Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 11/24/09 20:16
Chapter: Chapter 19: Mr. Masselli

I can't commet on the chapter-0I have to go read the next (emma!!!!) but here are a few typos(if you care to know): why did her like her again? I think it should be why did HE... and then here: he more pulled herself up shoudln't it be he pulled HIMslef up?

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 11/24/09 19:38
Chapter: Chapter 18: Conversations and An Invitation

hm, like it, but I would think she would like to have Emma with her.

Reviewer: FlicketyG
Date: 11/24/09 5:38
Chapter: Prologue

Omg! Love it!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 11/23/09 17:13
Chapter: Chapter 13: What a Tangled Web We Weave

well.. I don't know what to say to this chapter-it was really good, but... harsh. well, here's a typo... (you know after reading the contence of this chapter I was like "grr what does a typo matter? There s so much evil in the world...") but here it is:
Lily looked back at the car

it should be back at the cat
(i think :p)

Author's Response: I'll fix that -- thanks for pointing it out!

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 11/23/09 16:12
Chapter: Chapter 11: I'll Hold Your Hand

I love this story so much so far-but I'm a bit confused. I thought you said it wasn't just teenagers caught-didn't they find men women, children, seniors... dead? So the Death Eaters only kept teenagers? for better death eaters, or what?

well, I adore you characterization of James. I dont know if I ever read him as good as this. He is so great!

Author's Response: Only teenagers were kept, the rest were killed. Sorry if that's confusing! I'm glad you liked James in this story :) Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Pussycat123
Date: 11/22/09 17:08
Chapter: The Epilogue

First of all, congratulations on the QSQ, which is, I'll admit, why I decided to read this (also when I saw how epicly long it was, because I was really in the mood for a fic that just kept on going! If that makes any sense at all ...)

Basically I really, really loved this! I thought it was so well written, and you'd made it so much more real than I ever could (I'm always a bit jealous of writers who can pull off drama and angst convincingly, and you certainly did, because there was just enough to make it realistic and captivating, but not enough to make it over the top and ridiculous). For example, as I'm sure many people have already said, but I'll say it again, Emma was truly a work of art, particularly in the epilogue, when you saw the direction her life had inevitably taken, and her relationship with Sirius, which in a perfect world would have been beautiful and could have saved her, but which circumstance had made something else entirely.

That being said, one of my favourite parts was still Sirius blindly insisting to McGonagall that Lily and James had eloped, because even in such a serious circumstance, he still made me laugh. =D

Thanks for writing such a great fic - I've really enjoyed reading it!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I completely understand what you mean about wanting to read a long fic -- sometimes I'm in the mood for one-shots and sometimes I want something epic and novel-y. I'm glad you decided to give this a chance and that you liked it! It's my "first born" baby as far as HP fanfiction goes, so I'm very attached to it. And yes, many people have admired Emma, and I have to admit that I'm rather attached to her too, so its good to know you liked her character! :) Thanks again.

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 11/20/09 22:09
Chapter: Chapter 7: The First Day

OMG, great! and lol, when you said she kissed him i was like O.o and had to stop reading - deep, calming breaths- and then I read on and was like ooooooh. lol. I hope Emma is in the feature chappies a lot-I love her so much!

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 11/19/09 20:17
Chapter: Chapter 4: Itty Bitty Potters Gone Wild

AH! I want to review so badly but I can't I have to read the next chapter! and sorry my last review was awful, too, but I had to get off the compy... anyway, oMG!!!

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 11/18/09 21:29
Chapter: Chapter 3: Soap Suds and Back Rubs

I loved it! But so cruel...
did she have her wand with her? How could she conjure anything if she didn't?

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 11/16/09 20:58
Chapter: Chapter 1: A World Turned Upside Down

omg, here I was, expecting a fluffy love story-oh my. Hm... maybe the other girl is ...... Andromeda??? I dk.. I'lll keep reading and find out!

Author's Response: There is a lot of fluffiness throughout the story, rest assured! Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 11/15/09 21:05
Chapter: Prologue

i love it! Although the fight on the train was just a tincy tiny bit cliched. But whatever-a cliche isn't always bad :D
I particularly loved the beginnig, how she would ramble about something and give us more information. That was so cool! And OMG, do you think that's what it would feel like to be stupified? that was really neat too.

Author's Response: It is a bit cliched, but this was my first story for Harry Potter, so like most first stories, cliches are abound! I'm glad you liked it nonetheless :) Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Potters_Girl_7
Date: 11/15/09 15:17
Chapter: Chapter 31: The Aftermath

okayy so the way that you portray james is EXACTLY how i pictured himm! ohmigod hes soo perfect! i love this story too its really good:)

Author's Response: Thanks very much! :) I'm glad.

Reviewer: helz_belz
Date: 11/01/09 18:42
Chapter: Prologue

Congratulations on the win, This is my second favourite story (after WDDSU of course), and it is amazing you have won two years in a row. Don't ever stop writing :D

Author's Response: Thanks! Considering writing is my favourite thing to do (well, second favourite -- eating will always be first!), I don't plan on stopping anytime soon ;)

Reviewer: TheTrio
Date: 11/01/09 16:50
Chapter: The Epilogue

Congrats on the QSQ win!

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm pretty excited -- this story will forever be my baby :)

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 11/01/09 3:59
Chapter: The Epilogue

AMAZING. Absolutely effing amazing. Once my exams finish, I'm going to re-read it all again and then give you the favourites. But amazing job!

Author's Response: Thanks! I can't wait until then -- good luck with your exams :)

Reviewer: Russia Snow
Date: 10/30/09 15:12
Chapter: Chapter 3: Soap Suds and Back Rubs

Wow. That was amazing. There was SUCH emotion in that part about Beverly, I mean obviously we knmew which it would be, but honestly? I wanted to cry. Really really well written! Well done!
See? I can be less harsh >.<

Russia xxxxx

Author's Response: Thanks very much! Yes, it was pretty obvious I wasn't about to kill Lily or Emma, but I'm glad you still liked it :)

Reviewer: Russia Snow
Date: 10/30/09 14:52
Chapter: Prologue

I really liked this prolouge, The fight with the Slytherins was really well done. You are a really good writer, the things you write all seem so real, I love Lily's character in this.

A few nit-picks though! Lily wouldn't have braces in the wizarding world. Even Hermione, who had dentists as parents, didn't wear her brace at school. If she had a problem with her teeth, she simply would have gone Madam Pomfry to fix it. having braces myself, I know they don't work very well unless you have them tightened every six weeks or so, and that isnt really something you could do while at Hogwarts. You also say about Petunia that she had "thick blonde hair" which we know from Canon inst strictly true, (unless of course she dyed it) and you say that Lily and Petunia hated each other. As far as I can tell, that is in no way true. Petunia may have thought her sister was a freak, but as far as I know, Lily always loved her sister, even if they grew apart after Lily began Hogwarts. Also, you have Alice as her best friend. A fic of mine recently got rejected for the same thing, Alice Longbottom wasn't in the same year as Lily, she was actually older. I appreciate that you can't change her character now, i just thought I;d tell you for future reference. Watch out for those Americanisms as well "Realized" doesn't have a 'z'

I do really like the idea of the whole 'transformation' thing for Lily though, it is something I have never seen before.

I am very very sorry that my reviews may seem a little harsh, but I really do love your writing and am only trying to help you improve! and I look forward to reading the next few chapters! Sorry again if I seem harsh!

Russia xxxxx

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the writing, and never feel bad about constructive criticism! This first chapter was written so, so long ago that I'm sure it has a lot of problems. I can hardly read it myself anymore because there are many, many things that ought to be changed. I'll have to bear it and take a look to fix what you suggested! :)

Reviewer: booke_worme
Date: 10/13/09 20:26
Chapter: The Epilogue

O my god! I was hooked from chapter one! It was amazing and you write fantastically, MagEd. I think you should go beyond fanfiction and write your own books.

Author's Response: That's the dream! I'm glad liked it so much :) Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Prongsy lover
Date: 09/15/09 22:03
Chapter: Chapter 24: And The World Spins Madly On

OMG, you have SO many sat vocab words in here, did you have a teacher named Mrs. Thompson at coral springs middle or something, its crazy

Your story is awesome. I love it. I am a Harry Potter connoseir, and this story definately passed my marks. (I have HORRIBLE spelling)

Author's Response: Haha, nope. But I did get an 800 on my verbal SATs! ;) I'm glad you liked this story and it passed your marks! Don't worry about spelling -- that's what spell check's for, right? Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: IckleRonnieX
Date: 09/15/09 13:13
Chapter: The Epilogue

Oh my, Lord! This was marvelous! I spent all day yesterday and today reading this. It was beautiful! Good job. I loved the way you described James and Lily's relationship from the start, the suspense you kept with the random memories of the kidnapping, the twists and turns... everything! This was simply amazing! I love how you wrote the defying Voldemort parts. They were great!
I'm going to check out your profile and read a few more of your fanfictions. You're a great writter!
Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I've been working on this story for so long its hard to imagine what it would be like to read it all for the first time without having to wait for another chapter. But I'm glad that you were able to and that you enjoyed it until the very end! The defying Voldemort parts were among the hardest to write, so its good to know you appreciate them!

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