response: Well, not quite (I don't think so anyway, this is way old) but she came close. And she thought she was dying anyway. On that happy note, thanks for reviewing!
this story teally makes a person feel like they are sirius. I couldnt believe it...its horrible. THEY WERE BOTH INNOCENT!?!?!? But atleast Mistry did get to feel good one last time...sad story, but definently a GREAT one!!! I luvd it...as much as one could i mean...not that she got the Kiss...jst well u know!!! :D BTW...i adore the name Mistry! :D
Author's Response: Thanks! I love the name too. It's actually the surname of someone who had some artwork put on the wall of my art classroom. I was looking around the walls one day and saw this piece by someone caled "Whatshername Mistry" and was like "I LOVE IT!" Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed the fic, thank you very much for reviewing - this is probably my only fic ever which doesn't have a happy ending!
it's sad and yet happy a very good mix i say, so it's brillant.
Author's Response: Aw, thanks, I'm really glad you enjoyed it.
that was amazingly good.
Author's Response: Thank you!
OMG.. that was AMAZING!!!! Damn, i wish i could write like that, i never have been all that good at it.. but its coming along.. hopefully! omgomg.. soo good!!!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks. And don't worry, just keep practising, and you'll get better all the time! Really. I write all the time, and I'm still improving all the while (or, I think I am, anyway, and looking back at some of my older stuff, I KNOW I am). I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Just keep practising, yeah? =D
i love sirius!!! and i love this fic too!!
one thing though...
Harry will have to spend his life with his Aunt and Uncle, who happen to detest what he is.
this thought shows that sirius knows that the dursleys wont treat harry properly, but in the third book, he hesitates when asking harry if he wanted to live with him, thinking that harry had a lovely time with the dursleys.
yeah, so now im going to add you in my favourite authors list... i can't believe it that i never added you before! *curses herself* anyways, contiue writing such good fics. =)
Author's Response: Wow, I'm really honoured to be on your favourites list! No, really I am. Thank you. I think, in the third book, after so long, Sirius was very unsure of himself, he hadn't been able to get to know Harry, he doubted himself and their relationship very much at that point. Sirius is very complicated ... I think he was just really self-doubting to be honest. But still ... it's a good point. Thanks for reviewing!
wow like I Said this is so good and I could make a really good poem about this. well here it is
but what could be happy about that?
my friends are dead, or should be
or hate me
I don't get it
but at least I'm not alone
but no one knows,
that is until now.
he is new,
but he knows the truth
and he is the same as me.
he was betrayed,
and she was framed
they had no reason to be their
yet they were.
who ever said the truth would set you free,
was wrong, very wrong.
instead it brought me here,
it seems like things would be worse
a cough that was a sign of death,
and a kiss that tore us apart,
I guess i didn't love him but in a place so bad
how could one be sure?
his name was Sirius.
she has been kissed,
and he is still imprisoned.
all he has left of her is two words
tada what do you think? much longer then the one i wrote For "the things I do for L.O.V.E" but i think it was better don't you
Author's Response: WOW, that's so good! Thank you! Honestly, I don't know what to say except THANK YOU!
So sad, but so good!
Author's Response: =) Thanks, I'm glad you like it ... I don't normally write stuff so sad, but I guess this is the exception...
what no that was so sad OMG I could so write a poem about this but that is so sad it's kinda like James and lily they never really loved each other but then when the fall in love and get married they die it makes me sad to think of them. this fic was so bood
Author's Response: Thanks ... a poem is a nice idea, but please don't feel obliged to do anything on my account! I'm still realing that you wrote one of Iola's for me!
A little strange, but very good. I like the two different POVs.
I wonder if Sirius really did have someone to help him figure out using the mantra of I'm innocent.
You did a great job with this one and I will be back to read more later.
Author's Response: Thanks very much. I wondered that too, I guess that's partly how this came about ... although I'm not 100% sure, it was quite a while ago now. Thanks again for the review, I hope I enjoy any other stuff you read, hear from you again then!
Awww... poor Mistry 10/10
Author's Response: Yeah, I know ... I don't usually write such sad stuff! Thanks very much for your 10, I shall treasure it. *Treasures*
I absolutely adore this story! It's very original, and I'm quite sure that nobody has ever written anything like it before!
I had to laugh at the part that said: "As a girl, I used to dream of rugged looking guys with stubble, and leather jackets. Who had an Irish lilt in their voice, and a secret love of ballroom dancing." I once wrote a story (not on this site; it's not fanfic) featuring a man who fits that description exactly!
Anyway, this is very well-written, and although it's a brief one-shot, I think we all got a really good idea of the kind of person Mistry was. I really liked her as a character. The thing about how they hadn't "always loved each other" was good, too-- it made the story seem more grounded in realism and not like most fluffy bits of romance.
The ending was sad, but bittersweet in a way-- with him resolving to think about his innocence.
Your writing style is very good, the voice that you use is both casual and very descriptive. All in all, lovely job!
Author's Response: Wow, thankee so much! I'm really happy with this review, I love your style so much! And the thing about the rugged Irish ballroom dancer is kind of creepy. Thanks so much (again) for this review, I think it's just about made my day! Especially after the maths test I just had ... *shudder*
...very well done though.
Author's Response: Phew, thanks, for a minute there I was worried you weren't going to compliment my genius ... No, kidding, I didn't mean that. Thanks very much for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed it. =D
That is just cruel...
F***ing Fudge, F***ing dementors, F***ing Azkaban...I think I'm going to go write, in detail, a story about someone who blows Azkaban up. and the F***ing Ministry. and the F***ing dementors.
Author's Response: Well. That's nice and graphic. Thanks for your ... um ... passionate review. I agree with most of it. Let me know when you write that story. It sounds hilarious.
aww.. that was sad...
Author's Response: RIP padfoot, exactly. And yes, it was sad. Sorry. But at least he dies happy(ish).
oooooh, poor Sirius! You just had to, well, not kill her off, but 'get rid of' Mistry like that! *sniff*
Author's Response: I know, I felt horrible doing it, but ... it would never have ended well, would it? *also sniffs*. Thanks for reviewing, anyway! Now, back to that Physics coursework ... *snore*
Very good story! I thought it was really good, yet sad, and is very realistic to what I beleve is Azkaban life.
Author's Response: Thank you! I agree, it is quite sad. But as you said ... It IS in Azkaban! Thanks again for your review.