Reviews For Amanda
Reviewer: BeautyInTheBreakdown
Date: 09/29/06 5:10
Chapter: Amanda

First off... OMG I LOVE IT! *ahem* now, I have oficially joined the ranks of the teary-eyed readers. The story was absolutely fabulous.

You did an amazing job getting the characterization and the reaction to Amanda's death. Spot on. I've had a classmate pass away before and you could not have gotten the situation closer to the truth. I think Beth mentioned that she couldn't figure out Amanda's relatonship with Remus and if he wasn't close friends, why was he so sad and confused in the beginning. But once again, you got the characterization perfect... from my point of view at least. When a classmate passes away so young, it hits you hard. I reacted similarly to Remus *if not, I took it worse* even though I had only met the boy once.

I love how the story is writen from Amanda's point of veiw. It gives the reader a very good view of the situation. You can see everything that is going on. It's also nice for a bit of a change in perspective. I rarely read stories that are told by someone other than the people in it.

Sirius and Remus. You're fantastic at writing this ship. Who'd have thought I would ever be a Sirius/Remus shipper? not me, that's for sure. I liked how you managed to have two plots in this story. One of Amanda and Remus' need to talk at her service, and then With Sirius and Remus getting together. It's so perfect how you mention remus feeling better just at the sight of Sirius. It totally does make you feel better just seeing someone you care for.

You wrote everything perfectly. I'm jealous... why can't I do that? So this is another fabulous story by Harald that I will be adding to my favourites list. Great job. I loved it. Did I mention that yet?

Author's Response: Gabby!!! *tackles* Teary eyed readers please stand on this side of the room, thank you. Sorry, couldn't help it. Thanks for liking how I portrayed the reactions to her death, and I'm sorry you had to go through that yourself. It was a hard postion to get myself into, but I like how it all turned out. Sirius/Remus how can't you love them? I think they're a perfect couple they balance each other out really nicely. Is was about to make this story Ron/Hermione, but then I was like noooo. I don't think i wrote everything perfectly, but thanks for saying it. *huggles* Thanks for the review!!!

Reviewer: Marauder by Midnight
Date: 09/28/06 19:43
Chapter: Amanda

I did tell you this story made me cry right? *sigh*

When I first clicked this story, I have to admit I was a bit curious about the title. I did a double-take on the category. Surely a Remus/Sirius couldn't be titled Amanda without making it a threesome, could it?

When I read the letter, I was even more wary. Who is this mysterious Amanda? And why is she featured in a Remus/Sirius story? I was going crazy - no dead person can influence a Remus/Sirius story. No one.

And you proved me so damn wrong. And I loved it.

Suicide isn't something I like reading in fan fiction. It comes too uncomfortably close to the problems in real life that I'm trying to escape through fan fiction. Plus I've seen too many stories where suicide is abused atrociously. Here, I can't quite place my feelings about how it's treated. The reaction to Amanda's death isn't as tender or sensitive as I'd like it to be, but that's real life for you; not everyone shows remorse when someone dies, tragically. I was more interested, though, in Remus' feelings toward her death. I know he was shocked and saddened by her loss, but it wasn't until the very end did I realise exactly how much he missed her and how much he appreciated her. At the table in the morning, he seems pained, but the emotions weren't strong enough to make me realise that wow, he truly was a great friend to her. It seemed like he was just part of the majority of the school - saddened and shocked by a loss.

Also, James' and Sirius' jokes were a nice touch to such a somber moment. I'm glad you didn't go so far as to have them make fun of her death. It makes it easier to forgive them for treating such a topic so casually. “I’m a monster.” especially made me laugh.

The scene in Transfiguration seemed a bit awkward. However, given the situation, McGonagall's discomfort was well-explained. Her explanation just seemed a bit unnecessary. Why did she tell the class about the deaths if she was pretty sure everyone knew about it anyway? By putting it into words, especially from a teacher, could really make a big impact on what people feel. Did Remus feel any differently after hearing this "proclamation?"

I'm just a bit confused about Remus' relationship with Amanda. At first, it seemed like they were really close. But then, Remus seems shocked after finding out he was to write a eulogy for her service; he didn't even know her that well. However, from the eulogy itself, it does show, once again, that Remus is a close friend of Amanda's. I wonder why Remus didn't consider himself a close friend when he first spoke to McGonagall. I would've loved to see more scenes with Amanda and Remus to give me an idea of how close they were. She seems like a fun person, vowing to get Remus and Sirius together. Another scene with her wouldn't have hurt your story at all (though I don't know where you might've fit it in).

Sirius in this story was a refreshing character. He wasn't the ladies' man at all; rather, he was a deep character who was sweet and soft with Remus. I love how you depicted the two of them working together and revealing their feelings to each other. I can see how they both shared strength and both supported each other. I know that the love between them in this story is strong and presumably everlasting. Wonderful way of showing it!

Last, but certainly not least, I loved how you incorporated a third person, a non-Marauder, to show Remus and Sirius the light, so to speak. You chose an OC to reveal truth to the characters, an OC whom everyone would overlook and underestimate. Her death, though tragic, helped everyone in the end; a moment of despair brought on many moments of love and tenderness. Very unexpected and very beautiful. Your ending particularly was very powerful. Remus' speech was short, but it was so obvious he meant every word he said and much more. Amanda's last comment caused me to shiver.

Beautifully done, Harald. Thank you for a delightful and heart-felt read.

-Beth

Author's Response: Beth, you validated the story AND reviewed! You're too much, really! Ok, where do I start? At the beginning I guess... It's funny when you said that no dead person could influence Remus/Sirius, but in "Death Rose" is another dead woman that influences. Why am I writing about this stuff? Maybe I need therapy. Oh, right, I'm already in therapy, silly me. That explains A LOT. People don't react to Amanda's death as much because they didn't really know her. Sure they knew who she was, but they didn't talk to her - ever. The only person who ever talked to her was Remus, and that's why she concidered him her friend. Remus was nice to her because he knew what she went through every day, but he didn't concider her his friend. That's why he's so shocked when they tell him he should write the eulogy. To Remus they only talked casually, but it meant the world to her. McGonagall announced Amanda's death because it was her duty as a teacher. It didn't matter if the student knew or not, she had to tell them as their teacher. At least that's what I think someone in her position would do. I'm glad you like my characterization of Sirius. I hate it when he's written like a ladie's man (for more than one reason) I really don't think he was a skirt-chaser. Thank you so much for this wonderful review, Beth!!!

Reviewer: superstar
Date: 09/28/06 19:41
Chapter: Amanda

omg that made me cry.
ps. sorry bout the 1st review no clue wha happened.

Author's Response: Don't worry, thanks for the review!

Reviewer: blackpaw93
Date: 09/28/06 19:41
Chapter: Amanda

That made me cry. Honestly. I know what Remus was going through, and you told it beautifully. It even made me shiver during the scene with Amanda, and when I re-read the letter she wrote at the beggining, and then it all fell together for me. Great writing.

Author's Response: Aww, thank you. It really means a lot everything you said. Especially since you went through something similar. Thank you so much for the review!

Reviewer: superstar
Date: 09/28/06 19:29
Chapter: Amanda





































































*yay 1st reviewer*that was really well written.i loved it it made me cry:..(





Author's Response: This was oddly ordered, but thanks for the review!

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