Reviewer: Lupinpatronus
Date: 01/10/07 11:21
Chapter: To Choose the Third

Hey, I'm glad I decided to do the Badger Review Circle, 'cause I was lucky enough to stumble across this little gem. Usually I'm not one for dark/angsty fics, but this one certainly had a great setup. I was very impressed.

First of all, I absolutely loved how you paralleled Lily's death using Ginny and Perry. That was brilliant. I've seen a lot of similarities between Ginny and Harry's relationship and Lily and James'. I've always wondered if those similarities hold some kind of significance for the events of book seven, and you've done a great job taking that theory and fleshing it out. What I love best about what you did with this is that you had Ginny do something a little different than Lily; a nice twist to the expected path of fate.

The piece with Tom's return was certainly a surprise. I can't imagine that very many people reuse the 16-year-old Riddle in their stories as having returned from someone else's memory (I've never seen that before anyway). Very original, and if you continue the story I'd love to hear more background of how this occured.

Speaknig of which, I really think this fic has a lot of potential to be drawn out. I know you only planned it as a one-shot, but wow. There are so many places this could go. I'm especially interested in knowing where Ginny is planning to look for Harry and Ron.

The only part of your story that I was a little iffy about was the beginning with the lengthy list of deceased wizards. Although I think that was good for setting the tone of a dark/angsty fic, there was just something about it that seemed almost like overkill. However, your story's meant to be dark, so I won't say you should change it.

I found your writing style to be very differnt from other stories I've read. You tend to be pretty heavy on dialogue and narrated thought, and a little light on descriptive stuff. I thought that was nice for keeping the story moving, but at times it felt like I was reading a list of "Ginny did this, Tom did that... Ginny did this, and Tom did that." Maybe a little more description in certain places would eliminate that feeling. Of course, I may be the only person who feels that way.

I hope my more critical comments haven't irked you in any way, and instead helped out some. Naturally, of course, it's your story and so you have no obligations to alter it.

Overall, I think you did a great job with this one-shot. I hope someday you can come back to it and let these events unfold a bit more. I'd love to see where you can take this!

Author's Response: wow- what a great review! Like I said before, it will probably stay a one-shot for now, but you never know for later... as for the description, it is something that I've been working on, so thanks for reminding me!

Author's Response: wow- what a great review! Like I said before, it will probably stay a one-shot for now, but you never know for later... as for the description, it is something that I've been working on, so thanks for reminding me!

Reviewer: Nadia Malfoy
Date: 09/29/06 15:54
Chapter: To Choose the Third

Oh, my gosh, that was great!!!!!!!!!!! Please, Please, please update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Glad you liked it so much! I think this stands pretty well on its own, but like I said I might eventually make it into a chaptered story.

Reviewer: mrsweasley
Date: 09/29/06 14:29
Chapter: To Choose the Third

i liked it. keep going.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it! This one, at least, is probably staying a one-shot, but who knows? Maybe when I'm done with Late Bloomer I'll make a chaptered story of it.

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