Reviewer: Gabriel Black
Date: 07/01/09 3:05
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

Excellent poem!

Reviewer: smileyriley121
Date: 07/16/08 16:36
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

Wow, this is very, very good. You really see behind the character when you write. That is what I think a lot of people lack when they write villians. Great job!

Reviewer: undesirable_number1
Date: 04/26/08 14:20
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

Wow... This is a really great poem. I love how you described Malfoy's smirk as a masquerade. Masterful!

Reviewer: Ophelia Quinn
Date: 04/18/08 15:48
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

Wow.. this is really good. ^_^

Reviewer: rainydaze
Date: 11/25/07 23:03
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

i. love. it.

it is soo good!! (i know you probably know that already, since it won first place and all...)

oh my goodness its so..perfect! yay for you!

Reviewer: theworldonlyknows
Date: 11/04/07 9:31
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

That is fantastic, i love it, you are really amazing.

Reviewer: tickled_pink
Date: 10/27/07 21:16
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

Aw, this was beautiful! It's sad without being pathetically angsty, which is always hard to pull off, and you've done it spectacularly! :D

Tickled Pink

Reviewer: Tom Piper
Date: 08/29/07 19:11
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

That was an amazingly touching poem , I wish I could write like that! I gather that it is from Draco's point of view and being a Draco fan I congratulate you on doing him justice!

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 08/17/07 18:43
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

This is an amazing poem. I loved the flow, and the 'Curse of being a Slytherin" lines. They were very powerful. You have made his emotions quite clear, but still somewhat hidden. The last line was my favorite because it reminded me of the Poem I wrote in Nothing Close to me, called My life is his for the Taking. It reminded me of how Voldemort controls people and steals their lives. Very good job, this was out-standing.

Author's Response: Thank you very much.

Reviewer: BloodRayne
Date: 07/23/07 6:00
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

Godric! That was amazing! Simply stunning! I definitly won't forget this poem, ever! It's beautiful! I love your word choices, and the rhyme scheme is genius. I loved it!

Author's Response: Glad you won't forget it. :)

Reviewer: love_is_torture
Date: 06/15/07 1:18
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

Hey Roxy!
This is like THE best poem I have ever read. Draco is my secret obbsetion and if I thought he was a bad guy, I would definately see the good side of him after reading this lovely poem! I really do thank everyone that writes Draco as a good guys, it really makes me see him through his shell. Great work Roxy
*hugs*
~Claire~

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad I could satisfy your obsession. :)

Reviewer: MrsRuebeusHagridDursley
Date: 04/06/07 15:36
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

Wow. That definately fit the critera for the prompt! Very convincing. Now, I can just feel Draco's anguish and sympathize with him. Excellent Job!

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you like it! :)

Reviewer: Heiress_of_Insanity_
Date: 04/01/07 21:44
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

Wow, this poem has me convinced that Draco is merely staged in a bad light...=) Sorry I couldn't review sooner! Excellent piece of poetry, I can see why it won (joint) first place! 10/10!~

Monty

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad I could change your mind about Draco. :)

Reviewer: Ron x Hermione
Date: 02/18/07 17:10
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

Wow, that was a really good of interpretation of Draco's feelings on that HBP night. Very good rhming scheme that you had going on, and it worked throughout the entire thing. Great poem!

~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much, Lindsey!

Reviewer: Periwinkle
Date: 10/12/06 19:58
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

Hey Rosie!

I was browsing the Poetry category and your poem summary stood out to me, which is something that doesn't happen all too commonly as poem summaries are usually only a sentence long.

The content of your poem is interesting. You depict a different Draco than the one that is known to us via Jo's books. Your Draco is quite blunt with himself and strange in the way that he acknowledges his mistakes and the effect they have had on others. I don't see this as OOC, because Draco is the sort of person that might think completely unlike he acts.

Your thoughts were nicely formulated -- the poem was chronological and had a definite beginning, middle and end. Most poems take on a dissimilar style that yours' does, it is refreshing to see a poem that doesn't have a creative wording and stanza position.

The title is highly appropriate and repeating it in the poem itself only reinforces what you want to get across to the readers.

A few constructive nitpicks:

I donít really think that Iíll do it

This sentence doesn't sit too highly with me. The 'don't', 'really' and 'think' make it too casual; it distracts from the powerful mood the rest of the poem evokes. It is a rather weak line with those words -- I strongly recommend you chose alternate ones, strong words.

He never got caught as a bad guy

Again, the rather American term 'guy' detracts from the quality. Also, that phrase: 'bad guy' is quite common, and has been used so much in my opinion, that when placed in poems such as yours, it only makes the context less potent.

You've done a great job with your poem, the only real trouble I had was with those lines.

Overall, fantastic effort -- it really payed off! =)


Author's Response: Hey, I'm glad my poem stood out to you. Thanks so much for the review! I completely understand what you mean with those lines and I think I might just go and change them :) Thanks again, ~ Roxy

Reviewer: PotterFan22
Date: 09/23/06 15:57
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

oh....my.....gosh....
THAT WAS THE GREATEST POEM EVER! It was SOOOOOO amazing! Malfoy's one of my favorite characters and it's so great to see things in his POV. It was so interesting!
This was so well written!!! I absolutely LOVE it!
~Chloe
p.s. Sorry for the hyperish review!

Author's Response: lol, a hyperish review is better than no review! I'm glad you liked my little poem. It was interesting to write as well as before I wrote it I wasn't really an innocent!Draco believer... now I've been convinced. I hope we see him again... Thanks for the review! ~ Roxy

Author's Response: lol, a hyperish review is better than no review! I'm glad you liked my little poem. It was interesting to write as well as before I wrote it I wasn't really an innocent!Draco believer... now I've been convinced. I hope we see him again... Thanks for the review! ~ Roxy

Reviewer: purplepanther
Date: 09/23/06 14:30
Chapter: My life is not mine to live

wow that was really good! i liked it a lot and seeing things from malfoys point of view was very interesting! I hope you write more

Author's Response: Thanks for the Review. I've got other fictions on MNFF but this was my first attempt at poetry. Glad you liked it! ~ Roxy

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