I really like the way that this story is told. The *storyteller* lets out information really gradually, and this works well. I also like the use of first person in this...it's a really well written poem. Well done! :)
Is there going to be another one? :p
Author's Response: :) Thank you! And, as for your question, it all depends on what the storyteller wants to tell me. As you said, she lets out information *very* gradually.
Oooh.... I like this one. Very good. Unique approach, how you set it from a storyteller's point of view... And the "I have forgotten" part was marvelous.
Truly a masterpiece. You must keep at it.
Author's Response: This is the first one I've written in awhile, so I'm glad you liked it :) I have two other poems up, if you like my work and want to check them out.