Over all, it sounded well set out, the poem almost describes the tension one would most likely get when facing a moment of life and death, best wishes for future stories!
Over all, it sounded well set out, the poem almost describes the tension one would most likely get when facing a moment of life and death, best wishes for future stories!
Well, I must say I am not much on poetry. My mother was the poet in my family. So, I can't really say anything intelligent about it, or say that I totally understand it. I can comment on my own tastes, however, and I really did like this poem. I would have to say that my favorite line has definately got to be: The best regret is
One forgot
I only wish that I could forget my own! What a wonderful observation there. Maybe one day you can explain the rest of it to me! :) Or perhaps I need to let my brain rest on it a night and then look at it again. Maybe then I will have a better perspective?
Whatever the case, and no matter how ignorant I am of poetry, I did like it.
Author's Response: Hey, stranger. This poem is stream-of-consciousness. That means it is a jumble of thoughts running through one's mind. If you had a recording of all the half-thoughts, meaningless visions and associations in your mind, and read it like a book, it would make no sense. It's meant to be read like you think. You sort of assimilate it into your thoughts. Personally, I think stream-of-consciousness is like candy. It's fulfilling when it's small, rare and few-between. That's why I prefer it in poems. Authors like James Joyce and William Faulkner write novels entirely with this process. You can find snippets of their work, with explanations, throughout the Web. I don't recommend reading their books. I had the displeasure of reading Faulkner's As I lay Dying. Eventually I gave up, skipped to the last chapter, and after a glance at that promptly decided to give up on that too.
Author's Response: Oh, and thank you for the review. I appreciate anyone who takes the time to scribble down their thoughts after a read. *gives everyone a gold sticker*
wow, stunning
Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to review! Er.... is "stunning" good or bad? :D
Ok, I'll be completely honest with you - I just don't get it. I read the poem three times over, and I can't see where this relates to Snape. Well, except the forget and regret part - which I really liked.
Maybe you should have rated it professors. ;] Very nice job.
Author's Response: I appreciate the effort. *thumbs up* I've really got to tone down a bit after this. :D
