Reviewer: purplepanther
Date: 02/03/07 16:33
Chapter: Weasels and Goats

A new chapter! yay. Aberforth is definitly an odd one, but you described him really well. I'd always wondered if he was a squib. I can't believe Percy is being such a scumbag. I kind of feel bad for him because he was disowned, but I guess he deserved it. I felt so bad for Ron with that burping spell. Great chapter, I can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response: Heya!! Thanks for the review! Yeah...I dunno if he really is a Squib, but I don't see why he has such a rubbish job if he's a wizard. And I don't like Percy. So I'm basically being mean to him, lol! It gets worse ;) And hey, Ron was trying to hex Hermione, so I suppose he can't really complain, lol. Next chapter coming soon!

Reviewer: dumbledorefluertwins
Date: 02/03/07 15:13
Chapter: Weasels and Goats

Write more, write soon! This is a really good fic and I can't for the life of me understand why it only has 19 reviews - it deserves so many more than that! You have the characterisation perfect for all of them and have really cool, orginal plot ideas.
I'm so adding you to my favorites!
~Evie

Author's Response: Wow, now that's what I call an inspiring review! Thanks so much! As for why I have only 19 reviews, I don't really know, lol. I have 137 on fanfiction.net to date! Just one of those things :) thanks again for the review, I loved it!

Reviewer: purplepanther
Date: 01/19/07 14:56
Chapter: The Encounter

Hooray!! A new chapter!!! Great job on this chapter! I really think something is wrong with Neville. I know he just went through something really terrible, but the way he's acting makes me wonder if it's really him. And I think that unknown Death Eater who yelled when Lily's gravestone crumbled was Snape. Am I right? I can't wait for the next chapter, I love your story!

Author's Response: Wow, it took me so long to update this! I forgot to post here for a bit, and then when I remembered the chapter got rejected twice by moderators (my punctuation is a bit screwy sometimes). And whoopee!!! Somebody actually noticed the Death Eater who yelled at the gravestone-thing! You are the first one to take any notice of that. For that, I shall give a straight answer for once - yep, it was Snape. Nice one! But ... something wrong with Neville? He is acting strangely? *cackles evilly* You'll see :) Thanks so much for the review!!!

Reviewer: Ginny Guerra
Date: 01/17/07 16:58
Chapter: The Encounter

This was good! Just a little note: "Harry threw himself to one side as the jet of red light flashed towards him and heard Voldemort’s angry scream; the curse had hit a Death Eater..." The light from a killing course is green.
Keep the good work.

Author's Response: Oh, sugar! I can't believe I actually wrote that. You're right, it was supposed to be Avada Kedavra, otherwise I guess Voldemort wouldn't particularly have cared. Um ... let's just say it was a very, very stunnifying stunner. As in, fatally stunning?! Yeeeah ... Thanks for the review!!!

Reviewer: amsies360
Date: 11/12/06 22:47
Chapter: Shocks, Spells and Sullius

I love your story..... I hope neville is really neville... are they going to test him to make sure he is not being impersonated by polyjuice potion or under the imperius curse? Can't wait to find out!

Author's Response: Heya! I'm happy you like it. And as for Neville... :)

Reviewer: purplepanther
Date: 11/12/06 10:14
Chapter: Shocks, Spells and Sullius

Poor Neville! i feel so bad for him, i hope he's allright. What's up with percy? he was acting weird in the last chapter too. Those bat bogies were disgusting and you described sullius very well! Great job, i can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Well, at least Neville is alive! And Percy? Why, what makes you think there's something up with him? :D lol! Bat bogies, woohoo! I enjoyed writing that bit, teehee...

Reviewer: purplepanther
Date: 11/08/06 19:04
Chapter: Of Dark and Creeping Things

No! a cliffhanger!! Great chapter i can't wait for the next one to be posted because now i'm excited to see what happens next. your description of azkaban was really good!

Author's Response: Thank you!!! Yeah, a cliffhanger heeheehee I love it sorry I'm being mean :) Glad you liked the Azkaban stuff it's kind of dramatic and dun-dun-DUN but hey, slimy walls and rotting evilness what more do you need? Shall post next one soon, just checking it for mistakes...

Reviewer: dancinwitch
Date: 11/08/06 17:28
Chapter: Of Dark and Creeping Things

OMG! I can't believe that you did that. I hate cliffhangers! lol! please say your next update is fairly soon.... I'm enjoying reading this fic. Is the shock good or bad? I'm dying to know. Does our favorite Minister have something wicked up his sleeve? Keep it coming!

Author's Response: *cracks up* sorry everybody, but I LOVE writing cliffhangers! Mwhahaa. Hem hem. ANYWAY. Thanks for leaving such a detailed review!! *heart* Glad you're liking the story. I'm not going to tell you whether the shock is good or bad :D because then my cliffie would be redundant BUT I shall answer 'possibly' to your second question! lol! The next chapter shall be sent to moderators in a few days (I'm just correcting it a bit).

Reviewer: Ginny Guerra
Date: 11/07/06 22:02
Chapter: Of Dark and Creeping Things

You are mean and cruel with thac cliffhanger! Hurry up with the rest, please!

Author's Response: *chuckles evilly* That cliffhanger was FUN! Lol! Next chapter coming soon!

Reviewer: Silvygreen
Date: 10/20/06 21:41
Chapter: A Wizard Wedding

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. This chapter is beyond words. Well Done!

Author's Response: Thank you so much... you just made me very happy!

Reviewer: purplepanther
Date: 10/20/06 15:06
Chapter: A Wizard Wedding

I'm so glad Lupin and Tonks got married! Great chapter, I really like your writing style. I'd always wondered what Harry would think when he saw Gabrielle again and everyone's reactions to the robes was funny. That was a really interesting way to show what happens at a wizard's wedding. Good job!

Author's Response: They'd just better get married in JK Rowling's book! I'll be so disappointed if not :) Thank you for all your kind reviews - they make me so happy!

Reviewer: Krissa
Date: 10/19/06 4:33
Chapter: Grapefruit and Gizmos

You know, it's "Neither can live, while the other survives", not "One cannot live while the other survives"

Author's Response: It is? Oh, bother! Thanks for telling me - I wrote that without checking the book. I'll go and change that now...

Reviewer: purplepanther
Date: 10/11/06 14:23
Chapter: Apparition and Old Ghosts

Another horcrux! I wonder where it is. Good chapter, but I feel bad for Bill. Scrimgeor is so annoying! Why can't he just leave Harry alone! One thing I noticed was that the spell for locking windows and doors is Colloportus, not Coloforis. Good job, I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Yup, another one! As for where it is...heehee, well I know, but you won't find out for quite a while, I'm afraid. And yes, Scrimgeour is a complete twat :D I changed the Colloportus spell to make it a sealing-window spell rather than sealing-doors. For some reason I've always though of 'portus' as referring to doors, probably because of the word portal. So I did an extreme adaptation of the word window in Latin, fenestra. Though come to think of it, Alohomora is used both for doors and windows so I probably shouldn't have changed it! Anyway, thanks for the review! By the way, I have the story posted up to Chapter 12 on fanfiction.net under the name Search for the Broken Soul, my penname's InkandPaper there too, if you want to find out what happens a bit earlier. Some of the chapters on here I combined so while it's on chapter 6 here this chapter is actually number 8 on fanfiction.net. I haven't had much time to go through all my chapters and make them acceptable Mugglenet format yet, so that's why it's been quite slow.

Reviewer: purplepanther
Date: 10/01/06 14:06
Chapter: The Strength of Seven

I liked it! I'm glad Remus finally got over his idea that he has to protect Tonks by staying away fom her. Wow, I can't believe Ginny is so powerful. Good job!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading! Yeah, I'm not sure if the whole Ginny seventh-child thing will actually happen, but you never know...

Reviewer: midnight_me
Date: 09/29/06 1:41
Chapter: Grapefruit and Gizmos

Nice story, InkandPaper. It’s nice to see it on Mugglenet Fanfiction.





You write well. You seem to weave the description in very smoothly. And for the most part, the characters were all in character, especially Ron and Hermione. I like your writing style.





Constructive criticism…





You gave us a lot of background information, which got a bit boring. I wouldn’t put quite that much in.





-and Harry, as well as having fun hexing small objects to fly and tap-dance and whistle whenever the Dursleys walked past, enjoyed for the first time in his life at Privet Drive unlimited use of Dudley’s PlayStation and all four televisions.





I think Harry went a bit too far with this. He didn’t like the Dursleys, but I just don’t really think this would be something he would do. He seems a bit too mature for playing jokes on the Dursleys. And he really only went back to the Dursleys because Dumbledore would have wanted him to, so he would probably act decent to them.





Well, it’s funny when they played tricks on Tonks, and you, but I think they should have more respect for Professor Moody and Professor Lupin, I mean, they were their teachers…





I’m with Hermione on this one. I don’t think Fred and George would be playing pranks on the respected order members and former teachers like Lupin and Moody. They’re older, more mature, and I think they would hold a lot of respect for Lupin and Moody.





A few typos I caught…





Iit’s driving me crazy.





I think you meant It’s not Iit’s.





Hermione.

The period after Hermione is unnecessary.





“Harry,” she said seriously, and he and Ron looked up at her from the bed, where they were messing about with the Golden Snitch that Ron had given Harry for his birthday. “We’ve been thinking about--about the Horcruxes.”





You need a comma after birthday, not a period.





for ever





No space needed in between.





“I’ve just got away from the Dursleys for ever, I’m seeing you for the first time in weeks, I want to have fun--at least for today,"





You need a period after today, not a comma.





Good first chapter! I liked Harry’s feelings throughout the chapter. Not overly angsty, the way some author’s write him. The summary was also interesting and attracted me to the story. I’m looking forward seeing how this story turns out. =)





Off to read chapter two…


Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much for giving such a detailed review! It's really helpful. I'm not sure how to correct typos on here but I'll change them on fanfiction.net. The story is posted up to chapter 12 on there by the way, but I'm correcting it a bit before I post here so it might be easier to read here. Some of the things I agree, others not. I liked the bit with Harry hexing objects at the Dursleys, but now you've made me realise that yes, it probably isn't the sort of thing Harry would do in his seventh year. He has more serious stuff to think about now... but I think I'll leave it just because it's one of the major parts in the chapter and it's kind of funny... I would probably screw it up if I tried to change that now. As for Fred and George playing pranks on Tonks and Lupin, mmn, I don't agree with you there. They are mature, and do have a serious side but I reckon they'd find it fun to prank Tonks, at least. Possibly not Lupin, but then Lupin was a Marauder - I'm sure they could have had a laugh. After all, Harry gave them the gold for the joke shop because he though people would be needing some laughter soon, with the war coming, and they've done some pretty outrageous stuff with it already. Like the fireworks writing swear words in the air, etc. But this is just my opinion, I respect yours even if I don't agree with it! The backstory - ah. Yes. Well, when I first posted it had no backstory and I got told that I should put some in, because JKR always mentions how Harry's parents died and about Voldemort and so on, even though we all know. And usually she mentions a little of the previous books. I really don't know what to do about this, because I agree it isn't needed since everyone already knows, and that's why I was reluctant to put it in, in case it sounded patronising, but I guess it should be able to be read on its own, as a separate book... but I've been thinking people may be just not bothering to read any further than the first chapter since they get bored with the backstory. Argh! I'm really confused on this one. Maybe I'll rewrite parts of it sometime, take out some of the backstory - perhaps I overdid it! - but probably I'll wait till I've actually finished the story. Anyway, thanks for all the help, I really appreciate you taking so much time!

Reviewer: Lost_Wizard
Date: 09/28/06 4:43
Chapter: Grapefruit and Gizmos

I cannot wait for the next chapter. This a great story line and its now on my favroits list as well. You have become only one of five to make my authors list.

Author's Response: Really? Cool! That's nice to know. Next chapter should be coming quite soon.

Reviewer: purplepanther
Date: 09/27/06 14:28
Chapter: Kreacher's Orders

Awesome chapter! String of death... that's an interesting way to describe the necklace. I never thought of it being a horcrux. Anyway I love this story and I can't wait until the next chapter is posted!

Author's Response: Yeah, probably just one of my strange little ideas :-) Well, you never know. I'll try to post soon-ish.

Reviewer: jeanv
Date: 09/27/06 12:03
Chapter: Kreacher's Orders

This is excellent,are you related to Jo in any way?

Author's Response: Extremely cool as that would be, I'm afraid the answer is no. But thank you, I am flattered!

Reviewer: purplepanther
Date: 09/22/06 17:02
Chapter: The Brother

Another great chapter! I'm glad harry finally changed his mind about keeping ginny in the dark because i think he needs someone like her with him while he searches for the horcruxes. Hopefully mundungus will tell them where he put the locket.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you're following my story! Yeah, Harry should definitely let Ginny come... I mean, what was Dumbledore saying to him all that time? You will defeat Voldemort with love, Harry! C'mon! Lol. And yeah, that elusive locket...!

Reviewer: purplepanther
Date: 09/20/06 15:29
Chapter: Lupin's Predicament

Good chapter! Hope you post the next one soon!

Author's Response: The next one is now posted! Thanks again for reviewing!!

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