Ack! Hailey, I was going to do a Wicked fic! You beat me to it! Ah, well, I suppose I won't be mad at you, since it's good.
Well, I have to say, if I had to choose one character from Harry Potter to use in a songfic of "Defying Gravity," it would be anyone but Severus Snape. You really pulled it off nicely. It's interesting how, in Wicked, the whole point of the show is that Elphaba isn't evil, but you used the song in a different way, as the reason Snape became evil.
I do have a teeny bit of concrit- I was really confused on the dialogue and who was speaking at what time. Technically, you should start a new paragraph every time a new person speaks. And when Snape says, "Evans, do me a favor," it ought to be favour. Don't worry, I miss British spellings all the time. Otherwise, it was really perfect. I give it 10/10!!!! ~megan~
PS: I love the last line- " 'Tell my father... tell him... tell him I'm defying gravity.' " Bloody brilliant!
Author's Response: 'Ello, Megan! Thanks! I wrote this a long time ago, so it's times like these that I just want to go through every chapter of every story and edit edit edit! I love the last line myself, so I'm happy you like it! As for Elphie and Severus being different, I really didn't think they were too unsimilar. Misunderstood, gifted...I thought they were a bit alike! But I also wanted to stress the differences, as well. Thanks again! -Hailey
Wow.... You kept this one quiet! It is great, who knew you would be able to get into the mind of someone so unlike yourself, you did it justice like few other could. Go hailey!
10/10 al least lol.
Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, it was pretty hard getting into the mind of Severus Snape, but I think I pulled through pretty well. Thank you sooooo much!! Can I rate reviews? If so, '10/10 at least!' end of quote. lol.
Interesting take on Snape...good of you to address the time when he was once loyal to Voldemort instead of ignoring it. I liked it! Very sad, too.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I find Snape's live absolutely fascinating!
Author's Response: Two years later and still editing: l find Snape's life*
great story, but a few mistakes in the lyrics.
This is a minor one, but the words are "losing love I guess I'VE lost" (not "I'd lost")
This one might be just something that you had to change because it didn't fit the plot, but I figured I'd mention it anyway. It is "Nobody in all of Oz" not "Nobody, in all their flaws"
Please trust me, I have the written words from the CD
Anyway, terrific story, and keep it up!
Author's Response: I know very well the 'Oz' lyrics, I just changed it to make it more realistic. I am VERY familiar with the lyrics, in fact. I own everything there is to own from Wicked, including the CD and music book. Thanks for trying to help, though.