Nicely done! You stuck to your one point and wrote it out very well! If you have the time, please check out my story to see if you like it! Thanks! ♥
Wow that was really good!
O_O I love it.
Somehow, this story is so strong it really pulled me into it, not a common thing. And somehow, you managed the building of intensity with a flair that made it just work, so the last line (the time) completely makes a simple, but perfect ending.
There's a truly amazing style to your writing in this story. So yeah - I love it.
This is one of the most creative and orginal stories I've read. I love how you used the ticking of the clock to show the reader how many decisions Snape is making in a short amount of time.
This line confused me: Perhaps Dumbledore is right. Perhaps love is the strongest of all magic. You are talking about how the curse is attacking the heart and brain, then Snape thinks this. I lost the connection. It may just be me *shrugs* Also same line is Snape changing his way of thinking or is he being sacaristic?
Good job, it was an enjoyable read.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. With that line I was trying to explain what made the curse so powerful--that it was made from love. Not exactly healthy love (more like the love of a woman scorned, who while hating her cheating husband also loves him) but love none the less. I was trying to indicate that Snape was considering changing his mind about Dumbledore's view. In this story, Snape has never been completely convinced by Dumbledore, but this is one piece of evidence he is willing to consider. Again, thanks for your response!