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Name: Lily Cambers (Signed) · Date: 10/27/08 22:33 · For: Chapter 11: Frustrating Truth
I hope he tells her soon!!!! I love this story!! Keep up the good work!!!

Author's Response: I will!

Name: potterfan_nimisha (Signed) · Date: 10/27/08 13:30 · For: Chapter 11: Frustrating Truth
u r killing me!!!!! update already will you??????

Author's Response: Any day now it should be up!

Name: Kaity (Signed) · Date: 10/26/08 0:53 · For: Chapter 4: Dangerous Liaison
Yay! this chapter was much better than the last! I'm finding that Harry as the 'mysterious stranger' is very nice... (fangirlish of me?!) I'm also very much linking your creation of Kip... I can alreadly see how this cheeky character is going to liven things up!

Author's Response: Definitely fangirlish of you! ;D

Name: Kaity (Signed) · Date: 10/26/08 0:41 · For: Chapter 3: Black Cat
makinmagic - I think you've fallen into a (sadly) very common writing mistake: the heroine doesn't have to be beautiful, the hero ruggedly handsome. Jo's Hermione has bushy hair, and no mention is made of her figure. Don't bother writing what the character looks like: we know! We've read the original story! Focus your time on the plot and on the characterization. Draco's glasses = characterization. Harry's looks = hints to his identity, and thus furthers the plot. Your description of Hermione doesn't add to the plot. (Besides, Harry was friends with her for years and never notived what she looked like...)

Sorry if this is sounding so negative. It's frustrating to see a good writer and a good story fall into the traps of using the cliches. Please take this as it is intended: as constructive criticism! (Perhaps this technique will help: when you finish each chapter, read through it and ask: is this scene original? do the descriptions add to the plot? Have I used any cliches? if I cut this out, would the story be cable to continue without it? etc... hope this helps!)

Author's Response: Constructive criticism rocks! So thank you =) And I definitely wrote the first three chapters very quickly and just as something random in the beginning... so I definitely plan on rewriting parts of it when I'm all finished, haha. Thanks for you comments and concerns!

Name: Kaity (Signed) · Date: 10/26/08 0:20 · For: Chapter 2: Emerald Eyes
Hermione is shocked! Ooohh... what will happen? Draco makes me laugh! He seems exactly like an annoying buzzing fly or pestering three-year-old that Hermione just can't seem to shoo away.

Author's Response: Im glad you liked it!

Name: Kaity (Signed) · Date: 10/26/08 0:14 · For: Chapter 1: Gingersnap Cookies
makinmagic323 - this in an intriguing start to the story. I have to say, McGonagall seems a little out of character - the impression I get from JKR's McGonagall is that she'd rather teach the subject herself than let a substandard teacher enter the distinguished halls of Hogwarts! Otherwise, you leave the question of what happened to Harry/Landon hanging very nicely...

Author's Response: There's a reason for McGonagall's strange behavior... ;)

Name: Kaseyx31 (Signed) · Date: 10/23/08 12:41 · For: Chapter 11: Frustrating Truth

Author's Response: Welcome =)

Name: lunarox14 (Signed) · Date: 10/22/08 19:35 · For: Chapter 11: Frustrating Truth
Why must you torture us so? I need to find out what happens! It's killiing me that none of the really good stories like this one have been updated. Harry Potter is my release from the real world at stressful times like now, and this fic is absolutely the best! O pleasepleaseplease update soon, you're killing me here!

Author's Response: I'm thrilled to hear you enjoying my story so much! I'm very glad you like it, and the update sould be any day now when the mods get around to validating it!

Name: hellbound93 (Signed) · Date: 10/21/08 17:52 · For: Chapter 1: Gingersnap Cookies
Great Story.

This is one of the, if not the best story i have read so far. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Amazing Job

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks! =D

Name: wilfen07 (Signed) · Date: 10/20/08 6:20 · For: Chapter 11: Frustrating Truth
I must tell you that I've read a lot of fiction on this site but so far have only two favorites. However, your 'Behind Those Emerald Eyes' makes an illustrous third. I know that you have heard it countless times before but hey I'll say it again "YOU"RE FABULOUS" :)

Author's Response: Why THANK you! I feel so humbled =]

Name: claymor (Signed) · Date: 10/17/08 10:24 · For: Chapter 11: Frustrating Truth
I JUST found this chapter!!! Ughhh!! I am NOT getting any update notices. I know that isn't your fault. It is just very frustrating! This one of my very favorite stories and I have been sad to not see any updates. I hope that you will have an opportunity to update again soon. I am afraid that Draco will do something to Harry before he has a chance to tell Hermoine the truth. That would be bad. I tend to hold on to hope for happy endings though. Looking forward to whatever is next.

Author's Response: This story will definitely have a happy ending, I promise you. However, the entire story will not always be happy at times. Glad you hear you're enjoying my writing! Thanks for letting me know!

Name: ren_a87 (Signed) · Date: 10/16/08 22:56 · For: Chapter 11: Frustrating Truth
I forgot to mention in my last two comments that your Dumbledore is very, very well done. He is probably the best I have seen in the fanfictions I have read in terms of being close to canon! Hope the next chapter is out soon.

By the way, I think Everett will spill the beans but it's going to take a while. He's going to have to talk himself into it several times when he actually goes to tell her and I think she will be frustrated and angry that he lied, but hurt and felt taken advantage of because he knew she was hurting because she was missing him and he didn't reveal himself, but I think eventually that will pass and she'll just be happy that he's back and hopefully we'll have more awesome-ness to come!

Author's Response: Thank you for the comment about my Dumbledore! He is my FAVORITE character, so that was like an uber comment! And I love hearing reviewers' theories as to what Everett will do. Very interesting =)

Name: ren_a87 (Signed) · Date: 10/16/08 22:34 · For: Chapter 10: Rampant Behavior
Ok, I lied. All I have to say is "yay", now going on to the most recent chapter!

Author's Response: Yay!

Name: ren_a87 (Signed) · Date: 10/16/08 22:11 · For: Chapter 9: Part II: Heated Blood
I apologize for ignoring your incessant pleas to review every chapter, but I had been very intent on finding out when Everett unveils his true identity to Harry that I decided to wait until the end despite my guilt! However, I couldn't simply go on at the end of this chapter. Draco absolutely cracked me up especially the obsessive compulsiveness which tracked the amount of hours he was forced to work himself up to raiding Everett's apartment and then how he wasted time cleaning for him! Anyway, just to warn you now, probably won't review again until I get to your last chapter, but then I promise to review every succeeding chapter. I hope Harry returns soon!

Author's Response: Wow, thanks for the lengthy review! I'm glad you're enjoying my writing, and thanks for your comments! I hope you like the rest when it comes!

Name: hedwig4evr (Signed) · Date: 10/14/08 12:12 · For: Chapter 11: Frustrating Truth
I have read this entire story as of yet, and am completely enthralled in it! Great job! Update soon as I NEED to know what is going on!! LOL. Love the story and can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Update should be any day now!

Name: Aikio (Signed) · Date: 10/12/08 10:24 · For: Chapter 11: Frustrating Truth

Great chapter. Thanks for speed writing the chapter. :D

Can't wait for the update...


Author's Response: No problem. Speed writing is one of specialties :] Glad you enjoyed it!

Name: ecic (Signed) · Date: 10/10/08 3:05 · For: Chapter 1: Gingersnap Cookies
ok uh pretty good

Author's Response: thanks =)

Name: BearsEatBeats91 (Signed) · Date: 10/04/08 15:30 · For: Chapter 11: Frustrating Truth
Finally! I hope he actually does tell her...

Author's Response: Hmm... ;D

Name: animagusstag (Signed) · Date: 09/29/08 3:29 · For: Chapter 11: Frustrating Truth
please post more... such long intervals of nothing saddens me. and this is so good

Author's Response: Very very soon, it should be up very very soon.

Name: hlrf (Signed) · Date: 09/28/08 20:14 · For: Chapter 11: Frustrating Truth
OH MY GOSH! This is a wonderful story. I absolutely LOVE it. You need to update quickly. And Everett really needs to tell Hermione, yes, yes, yes! Please update soon!!!

Author's Response: Thank you for the compliment! And chapter 12 should be up any day now.

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