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Name: cskohl (Signed) · Date: 10/30/09 14:05 · For: The Answers
I just wanted to say a job well done. It was something that I did not expect and it kept me reading and on the edge of my seat.

Name: monchichi (Signed) · Date: 03/06/08 13:10 · For: Chapter 17 - The Sacrifice

For the love of all that is good and pure post the final chapter!!!


I just wanted to say that your post Final Battle storyline for Ron was the most interesting I've read for the character. I really liked Ron in France, fighting and growing on his own.

And I have to admit, as R/Hr is the only ship I really care about, I'm glad to see the two of them working things out.

Name: monchichi (Signed) · Date: 02/13/08 1:49 · For: Chapter 17 - The Sacrifice
Enjoying the story. When do we get to see more?

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 01/14/08 19:24 · For: Chapter 17 - The Sacrifice
mr. weasly no way wow. s0o much has happened in once chapter. i can't belive aberforth died

Name: MWorth (Signed) · Date: 01/12/08 21:41 · For: Chapter 16 - The Lager
Are you going to continue this story, It is realy good and chilling.....

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 08/28/07 16:55 · For: Chapter 16 - The Lager
wow your description of the consentration camp gave me chills. really you described teh horror of it perfectly. I wonder what grimwald was doing. hmm a lot of ideas jump to mind. I'm so happy for ron and hermione i think it's gonna work out this time.

Name: Macerator (Anonymous) · Date: 08/20/07 9:27 · For: Chapter 15 - The Runaround
Great story...but are you ever going to update?

Author's Response: Yes, I guess I should finish posting the chapters. I forgot I hadn't done that on MNFF. S.

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 07/15/07 21:10 · For: Chapter 15 - The Runaround
ok a lot of things first of all cool coats and good thinking from titov. Second of all strangly i find that somehow remus going to church makes a lot of sence. Then america oh my god so many things happened there. that patton guy seemes fishy as did the four commanders that greatted them in the begining. As for barr i waonder why he killed himself. what is that adress. oh so many questions i really hope you update soon. It was a great chapter though.

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 07/15/07 16:01 · For: Chapter 14b - The Search (Part II)
is bill ok? i hope so rather wicked of titov to laugh if you ask me. I wonder what harry is up to i have a vague idea but i want to read more before i make any big predictions. This was a shorter chapter then most but it was good. i liked the *The Hitchhiker’s Guide to the Galaxy by Douglas Adams quote by the way.

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 07/15/07 15:50 · For: Chapter 14 - The Search
oh i'm so happy for charlie and tre they really deserve it, except for the-having-to-be-apart-because-of-what-happened-to-bill part. as for bill poor him but it was all to good to last besides this way we get more story yay. I hope harry is able to find a cure i guess you would cal it. As for allen he is one presistant pest. great chapter.

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 07/14/07 17:02 · For: Chapter 13 - The Inquiry
ok i'm lost this thiong is way to complicated where did harry go and please don't let him have to kill bill. But happier subjects first it's great that ron is going back to hogwarts and that he is taking his studies so siriusly. As for harry being able to make hair grow that is frickin' cool. umbridge's trial was the best and i couldn't be appier with the restults. As for how harry handled the trail he was amazing only the last bit of information is worring me. great job as always.

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 07/14/07 16:11 · For: Chapter 12 - The Admission
that was a strange dream but the conversation went rather well. I wonder what ron wants to talk about. The whole album sharing expirience was great, and i'm glad both harry and di had help ddealing with it.I'm glad charlie is happy he deserves it. As for taking mrs. black's portrit done i loved the idea it was a great gift, and harry's idea for a wedding gift is also really good. lovley chapter.

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 07/14/07 15:40 · For: Chapter 11 - The Ball
Big things going on in the minestry i hope this proudfoot guy is good. As for the muggle prime minister i must say he handeled the whole situation rather well, even when he did deserve it. The ball was great and i loved the idea that alumni were able to atend, having ron there was also a bonus. I siriusly want some hermione interogation time i don't get her. But i'm more worried about allen and billy their prying and whaterver Blast has planned for them. I smell trouble. Great chapter though! = )

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 07/14/07 14:57 · For: Chapter 10 - The Sting
I am really bigining to pity amanda she has tough work ahead of her, and billy and allen don't seem like the type to settel down. I am dying to know what went on between hermione and ron siriusly. The new defence teacher seems quite cool. And i can't belive that remus is getting married i'm so happy for him, he couldn't have made a better choice for a best man. I must say this is the first fic where i had to stop and take notes so that i could remember everything i wanted to say, so many things happen it's unbelivable. great chapter and i bet the rest are great too.

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 07/14/07 2:17 · For: Chapter 9 – Rebellion, Relations, Reunions and Recovery
ok so many things, first off what they did in the minystry was really rather smart. second what is going on with hermione and harry well more with hermione i'm dying to understand that better. The big get together was great, i can't belive luna has chaned so much she is different but i think i rather like this change. As for Di that was brave facing fred like that i just wish he had delt with it a bit better but he didn;t do as bad a she could have. Besides Di is going through a lot i hope she findes relife soon. as for allen i have a premonition that his role in the story is far far from over. well great cgapter i really enjoyed it.

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 07/14/07 1:42 · For: Chapter 8 - A Seer and Two Puzzles
Ok fine i relly thought that nettie was ron's perfect match but i guess i got caught up in the moment now i see how that couldn't hve worked. but even then i'm still rather fond of nettie and i'm glad ron did get to spend time with her. Well a couple things more first i'm glad allen is no longer a threat but i'm really starting to worry abiut whatever diane might have read, not to meantion what really happened to ginny in the chamber. great chapter though.

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 07/14/07 1:04 · For: Chapter 7 - Resolution and Recovery
i am so glad neither Ron nor Charlie died you have no idea how happy that made me. I must say nettie is the best and ron better wait for her if he knows waht is good for him. I love hermione but nettie is the one for him. As for charlie I'm really glad he woke up. I also hope that hermione and ron can go back to being the good friends they used to be. And i wonder who hermione was talking about. Anyway great chapter. I think i can read one more before they lecture me about how wrong staying up late is.

Name: Fiffer Haliwell (Signed) · Date: 07/14/07 0:29 · For: Chapter 6 - It Just Doesn't Make Sense!
I wanted to give you both a huge compliment and an apology. First the compliment, your stories are amazing, they are interesting and funny, and every thing else a good story should be. You write brilliantly and i am a great fan of your work. That said i should apologise for being such a lousy fan. I loved your first story harry potter and the forgotten solution and when i started reading this one i loved it too. However a bunch of things prevented me from reading for a while and soon the story ws put at the back of my head. It is something i regret because as i said i really do love this story, So this is a promise from me to you. I will catch up and review every step of the way and encourage you to keep going just like i should have done in the first place. Sorry it took me so long.

sincerly fiffer

Name: LRS078 (Signed) · Date: 06/04/07 21:10 · For: Chapter 15 - The Runaround
Another good chapter....can't wait to hear more about the grindlewald era/history. Like the references to our "muggle" mysteries. Keep up the great writing

Name: pandafan81 (Signed) · Date: 05/28/07 1:31 · For: Chapter 2 - A Parting of Ways
I'm utterly heartbroken over Ron and Hermione's break-up. At the moment, I see Hermione as completely out-of-characeter... but we also have to look at how the events in the last story might have changed her. And yes, she is fighting with Mrs. Weasley (they are so similar). But I'm not sure Hermione would break it off for the reasons she has. I see her and Ron having a huge row over something completely insignificant, and not talking, maybe even breaking up over it, but I don't see how Hermione would think she doesn't belong with Ron and his family. They've always taken her in and loved her as one of their own. This perplexes me, and I do hope that they can recconcile soon!

I do like, at the end, where you have Dianne contemplating the situation with Hermione. It asks a lot of questions that are concerning me. Which in itself, makes me feel better, knowing that you are aware of the reader's anxieties, and projecting them onto another character.

I like that Harry is following up on his promise to take Ginny away. And that Remus and Tonks are accompanying them. However, you never explained where Remus had been (Harry had told Dumbledore's portrait in the last chapter that Remus was missing). I love Remus dearly, so I'm definately glad he's back and safe (and able to vacation with Tonks), but an explanation of where he was would be nice.

Harry and Hermione moving into the head-boy/girl suite...
Oh dear. I'm afraid you've fallen into a very commonly used cliche in the Harry Potter fanfic world. There is no evidence whatsoever in canon that the head boy and girl recieve their own rooms. Not to say that there couldn't possibly be such a thing, we just haven't seen evidence of any suites existing. I caution you about using such a device in a fanfic. Head boy/girl suites are often vehicles for nothing more than an opportunity for uninterrupted necking (not that I'm complaining about that!) I just caution you from following the same ol' cliches... But knowing you, and having read much of your work, you probably have something different up your sleeve.

Alerting the portrait in Scrimgeour’s old office, (that connected to the Muggle PM’s office,)
I really don't think that the clarification in the parenthesis is necessary. Anyone who's read HBP will know about the little painting that alerts the Muggle PM. Insead, you ought to give, perhaps, a physical despription of the painting, to refresh people's memories... "Alerting the portrait of a squat little man in a powdered wig in Scrimgeour’s old office...

Even after the horrific ‘disarming’ the Death Eaters had suffered, only a handful provided any useful information.
*giggles* I liked the "disarming" portion here. I had forgotten about the arms of the Death Eaters being severed. Great pun!

“Yes, just last Thursday, thanks heavens. That’s my reason for intruding here.”
"thanks" ought to be thank

“You have nothing, Allen. I, one the other hand, have everything.”
"one" ought to be on

When they returned to their ‘camp’ two hours later, Remus told the girls not to get any ideas, but only Tonks appeared disappointed.
Tonks isn't the only one dissapointed!

In some ways, he admitted, he was surprised they had lasted this long, in others, he hoped they would be together for life. (Ron and Hermione had agreed to hide their break-up from Harry and Ginny until they returned, lest it ruin their holiday.)
Again, I don't think this explanation is necessary. We already know that Ron and Hermione have been keeping their break-up a secret.

Hi Di!
Sorry I missed you visit.

"you" should be your

She also to them that Ron had left the country right after they did, with Charlie and Tré, and no one had heard from him directly since then.
"to" should be told

Ginny said she hoped they would all remained friends, but Hermione’s assurances were less than convincing.
two options here:
1. ...she hoped they would all remain friends... or
2. ...she hoped they all remained friends...
Personally, I think option 1 sounds best, but either would work.

One last note, you seem to have left out a scene change marker at the end. You end the scene with Diane sitting in the window well in Gryffindor Tower, and then it merges into Harry and Ginny's confrontations with Ron and Hermione. One of your customary -|-|- would suffice!

I know it may seem that I'm being overly critical of your work, but honestly, I love your story, and only want it to be the best it can be. The fact that you are testing my comfort zone with characterization, shows me that you are diving into character development. As unpleased as I am of the seemingly break up of our classic trio, it shows that people move on, make new friends, and loose track of old friends. As heart breaking as it is, it's life. Of course, I would definately not be sad if they all got back together and lived happily ever after at the end... my fairy-tale-loving-heart does rule me at times!

Author's Response: Hi pandafan, glad to hear from you. Thank you for the notes, and especially the spelling errors. I read me works over a number of times, but probably should get beta. S.

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