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Name: starfighterpilot (Signed) · Date: 05/05/09 8:18 · For: Chapter 1: Gingersnap Cookies
It's an intriguing enough start to make me want to read on..


Name: doicha27 (Signed) · Date: 05/02/09 13:42 · For: Chapter 12: Hogsmeade Mistakes
makinmagic323,

While I appreciate the difficulty in trying to write a story I want to know why you are turning your good story into a choose-your-own-adventure of sorts.

Why do that? If the readers really wanted to create their own adventure then they would by writing their own fanfic. I would much rather read the story that YOU have to write.

That being said I choose none of the options.

Also, I'd like to say that your story is very interesting and has a good plot. But there are lots of questions that I have (which I have faith that you will answer in some form or another), specifically: how did Ron die and did Ron and Hermione talk about their feelings for each other, does Harry not care for Ginny any more, why doesn't Everett wear glasses (this should probably addressed and I don't know if your other readers have mentioned this and if he does and I'm too stupid to have noticed it then so be it), what happened between Harry and Voldemort, why did Ginny move away from her friends and family, and if Everett really is running away from his past (and I'm 99.9999999% sure he is Harry but I am still leaving the option open for some sort of twist) then why would he come back to Hogwartz and not live in Spain, Greece, or Italy? (Sorry, I just like those countries).

I've gotta say that I really like the way you introduce random minor characters and some very subtle minor character details that are revealed through out the story, like how Draco is now some sort of compulsive neat freak, Harry still messes up his hair (took me a while to realize that one) and some of the random students.

Some of the stuff that I don't like so much: the speed at which emotions change. I am a guy and so this may be the barrier to my understanding, and I am willing to put up with a lot of the emotionality that is involved with this story but sometimes it is ridiculous the speed at which emotions change. For example in this chapter Hermione was happy that Everett finally apologized and said that he didn't have to explain himself. But then he wanted to. And Hermione got really pissed and essentially took the stance "Look just because you don't HAVE to tell me now doesn't mean you get to if you want to".

If she is so concerned about Everett considering her emotions and her position why can't she return the favor?

Anyways I am really enjoying your story so far and hope that you continue it. If you wanna have people vote on what happens in your story I guess that's fine and there's nothing I can do to stop you anyways but please make it your own and keep it your own, you've already worked so hard on the story I don't see why you would let other people hijack it and direct it however they like.

Most of all PLEASE KEEP WRITING YOUR STORY!

Thanks!
doicha27


Name: Thewma (Signed) · Date: 04/28/09 4:03 · For: Chapter 3: Black Cat
Harry is Everett Landon


Name: Thewma (Signed) · Date: 04/28/09 2:01 · For: Chapter 3: Black Cat
Harry is Everett Landon


Name: Thewma (Signed) · Date: 04/28/09 1:52 · For: Chapter 1: Gingersnap Cookies
This is a nice start. I have a feeling it's going to be a good story. Is it completed already?


Name: Kamikaze411 (Signed) · Date: 04/26/09 11:19 · For: Chapter 12: Hogsmeade Mistakes
I pick G, he will both A. Tell hermione, and B. Have a fight with malfoy. I really just want B. to happen because it sounds like fun.

Good story, though, cant wait for Chapter 13


Name: descendia (Signed) · Date: 04/25/09 15:08 · For: Chapter 12: Hogsmeade Mistakes
i choose g. i think he will tell hermione, nad have a fight with malfoy. when is the next chapter coming out. i really want to know what is going to happen!


Name: sianikins (Signed) · Date: 04/24/09 20:05 · For: Chapter 12: Hogsmeade Mistakes
g) A)B) gr8 writing =]


Name: k4c (Signed) · Date: 04/23/09 12:11 · For: Chapter 2: Emerald Eyes
ooooo I'm very much liking this story thus far :) good job :)


Name: k4c (Signed) · Date: 04/23/09 11:56 · For: Chapter 2: Emerald Eyes
ooooo I'm very much liking this story thus far :) good job :)


Name: BrianG (Signed) · Date: 04/22/09 14:11 · For: Chapter 1: Gingersnap Cookies
Ok It did enough to get me to review and continue.


Name: twilightlover (Signed) · Date: 04/15/09 8:35 · For: Chapter 12: Hogsmeade Mistakes
i really like this story!
i cant wait until its finished so i can read the rest! :D


Name: azngurlwidhighlights (Signed) · Date: 04/13/09 21:56 · For: Chapter 12: Hogsmeade Mistakes
OMG!!!! Please hurry and update it soon I really need to keep on reading !!!!!!! O.K. so make "Everett" tell Hermione, get posioned, have a fight with Malfoy, and be kissed if not a little further...HURRY AND UPDATE IT PLEASE!!!!!!! Just don't sack him and don't make him have a mental breakdown. And just telling you, you're a brilliant writer and all, but you've made it really obvious who "Everett" really is. :P


Name: masterwoods (Signed) · Date: 04/11/09 18:23 · For: Chapter 12: Hogsmeade Mistakes
Great story please post soon its been months.


Name: masterwoods (Signed) · Date: 04/11/09 6:44 · For: Chapter 12: Hogsmeade Mistakes
a


Name: jessie179 (Signed) · Date: 04/10/09 16:19 · For: Chapter 12: Hogsmeade Mistakes
I think he should tell Hermione and get sacked. Seemed fitting.


Name: All_things_fiction (Signed) · Date: 04/07/09 20:23 · For: Chapter 12: Hogsmeade Mistakes
Okay... Gonna say 'b' and 'c'!!! Woooo!


Name: phoenixgurl321 (Signed) · Date: 04/07/09 10:51 · For: Chapter 12: Hogsmeade Mistakes
OMFG!!!!!!! I have been waiting for this chapter for so freaking long it isn't even funny. Anyway, sorry about not reading it earlier. I've been so busy lately I just haven't made my way over here for a while. Anywho, I am so happy with this chapter. It was so great when Everett gave into Hermione. Hmm... I choose g) for the question you posed to us. And I think Everett will...get poisoned and will tell Hermione. So, I can't wait until your next update. Until then, adios. :)


Name: All_things_fiction (Signed) · Date: 04/05/09 17:11 · For: Chapter 3: Black Cat
Coolness!


Name: All_things_fiction (Signed) · Date: 04/05/09 16:57 · For: Chapter 1: Gingersnap Cookies
I really like it!! Time to read mooorrreeee!!!!
xx Lisa xx


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