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Name: proud_to_be_a_muggle (Signed) · Date: 11/22/10 9:13 · For: Chapter 26: Comfortably Numb, part 1
Hey, this is my first review but that does not mean that I have not loved your story and love you for writting it. WHAT HAPPENED TO LILY AFTER EMMA WENT UNCONSIOUS? I mean really you keep mentioning it slightly then lily can't take it anymore. I get that Lily went through an exteremely traumatic event and new things keep coming up but she really needs to have some backbone and stick to one belief and also its abou time she opened up about what happened and stop asking for people to understand when they don't know what they are supposed to understand. I am also glad that James stood up and did what he thaught he should do and he is back to being persistent. I really hope Lily doesn't really leave but it might be what she needs even though everyone at Hogwarts will be angry betrayed or dissapointed.

Name: spaceexplorer99 (Signed) · Date: 11/10/10 16:38 · For: Prologue
I must say, truely was a pleasure spending all day reading this :)
Out of most of the other James/Lilly fics the plot you envisioned was by far the best and made the most sense as of how it not only shapped James but also Lilly into the people Harry later hears about.
Again great job, and really can't wait to read the rest of your stories
Btw idk if it's been asked or not, but when Lilles running with Wormtail that early morning, and ultimately decides to Visit the graves, was it purely just a coincedense(spelling) that the four of them meet up with Ted again, or since we later find out that Ted isn't a poser DeathEater, was it Peter setting up Lilly, to later on meet Voldy?
Again great story ::)

Author's Response: Thanks very much! That's high praise! I'm glad you liked it. I don't think Peter had yet turned to a Death Eater in their seventh year, so in my mind Ted came there to run into them by his own calculations that they would find him, but I never say so either way, so you're free to think what you want :)

Name: harrypotterandbenbarnes (Signed) · Date: 09/30/10 22:35 · For: Prologue
So, I'm going to be honest here. I wish I never found your stories. And no, not because they are awful, actually the opposite. They are amazing. I love them, and i have spent so much of my time reading them. I read the, "I'll Pick You Up" and it was probably the most amazing thing ever. I have always been a HP fanatic, and it has always been hard for me to read fan fictions because many are flawed in the real details of the actual stories. Yours, however, are not. They are all factually correct and link things together. I love it. You have all the names correct, and it just really shows how much time and effort you put into your stories. Your writing is amazing, you are extremely talented. I feel like if JK Rowling herself read this she would think "These are exactly how i imagined these characters" These are so well written, i go back and think it actually happened, that this is the true story, not just made up by a fan. Your stories move me to tears. They are honest, well researched, funny and romantic. It is the perfect mixture of love and romance with action mystery and adventure. Thank you so much for helping me keep the world of Harry Potter alive for me. And i'm sorry this isn't really a review, I am just praising you for all you do. Thank you. Oh and this is on the wrong story, but the last part of the epilogue for "I'll pick you up" made me cry. It was so beautiful but I was also crying because it was over. I love this. Please keep writing.

Author's Response: Such high praise! Thanks you so much -- I'm glad you really enjoyed my stories :) I'll Pick You Up was a huge project for me, and I really poured myself into it in an attempt to characterize everyone well and make the plot all come together, so I'm happy to hear (to read!) that you liked it and appreciated it! Fanfiction has a reputation, I think, for being poorly-written, sub-par and silly imitations of another's work (and it often is!), but there is certainly good fanfiction out there, and I'm glad you consider mine among it!

Name: weasleygirl2 (Signed) · Date: 09/27/10 18:35 · For: Chapter 31: The Aftermath
wow...this is one of my favorite AU lily/james stories. and i love what you did with sirius, most of the stories have him falling in love, but this is really more in character for him. i suspected he and emma would have a thing. anyway, GREAT story

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked how Sirius was portrayed.

Name: trophyhorse (Signed) · Date: 09/25/10 13:54 · For: Chapter 2: An Emotional and Mental State
Odd. Is Harry Potter ever going to come into the story??

Author's Response: No, actually, this is a Lily/James story.

Name: trophyhorse (Signed) · Date: 09/25/10 13:23 · For: Prologue
AWSOME!!!!!Love Lily and James characters!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad!

Name: weasleygirl2 (Signed) · Date: 09/21/10 20:50 · For: Chapter 11: I'll Hold Your Hand
wow....this is amazing writing. you have amazing literary talent. one of the better lily/james fics, most definitely

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you like it and think it one of the better Lily/James fics :)

Name: tc100292 (Signed) · Date: 09/01/10 1:00 · For: The Epilogue
Believe it or not, this was my favourite chapter of the whole fic!
Yes, it was very depressing, bought a tear to my eye (ha ha), but what happens to the marauder's generation over the series is nothing short of a tragedy.
I believe you captured the tragedy of the marauder's generation excepptionally well, and really did it justice!
I love this epilogue! You really have a knack for this war stuff :)

Author's Response: Oh my, I wouldn't have guessed it, but I'm glad you enjoyed the epilogue so much! I do like writing the war stuff -- it's good to know I'm not terrible at it! Thanks for the review :)

Name: The_Real_Hermione (Signed) · Date: 08/29/10 3:27 · For: The Epilogue
WOW This fic is really amazing. I actually read it a while ago but only recently made an account so I've only got to review it now. I'd say it's the best chaptered fic I've ever read - the story was captivating from the start and Emmeline was a great character. Your idea of the maze and the running and all that was really creative and the way you revealed what actually happened through those memory sequences was really engaging (I always had to keep reading). I liked the way every time things got too good for the characters, something bad happened, especially with Ted turning out to be a Death Eater. I also loved how you put humour in there - like Lily and Sirius stuck in the broom cupboard at the beginning. I can't pick a favourite bit because the whole thing was amazing!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked everything Lily was faced with and found it engaging -- I was afraid some people would find the memories uninteresting in favour of events in the present. :) And I'm so happy you liked Emmeline; I ended up becoming very endeared to her, so I like to hear that readers like her, too! Thanks again for coming back to review when you got an account :)

Name: JamesAndLilyRomance (Signed) · Date: 08/12/10 20:35 · For: Chapter 2: An Emotional and Mental State
This story is so sad now and it made me cry, and I'm a BOY

Author's Response: Well, thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :)

Name: animspiredwriter (Signed) · Date: 07/05/10 13:31 · For: Chapter 2: An Emotional and Mental State
I've read this story a thousand times before, and I have to say i'll read it a thousand times again- its one of my absoloute FAVOURITES, and I see j faults anywhere. It is beautifully written, and I cry I think at almost every chapter - and not many stories do that! (: The characters are perfect and I LOVED Emma, she was amazing. My ultimate fav Lily/James fan fic, like most of yours- I dont usually go for long, multichaptered fics, but this one was worth it. Truly inspiring.

Author's Response: Thank you so very much! That's such high praise -- I'm glad you consider it a favourite. I know that sometimes the long, multi-chaptered fics are hard, but it's so good to know you think this one is worth it :)

Name: AReader (Signed) · Date: 06/30/10 12:56 · For: The Epilogue
Ya know, I never review until the end, so I just have to say that YOU ARE MEEEEAN! That stay was sooo good, it was addictive. I couldn't even think about doing homework with out leaving it and reading some more, and I nearly cried when you made Lily and James break up. MEAN! EVIL! Well, I liked it. I liked the part where...well, I liked everything. :)

Author's Response: Haha, I'm glad you liked it -- even if it did consume all of your time :) Thanks for the review!

Name: simply_enamored (Signed) · Date: 06/20/10 14:53 · For: The Epilogue
Hey! My name is Melissa and I just wanted to know how poignant and touching your story was. I've read a lot of fan fic, but yours is by far the best I've ever read. The way you develop each character and give them such real and human emotions, it really is amazing. I read this entire story in two days, all my free time spent with my eyes glued to the screen. I spent both nights up past midnight because I was transfixed.I was lost in the story. I know, being a writer myself, that that is all one can wish for from their audience. That they felt connected to the story and were able to relate to the aspects of the story. James/Lily have always been my favorite couple. I don't know what it is, but something about them always leaves me wanting more. Though I wish J.K. Rowling would just give in and write a story about them, I doubt she will. Rest assured, though, your story has appeased my appetite. For now. Thank you for this brilliant contribution to the world.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! That's certainly high praise! I know what it's like to have a really good fanfiction (or book) consume all my free time and I simply can't look away until it's finished, and I'm so happy to know that this fanfiction was like that for you -- you're right, that is all a writer can wish from her audience :) I wish J.K. Rowling would give in, too, but I guess fanfiction will have to do instead of it! Thanks again.

Name: princessesierra (Signed) · Date: 06/10/10 0:00 · For: The Epilogue
omg i finally finished it at long last!!! and it's great, really!!!!
the epilogue seems depressing, but it isn't really, it's a good sketch of what actually might have happened... and what i love most is the way the charater of emmeline vance was drawn out.. the way she evolved... and how, in the end, it became more of her story than anyone elses!!! :)

Author's Response: It is a bit of a long read -- but I'm glad you made it to the end and enjoyed it! And I'm glad you liked the epilogue. Emmeline did become a bigger character than I had originally intended, but I become a bit attached to her and she sort of starting writing herself :) Thanks for the review!

Name: Ginny081 (Signed) · Date: 06/07/10 2:47 · For: The Epilogue
Very good story. Enjoyed it very much.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad :)

Name: xxbabewithbrainsxx (Signed) · Date: 04/05/10 8:51 · For: The Epilogue
Brilliant story, I loved every bit of it! It's the Easter holidays and I've been so bored so it was great that I was kept entertained by your story. Possibly the best fic that I've ever read, and I've read a lot of good fics, let me tell you.

I loved how you included Emmeline Vance - Emma's a great nickname for that as well - and I hated Ted from the beginning, there was just something that made me despise him. James' silly names for Lily made me laugh - my favourite is Pancake and Bunny. You scared me twice when Lily was close to dying! Even though I knew that she had to survive in order to have Harry, I was really scared that somehow she was going to die or something! I really liked the way James proposed to Lily. Sooo romantic!

I'm really getting into the James/Lily ship. I mean, I liked it and all, but I never really read James/Lily fics for some reason. Now I read yours, it encouraged me to read many others, although none have matched your one, which was phenomenal.

Sorry for rambling so much - I've just realised how long this review is! Anyway, keep it up, I love all your stories!


Author's Response: Thanks very much! I never mind a long review! I'm glad I could encourage a love for James and Lily in you -- I definitely adore them and have so much fun reading and writing them. I feel like Emmeline is somewhat of a mouthful so Emma seems like a good alternative to me; I'm glad you agree! And that you liked James and his silly nicknames and his proposal :)

Name: inesignorance (Signed) · Date: 03/12/10 23:24 · For: Chapter 7: The First Day
haha! i loved the end of this chapter, james is so cute. you're an amazing writer, well done, keep it up, i love this story. (:

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. I'm enamored with James as well ;)

Name: GinnyPotterFan26 (Signed) · Date: 02/28/10 20:54 · For: The Epilogue
I have thoroughly enjoyed reading this story. I would like to think that, had I been reading fanfiction from this site three or four years ago, I would have followed the story, waiting faithfully for each new chapter.
I really liked the personalities that you gave to James, Lily, Sirius, and Emmeline. Despite the few things that disagreed with Book 7 (an unavoidable circumstance), I thought that you did a wonderful job taking what Rowling put forth for these characters and expanding it to fill the rather large character roles you created. We've always heard that Harry is so much like his parents but were never really given any support to understand what exactly that meant. I thought you did a great job showing us that, and an even better job developing the character of Emmeline Vance to more than just a member of the Order.
So many of the emotions in this story seemed not only plausible but real. I liked that you didn't let a desire to publish faster hamper the inclusion of the small details that added to this feeling of...well, of a kind of reality.
It is obvious how much your writing improved over the course of the years, and I think you did James and Lily more than justice with this story. Thank you so much for sticking with it to the end!

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked it and could appreciate the emotions and the development of characters -- two things I always strive for! I really appreciate your reading and reviewing and even editing old mistakes for me (I plan on making your changes as soon as I have a few free hours!)

Name: GinnyPotterFan26 (Signed) · Date: 02/25/10 22:22 · For: Chapter 19: Mr. Masselli
I figured I'd review here, for a brief change, since I've been putting my reviews of the last few chapters in the revisions.

Ah ha! Lewis! Where the heck did James pull it from though?

Mr. Masselli! What a ridiculous man! How could he do that to Lily. But at least Dumbledore has her back. What's happened to Emma now though? II'm thinking that this has something to do with her recent kick of self-inflicted injury.

I really like where this story has taken the characters, and I'm excited for where they're going (even if I don't know exactly what's there waiting for them).

Author's Response: Mr. Masselli is pretty awful, isn't he? I'm glad you're excited for what's to come! Thanks for the review :)

Name: GinnyPotterFan26 (Signed) · Date: 02/24/10 17:26 · For: Chapter 10: Peanut and Prongs
Another good chapter. I like that you can so easily transition between fluff and something that moves the story forward. Will Lily figure out that James is an Animagus? What will her reaction be to his coming home so late? Might he reveal it to her in some desperate act of heroism? Exciting things surely await in chapters ahead.
I should probably be doing more constructive criticism in these reviews, though it's kind of hard, when the biggest problems I'm finding are small typos. I really don't have the knack for plot or characters that you seem to. But I'll keep reading and reviewing all the same.

And by the way, I'll start looking for typos and things. Unless you have another suggestion, if you could provide me a way to contact you, I can email Word documents with corrections.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you're excited for what's to come -- I hope it doesn't disappoint! I'll send you a message over mugglenet with my e-mail if you'd like to point out typos (I don't want the populace at large with my e-mail!), and I'll fix them when I can. (I do have a break coming up!)

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