I don't want to sound repetitive, but that was just AWESOME. You are great at writing suspense. My eyes were whizzing over the words and I couldn't scroll down fast enough. Wonderful job, and great descriptions.
Author's Response: Thanks very much! Believe me, you can't praise the story enough ;)
Wow- this story is breathtaking :) - I started reading at ten pm and now it's two am and I can't stop. I love love love your writing style, it's fresh and at the same time captures everything we love about J.K's world. I came to Mugglenet looking for a quick read and instead found Someone To Watch Over Me! So far, I've laughed (out loud), cried, and can't wait to finish it! (though I need some sleep, hehe) I look forward to reading the rest! I registered tonight to review so far, and you're the first to go on my favorites! Thanks!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoy it so much and think it fresh. There are certainly a lot of James and Lily fanfiction out there, and its good to know you think mine is different. And of course, the favorites list always makes me smile :)
OH MY GOODNESS DON"T JUST LEAVE IT THERE I CAN"T STOP READING!!
This is such a great story-- I'm addicted! Keep writing!
Author's Response: I've already got a good chunk of the next chapter written; hopefully it won't be too long before that's up, too. I'm glad you enjoy it -- addicted is good! :) Thanks for the review.
that was absolutely amazing!!!!
so worth the wait!! cant wait for the next chapter!! did u pick title to this story form that song? or did it just come up??
please continue!! it is absolutely fantastic!! i cant say it enough!,
Lilia Natalia ~*~ !*! ~*~
Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked it so much! The title of the story came from that song. I only have one aunt (and eight billion uncles) but that one aunt, batty though she might be, was a much a mother to me as my own when I was growing up, and she absolutely (and still does) love the song Someone To Watch Over Me. She loved to hum it and sing it and quote it and so on and so on. . . .
Ohmigoodgod!!!!!!!!! You're right, the begining was a tad slow, but it's very important. By the end, though, my face was pressed up against my laptop's screen!
Will they find the antidote? Will Emma find someone to watch over her? WILL LILY LIVE??? And will I stop asking cliche questions?
These are the things I will ponder until you update!
Amazing chapter :)
~Passion For Prongs
Author's Response: I'm glad you appreciated the beginning despite its less than ideal speed! And please, ask all the cliche question you want -- I love to inspire questions ;) I will try and update as soon as I can. Thanks for the review!
Phoenix tears!!!!!! Make Fawkes cry on her!!!!!!
Great job, as always. Update very soon!
Author's Response: That's an interesting solution. . . . I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the review, and I will try and update soon.
she....died.........? that's SO not right!!!!!
Author's Response: She didn't actually die, of course, considering Harry has yet to show up, but. . . . Well, you'll see soon. I submitted the next chapter to the queue a while ago and three or four days ago I got an e-mail saying it had been accepted, but they've yet to actually post it. . . . Thanks for the review!
amazing story...do update soon..
Author's Response: The next chapter is in the queue. It should be posted very soon! :)
OH SNAP that was an awesome chapter oh my lord i can't believe he stabbed her see i thought he wasnt a squib but oh man that was intense i really liked this chapter i think it had to be one of my top ten of this story!@!!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it so much! It was definitely an intense one. Thanks very much for the review!
Author's Response: I'm working on it as fast as I can!
Okay, that's out of my system. Now:
What is wrong with the kid? Is he insane? He's gone completely and utterly mad! I know Lily can't possibly die because then Harry wouldn't exist, but really!
That was so emotional, and everything added up! Just like in Harry Potter! Did you already plan the entire thing out, like what clues to leave, or behaviors that would give little hints? Becuase this was amazing!
It all fits.
And now, I'm going to stop myself from yelling at you for leaving such a ridiculously huge cliff hanger for my to ponder over for the next few days (hopefully) until you update again (which really is getting faster, nice!)
I will miss this story so much when it's over :(
~Passion For Prongs
P.S. I hope you know you are distracting me from a 60 point English project!!! ;)
Author's Response: Ted is acting completely insane, you're right, although he will get a chance to explain his behavior. . . . When I get an idea for a story, I write the first few chapters before I post anything. If I lose interest in it at that point, I never post it. If I do want to keep writing, however, I sit down and plan out everything I want to happen; I write timelines and so on and so on. So, yes, I have been planning this for a very long, LONG time, and I'm really glad to finally be able to write it all out! Thanks very much for the review -- and good luck on your English project :)
I'm so sorry! I had internet problems for the longest time and I couldn't get on to read your outrageously fabulous story for WEEKS!!! Trust me, it was torture.
So anyway, I'm not sure if I was able to read this chapter, but I think the last chapter I read was "It's Over" so I'll just review.
It was great, although I'm not sure what I think of Lily depending on people. I always pictured her as very independent, but maybe that was in the later years of her life. Either way, you portrayed it well! And if she goes with Emma and Ted, I'm going to scream.
Plus, if Ted's family died, why did his sister talk to James??? I smell something...smelly....
~Passion For Prongs
Author's Response: I too have had to endure weeks off of fanfiction due to a pesky computer, so I know your pain. I'm glad you're back on, though -- thanks for reviewing! Lily seeming dependent doesn't fit her character, right, but that's kind of the point . . . ;) As for smelling something smelly, well, you'll see. . . .
when the freak are you updating!!! I"m dieing here hurry! :)
Author's Response: I'm almost done with the next chapter. The first half of it came quickly, but I've been struggling as I write the second half. I really want to get it right, and it's simply more difficult writing it out than I'd imagined. I will try and update as soon as I can!
IT"S OVER ?!?!?!
i hope you continue,
Author's Response: Of course I'll continue -- but I couldn't help leaving it on that cliffhanger-esk line! ;)
Oh, crap. Crap. Crap. Crap.
This can't be happening... O.o
*is waiting impatiently for the next chapter*
*is too shocked to write a proper review*
Update soon. I beg of you.
P.S. Very well written chapter. Wonder what will happen to Emma...
Author's Response: It is a bit shocking, isn't it? I'll try and update as soon as I can! I'm glad you thought it well written; thanks for the review.
Uh. Oh. I really need to go and read the next chapter, so sorry for this extremely short review: Awesome chapter. Surprising ending.
Author's Response: That's fine with me -- I hope you enjoy the next chapter, too! :)
Uh... so I got to read this chapter more than a month later after you updated it... >.> But I had computer problems, so... But I'm back again! And I've got two more chapters to read. =D But I'll review this one first. =]
First, I'll just point out some errors:
She didn’t his heed his desperate plea.
The first 'his' should be deleted.
She hadn’t just seen what she though she had.
Thought, not though.
“Don’t touch me!” snarled Emma, backing away from his just as Lily had, crying out, “How could you? After everything they did to us?!”
It should be: '...backing away from him...' And, no double punctuation marks together, so either remove the exclamation or the question mark in the end.
Sirius gave another chocking sound, and his face began rapidly losing all colour.
I believe you meant 'choking' and not 'chocking'.
“Do you have any idea where Ted and Emma went?” McGonagall questioned after a long stretch of silence had enveloped them all.
This is quite an un-McGonagall-ish dialogue. At least, she would use the surnames and not first names and nick names.
Yeah, done. =D
This chapter was pretty intense I must say. Lily especially. Quite an emotional roller coaster ride for her. First, shock, then denial, confusion, suspicion and what not. And then the rubber band just stretches and loses it. Why did they have to break? *sob* I feel so sorry for James. He was so mature in this chapter, always trying to keep his temper under control and begging to her in the end for her companionship.
Sirius sort of over reacted but then he's got family issues and it's understandable. But I really like how he comes to James' defense about the Animagi part. Shows how close the two are.
Very well written chapter! *goes to read the next one*
Author's Response: Thanks so much for pointing out all of those typos. I always appreciate it, and they have now been fixed! :) You mention the issues Sirius has with his family -- I actually address that a few chapters from now, both the problems themselves and how they relate to this whole situation. James was acting mature in this chapter, but sadly it was not enough to keep Lily from losing it. Of course, we all know what happens in the end, so. . . Thanks for the review!
WOW...thats really all i can think to say right now...just WOW...That was an explosive chapter, poor lily her best friends a death eater-but can anyone really blame her for believing hes not? i mean if she feels/felt for ted the way james feels for his friends then ofcourse she will refuse to see the bad.I really hope liy and james get back together soon its sad when they are apart.I wonder what Emma will do? if she really loves ted then i assumed she will go where ever he is, but i dont know i guess we'll see. Update soon cant wait for more Chelsea ^_^
P.S. I didnt get an e-mail saying this story had been updated! If i hadnt checked today i wouldnt have known you had updated! (thats just so you know why i havent reviewed until now) I really cant wait for the return of uncle george has a shovel. And just incase i dont get to review until after xmas-
MERRY CHRISTMAS & A HAPPY NEW YEAR
Author's Response: Thanks! I don't think anyone got the e-mail, but that happens sometimes. I'm glad you checked up and were able to read the chapter -- and I'm glad you enjoyed it! It was a rather explosive chapter, you're right, that's a good word for it. I agree that it makes sense that Lily wouldn't be able to believe her friend is evil. As for what Emma will do . . . you'll just have to wait and find out! I'll update as soon as I can. Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you, too! :)
I know I'm late in this, but AMAZING!! Truly ingenius. I actually expected him to kidnap her or kill her with Avada Kedavra... but the knife gives her a chance to live and he knows it. So... maybe h never really wanted to kill her. He's bad but not completely u kno... well thats my theory :D
Author's Response: Late or not, thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. Using a knife definitely does give her a chance to live, you're right, and that's an interesting theory you have. (I always love to hear the theories!)
omg!!!!!!!!!! major cliffie! that was so excellent! i liked the weapon choice! you know waht i mena... i mean i didn't like that lily got stabbed, but you...know...you know what im talking about right? RIGHT??? omg i am flustering myself *walks out of review*
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed the cliffhanger! And yes, I know what you mean -- Lily getting stabbed isn't good, but it was certainly an exciting way to go, much better than a spell ;) Thanks for the review!