I'm not sure why my entire review didn't show before, so I'll try again!
This is definitely a different view that I would have never thought of, but it explains a lot that could have been. It explains the mystery behind Ollivander, his disappearance once Voldemort came back.
To make the Pheonix feather be one of the horcruxes opens the door to Harry's downfall, or at least brings that possibility to the forefront.
Ollivander a true follower of Voldemort...and like most Death Eaters believing (with the pride down in his heart) that he was the one person following Voldemort that had the most to offer. He did have a lot of freedom brought about by his trade. He needed to travel to distant places to obtain the things needed to make his wands. He did have to see Dragons and other mythical creatures in practicing his craft which would make him a perfect ambassidor.
I did get a bit confused with the centaurs...as they seemed to want nothing at all to do with Voldemort, or the otherside. They were adamant about remaining neutral and just to interpret the stars. If Voldemort had such a trusted Death Eater that had the ear of the centaurs who completed the prophesy from reading the stars, why would he still extend so many resources towards obtaining the prophesy? Plus, I think that Voldemort always had some distrust of even the most trustworthy Death Eater because he would fear that they were following him only to take his place at a later time...distrust is a central trait to Voldemort that he tried to beat out of his followers with fear. Fear is a powerful weapon, but it can back fire, too...take for example the Malfoys in DH.
Anyway, I loved this different view of Ollivander and can see how if he was more drawn to the dark arts could have been a great Death Eater and most trusted associate of Voldemort's.
Wow. I did not expect that coming. Ollivander, a servant of the Dark Lord? I had never considered it, but, when you think about it for a half a second, it makes sense. I had always thought that Ollivander had some fascination with the Dark Arts with his highly creepy nature in the books. Something never seemed quite... sane about it, and I don't think the Dark Lord would have had much trouble bringing him over. Show him marvels of magic, and he would be yours.
I also found the actual method of the Horcrux creation to be rather fascinating. Ingenious, really, to make a wand one, although I would presume that the Dark Lord would want his own wand to be a Horcrux - that way, it would be with him at all times and it would protect itself - and its master. I would have to wonder whether placing a Horcrux inside a wand makes the connection with the owner different, though. I wonder what Harry would have done if he had figured out his wand was indeed a Horcrux... that would be a tough decision indeed...
All in all, excellent job!
Wow, that is totally a different view then I would have been able to imagine, but you make it so real and believable! :)
Author's Response: thanks. <3
You have written a wonderful and very interesting story here, Suzie!!
Your summary is the first thing that caught my eye. After reading the title, I thought that this fic would be about Voldemort or Snape but youíve totally spun it around and have done the unexpected. How could Ollivander be in servitude to the Dark Lord and how could he have helped with the Horcruxes, as your summary suggests.
Although Iíve never thought Ollivander to be sided with Lord Voldemort, your story has excellent supporting reasons and itís very realistic. Maybe, just maybe, Ollivander wasnít kidnapped or ran away Ė maybe he is in hiding creating wands for Voldemort. Itís a scary thought but it has valid reasoning behind it.
My only problem with it is that the paragraph about Harry walking into Ollivanders to get his wand doesnít really fit with the emotion that JK has set in the book. I can remember Ollivander saying that Voldemort did terrible things and he put an emphasis on terrible. But with your fic, it seems as if Ollivander had just dark intentions in what he was doing; itís a bit contradictory with the first book. But, thereís always a but, it could very well be his thinking and it would really work if even a line or two about what he said in Sorcererís Stone was included. Maybe something about him saying it just to hide his true feelings or see how Harry would react. It would tie it together nicely and be a bit more canon.
One thing I love about your writing is your detail and way of description.
And so entered the Potter boy on one warm but dreary summers day, white grey clouds obliviating the sun, wind sweeping across the streets as if signalling changes to come.
This line is simply wonderful. It makes a certain connection with the reader through the text and the reader feels like they are in that certain location; they are capable of seeing what is written.
Once again, youíve written a very thought provoking story. Great job!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the great review, KC! Sorry for taking so long to respond!
Youíve picked my first ever fanfic to review and to be honest, Iím really not too keen on it; itís so different from my style now, and I hope Iíve improved but Ö Iím glad you like it. :)
I chose Ollivander for this story because Iíve always been fascinated by the fact that his name is an anagram for ďan evil lordĒ Ė always thought that there might be something behind it (and though we know that that there wasnít oh wellÖ) In the earlier books, Iíd thought that Ollivander seemed a bit too sinister Ė whether that was just in his nature due to his family or job, or whether he was really evil we didnít know.
I shall have to read this fic again *shudder* to fully understand your suggestions, as Iíve almost forgotten what this story is like, but thanks. Looking back I think I overemphasised some parts of what I felt was the sinister nature of Ollivander. Likewise, though I enjoy description in writing, I also felt that I overused description and imagery in places.
Thanks for the great review, and for taking time to read this story!
this is incredible. the way Ollivander is portrayed here so differently than he is in the book only adds to his "evil Death Eater" air!
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
I never thought that Olivander would be on the Dark Lord's side. It's an intresting twist. I really like it!
Author's Response: Hmm...well this was my first ever fic and I've not read it since. *hides* Ollivander has always seemed a bit sinister though...I'm glad you like it. :)
My friend, and beta, also figured out how Ollivander's name, when picked and puzzled over, became An Evil Lord. Great job on making this one-shot! [♥]
Author's Response: Thank you! I actually remember reading about the anagram on Mugglenet and was like, "WOW!"
Wow. What an image to capture. It's amazing. :) This is perfect for oneshot fictions. It is great the way it is... not dragged out or anything. It has an air of spookiness to it which I love! :) Ollivander... ohhh the wicked man you made him. *grins evilly*
Author's Response: Thanks. :) I'm glad you like it. *evil cackle*
OOOOh super cooleo subject. I love the idea of old Ollie as a Deathie. Haha. You are an amazing writer! Oh my goodness your eloquence is amazing and you use the perfect voice for this character. *trips while rushing over to hug you* I simply LLLOOOOOVVVEEE it!
Author's Response: *aww hugs back* Thanks! *hopes Maggie's fic is posted soon* :p
WOW!! 10/10 Kind of OC Ollivander though..
Author's Response: Thanks :) It was my first ever attempt at fanfiction and ideas were kind of random though.. *hides*
I don't think I've ever read a story about Ollivander like this before... It's definately an interesting take on his character - I love his appreciation for power. That seems very IC with what little we know about him. Also, the references to prophesies and destiny thoughout the piece are very good. Oloivander's character does seem a bit conflicting, though. One would think Ollivander woud "see through" the Dark Lord more - that his thirst for power would be more than could be satisfied by being anyone's right-hand man, and yet Ollivander is content to be "honoured by him" - seems like he has something else up his sleeve. But maybe I'm just reading into this too deeply...
Anyway, it was definately a good fic, and really got me thinking!
Author's Response: Thanks for the detailed review! :D I wrote this quite a while ago so I'm not quite sure what I meant either *hides* but you make a really good point about Ollivander's thirst for power...hmmm *thinks*
I have never read a cooler beginning! My blood is the purest of them all... it just basically drags you in! :) It is so... mysterious. You have a really good knack for conveying angsty plots into your story!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! *huggles* I still think Ollivander is evil.. *cackles*
WOW how original! I had never even thought or seen any theories like that!
I love how you got so much plot and charector building done in just this one shot! *cheers*
Amazing. Going on my faves. 10/10.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review!! :D Its my first attempt at a oneshot/ any fiction of any kind..eep! And I've never liked Ollivander...I just think that the anagram of his name is too much of a coincidence...
wow, that was brilliant!!!!! I hope you continue writing because that was brilliant [like I said before]! I'm speechless you really captured a side of Ollivander that I hadn't thought was possible. Of course this theory is entirely possibly because we know so little about him. Excellent 10/10
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! :D I've always felt Ollivander was a bit too 'sinister' to be completely innocent... I have some other fics on the go, so you might be seeing some more of mine in the future! :)