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Name: Nauf_dude (Signed) · Date: 09/25/06 10:55 · For: Chapter 2: Composure and Crying
that was a good chapter! i can't wait for the rest! it was kinda sad that ron died but i know you have your reason! off to the next chapter!

Name: KiaraPotter (Signed) · Date: 09/24/06 22:35 · For: Chapter 3: Itís a First
When's the next one coming out?

Author's Response: I'll be submitting the fourth chapter immediately. The rest depends on the cue.

Name: KiaraPotter (Signed) · Date: 09/24/06 22:26 · For: Chapter 2: Composure and Crying
I can't believe you made Ron and Ginn die! And did you kill off Hermiones parents too?

Author's Response: I think you accidently read the second chapter first. The order of the chapters got messed up for some reason, sorry. And yes, both of Hermione's parents died during the war.

Name: KiaraPotter (Signed) · Date: 09/24/06 22:13 · For: Chapter 1: A New Beginning
Wow,amazing detail! Keep writing!!!!!

Name: KiaraPotter (Signed) · Date: 09/24/06 22:13 · For: Chapter 1: A New Beginning
Wow,amazing detail! Keep writing!!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you, I'll keep writing if you keep reading, lol.

Name: jenseeker62442 (Signed) · Date: 09/24/06 17:54 · For: Chapter 3: Itís a First
Great story!!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Name: CLee (Signed) · Date: 09/20/06 12:48 · For: Chapter 2: Composure and Crying
Awww, that was short! So, Ron is going to be a fabulous tool for you during this story, eh? Don't get me wrong, it's really sad that him and Ginny are gone :( but it is very different. I haven't read a story like this yet, and I'm glad that I went ahead and read yours.

Just curious, why did you name the story what you did?

Like I said in my earlier review, I really think you should change your summary, it doesn't do this story justice. If you need any help brainstorming, don't hesitate to contact me. Great chapter, and I hope to see ch 3 up soon!

Author's Response: I can't really tell you why I named the story the way I did. Let's just say, you'll know soon enough, or in a while, rather, lol. I had to kill Ron and Ginny in order to make this story a bit different. I'm trying to make it as different as possible. I read Born the Day You Kissed me and Aguapanthus, you're a great writer as well. As always, thank you for the review, and I promise I'll make a better review.

Name: CLee (Signed) · Date: 09/20/06 12:34 · For: Chapter 1: A New Beginning
Well hi there! First off, let me say that I had my doubts when I read your summary. But I went ahead and read your first chapter, and I was suprised. Your writing style is clean and it really has a nice flow. I really liked your opening paragraph; I thought you jumped in with a fresh plot, as a lot of fics these days are still set pre-HBP. So already, your story is different than the rest. It almost makes up for the fact that you're writing a Dramione HBHG, share the dorm and bathroom deal. In fact, I think that it does.

I also really liked the atmosphere you created between the two in the train compartment...just, uncomfortable. Not the bickering or snogging extremes, it was a quaint middle that I found worked. There were however some sentances that sounded redundant, and I think it was because you repeated some words, for example, when you said that no one knew what had become of Draco...and then Hermione tells him, "no one knew what became of you."

Also, I got a little confused when it was Hermione's POV all along, and then suddenly it was Draco's POV. I'd separate that out, or at least start a new paragraph to show that now we're in Draco's head.

The only other thing that threw me through a loop was when it seemed like Herm and Draco had only been in their rooms for what...five minutes, and already Draco was taking a bath...no, a bubble bath. (Draco and bubbles...eh, I dunno about that.)

Anyway, overall I think that you did a good job, but my one big piece of advice would to ditch your summary. It has cliche written all over it, and this story, though there are cliches, is worth reading. Good luck, and I'm off to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your length review. As an avid fanfic reader myself, I know that one doesn't always have the time to leave a review, let alone write one this interesting. Yes, I do realize my summary is pretty cliche, so to say, but that's only because I only realized I needed a summary when I tried submitting it. I wrote it in a rush, so that explains the boring style of it. Hermione and Draco were in the rooms for atleast 15 minutes before the the bath scene because Hermione took her time ogling her room and exploring every nook and cranny of it. She's a very detail oriented person, so it only makes sense she would explore her room to the fullest extent. Also, Draco went into his room before Hermione. I really didnt think of putting all this in the chapter because I thought it was self explanatory. The bubbles can be explained by the fact that Draco grew up with a very luxerious life. Harry Potter doesnt seem much like a bubble bath type of person either, but he did in the fourth book. Same thing with Draco, its not so much of a softer or feminine thing to take a bubble bath, its more of a way of relaxing. After all, Draco did just re-enter the wizarding world and had a very uncomfortable day. Also keep in mind that Draco is not as evil as he was always percieved because he did go over to the bright side after all. I will take your advice to fix my summary, if I can find the time that is. I'm not nearly talented enough to write a completely cliche free Draco/Hermione story, but I'm trying to make it seem possible, lol. Anyways, thanks a lot for your review and I hope I haven't babbled too much.

Name: jenseeker62442 (Signed) · Date: 09/19/06 23:36 · For: Chapter 2: Composure and Crying
Im not usually one for a Hermione/Draco, but lately they have been kinda like a forbidden friut. I like this one, its really good, keep updating, Im looking forward to it!!!!

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it. It truly is like a forbidden fruit; we know its never going to happen, but its always nice to hope, lol.

Name: nikster (Signed) · Date: 09/19/06 11:38 · For: Chapter 2: Composure and Crying
Great fan fic!!
Please cont soon!!

Author's Response: Thank you. Chapter 3 will be up shortly.

Name: ChrissyOfGryffindor (Signed) · Date: 09/18/06 23:45 · For: Chapter 1: A New Beginning
I really like this story so far. It's a bit cliche-ish, but you've handled it very well. I look forward to reading the next chapter!

Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked it. Chapter 2 is already up and chapter 3 will also be up very soon.

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