Reviews For The Cave
Reviewer: DogLover4Life
Date: 06/03/07 2:12
Chapter: Fear Reawakened

o____o Her leg! For a moment, I was sure someone had opened the cave and come to her rescue, but no. It had to be you breaking her leg. Oh no. Oh no. Oh no. Oh no. Poor Denis! I donít want to read more! *is typing this during the process of reading* Oh, Denis! Why Denis? Oh, my. Why would Voldemort kill Denis, but leave Gloria? He must have done some sort of harm to Gloria. I canít wait for the next chapter. You have lovely way of portraying action, and emotion. Really, your story has my on the edge of my seat.

There are a few things I donít understand.

ĎAmy felt as if she were on fire, unbearable pain engulfing every part of her body. Her hands lost their grip on the basin, and she bent forward to examine her leg. At once, the hand grabbed her left arm and began pulling it down as well.í

In a situation like that, why would Amy just reach forward and examine her leg? If she is holding onto the basin for dear life, why would she look at her leg? I think Iím just reading this wrong, but care to explain?

Then, a few paragraphs later you contradict yourself.

ĎAnd without warning, the hand let go and sank down to the bottom of the lake.í

At first the lake made her feel like she was on fire, and now it is freezing? Also, it would have been nice if you had explained how she climbed back up the cliff. Amy almost fell when she was going to the cave, but now you just say that it was difficult?

Anyway, I love your story! Squeee. I just realised, I squeeed, and Denis is dead. How sad. *cries* I still canít wait for another update!


Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for the lovely, really long review! And I hope you aren't too sad about Denis! Voldemort did physically harm Gloria which will become clear in Chapter 7 but he also harmed Gloria emotionally - he took her father away from her and she will be forced to grow up with only one parent. When Amy's leg went underwater it was human instinct to bend forward and clutch her leg - sorry if I didn't explain that clearly enough. The water feeds on living flesh but for all the dead bodies in the lake it is very cold. Sorry I didn't describe the climb back up - I thought people would be bored reading it for the second time. I'm really glad you like my story and thanks for all the wonderful reviews!

Reviewer: Grumpy Sockpuppet
Date: 05/29/07 7:38
Chapter: Love and Torture

Meaty, suspense filled stuff. A definite recommendation! Truly magnificent.

Author's Response: Thankyou Grumpy! Ellie :D

Reviewer: chlorophyll
Date: 05/26/07 8:40
Chapter: Fear Reawakened

By the way, thanks for the dedication, but you neglected to mention the fact that the nice fluffy bunny rabbits would have to be yellow with pink spots and would be skipping around in a feild of blue daisies
with grhubarb,
Clara

Author's Response: Yes, but all that was obviously implied! Lots of grhubarb, Ellie xxx

Reviewer: Colli
Date: 05/23/07 14:32
Chapter: Love and Torture

E-MAIL hmm... dont think i'v heard of it....
sure u should like loads of reviews right????
I just hope u'll return the favor when i'm fic is validated....IF it is!!! - Katherines my beta so.. it should! -tell her to check her EMAIL because shes not replying and im bored!
well byebye for now! i'm off to EMAIL U!
Colli

Author's Response: Your fic is definetly gonna be validated :D Thanks for the banner!! Ellie x

Reviewer: chlorophyll
Date: 05/19/07 16:20
Chapter: Fear Reawakened

How could you do that to denis! You cold blooded, heartless murderer! I hate to say this, but you are fast turning into grumpy sockpuppet and she killed the ice cream who could...





...but didn't : (

Author's Response: *sob* I AM SORRY! In fairness, Denis has gone to a safe voldermort-free place!

Reviewer: chlorophyll
Date: 05/19/07 16:20
Chapter: Fear Reawakened

How could you do that to denis! You cold blooded, heartless murderer! I hate to say this, but you are fast turning into grumpy sockpuppet and she killed the ice cream who could...





...but didn't : (

Author's Response: The poor, poor ice cream :'''''( He has gone to the 99 whippy machine in the sky *sniff*

Reviewer: Colli
Date: 05/06/07 6:39
Chapter: Love and Torture

What ever.......(soz i cant think of a gd come back at this moment) u think of one.....

Author's Response: Colli! Stop leaving all these reviews! Ever heard of email??

Reviewer: Colli
Date: 05/03/07 4:56
Chapter: Fear Reawakened

P.s ye is made me cry..but ya see i was cutting onions while reading it...dont ask!
:D

Author's Response: Don't worry, I won't

Reviewer: Colli
Date: 05/03/07 4:55
Chapter: Fear Reawakened

Lol
Two more chapters, eh ellie?
Aren't you gettting abit ahead of ur self?
I'm pretty sure u said one that last time we discused ur fic! are u lieing to ur reviewrs?
I'll talk to u l8r. or tomorrw!
Best wishes
Colli

Author's Response: If you only want one chapter that could be arranged...but you won't find out what happens to Amy then!

Reviewer: Scheherazade
Date: 04/29/07 15:42
Chapter: Fear Reawakened

Wow... I can't believe it... Poor Dennis and Amy. :-( I hope this isn't the end of the story, I want Amy to be happy.

Author's Response: It isn't the end!! I'm going to write about 2 more chapters before then. Ellie =]

Reviewer: Kathyhermy123
Date: 04/29/07 15:39
Chapter: Fear Reawakened

You do know that this chappie won't stop me attacking you and will probably encourage it, don't you?

Prepare to be spun.

When I return.

Author's Response: *Gulp* I really don't like the sound of that!

Reviewer: Colli
Date: 04/29/07 14:59
Chapter: Fear Reawakened

This chapter made me cry.
:(
Nice chapter Ellie!
see ya friday? ;)
best wishes
Colli

Author's Response: Lemons and Melons and Pears, Oh My! My chapter made you cry? (Wow, I should switch to poetry!) See you on Friday! *Toss, Toss*

Reviewer: chlorophyll
Date: 03/19/07 14:57
Chapter: Love and Torture

Hi ellie, first i read ur story, then i set up an account on fanfiction and got addicted and now i'm reviewing ur story, what has the world come to- I suggest a happy ending or rather, hopefully, beggining, oh god! im making no sense any more! ahhhhhhhh! any way, as i have already told u, IT IS REALLY GOOD KEEP GOING (and are u still going to dedicate me something?)

Author's Response: You on fanfiction? I must be hallucinating *bangs head on desk* I'll dedicate my new story to you :D And as for this story having a happy ending...you'll have to wait and see ;)

Reviewer: Scheherazade
Date: 02/04/07 1:46
Chapter: Return to a Nightmare

This was a brilliant chapter, so please don't leave us hanging like this or I'll have to send Tom over. lol

I hope poor Amy can get out.

Author's Response: Please don't send Tom over, Amy has alot of other things to deal with right now! I'll try to update ASAP Ellie =]

Reviewer: XColliFlourX
Date: 01/29/07 2:58
Chapter: Love and Torture

God no that wud be....daft!!!!
u started the next chapter yet?
like i said keep up the good work :D
XColliFlourX


Author's Response: I have started it but it'll be a while as I have to write a very long script at the moment

Reviewer: XColliFlourX
Date: 01/28/07 11:27
Chapter: Love and Torture

lol. when i think of the name Gloria i think of that hipo in madagascar! :D
Keep up the good work!
XColliFlourX

Author's Response: Well, I'm pretty sure Amy and Denis didn't name their baby after a hippo!

Reviewer: DogLover4Life
Date: 01/27/07 1:48
Chapter: Return to a Nightmare

No! SHE JUST NEEDED CLOSURE! Why did you make that happen? She, she has a child and a husband. Let her live! Please. Let her live, let her be happy. If you let her live will she be able to get past this current horror? You've made us love her and now a dead body is attacking her. What's worse than being killed by a dead body? Maybe if people knew. But no, she will have just gone missing. And they will find her blood and think she committed suicide. Poor Denis. What's going to happen?!

Author's Response: Whoa! You're writing your own ending there! I'm writing chapter five right now and hopefully it will be up soon!

Reviewer: DogLover4Life
Date: 01/27/07 1:40
Chapter: The Locket

Will things be bad? I hope not. How come Tom won't leave her alone? She's supposed to be dead. He couldn't have missed hitting her, could he? And Regulus Black! For some reason I found his appearance oddly comforting. Amy deserves to live a completely good life. She seems to have a good life. But then Tom comes and makes these bad things happen. It's not fair. Yes I know life's not fair. But, life is stranger than fiction so what happens when you write about life? Wow, that was a bit random.

Author's Response: I like your saying! Tom did miss hitting Amy, she tripped and the curse went over her head. Amy appears to have a good life, but after all her experiences she senses death and other things which make her feel sad and alone inside.

Reviewer: DogLover4Life
Date: 01/27/07 1:32
Chapter: Reminiscence

Tom tormented her his entire life. Why didn't Dumbledore take him more seriously? No one knew what a monster Tom truly was. Except Amy. He tormented her! What does she turn out to be? As an adult, if she lives that long? He used her...

Author's Response: Tom did bully other children in the orphanage, but he was only truly horrible to Amy. What does Amy turn out like as an adult? You'll have to read the next chapter and find out!

Reviewer: DogLover4Life
Date: 01/27/07 1:24
Chapter: Love and Torture

She was so innocent. That sentence kept running through my head the entire time. She was so innocent; Denis was so innocent. I think Tom is more evil than Voldermort. This Tom, this was horrible to read. This is descriptive and riveting. But I felt like I was watching it. You got us emotionally attached to Amy and we felt for her. Then you have Tom come and destroy her. She was so happy to be eight, and so was Denis. Innocent children, Tom was only a child as well! But, he's evil and powerful. Iíve wanted to read this for a while but I never actually did, I canít really decide if I like this story or not. Iíll just keep reading and find out. This isnít criticism or anything; Iím just letting you know. Which is stupid because if you read this you will probably be like ďwhy is she even bothering?Ē Okay moving onÖ

Author's Response: :D I don't mind that you don't know what to think of my story but thnkyou for reading it and for the review, its given me a lot to think about!

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