Reviews For Bohemian Rhapsody
Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 10/13/06 19:58
Chapter: And Afterwards...

How sad. I like how Draco and Harry's relationship is made obvious by the mutual agreement of it being a one-time thing, and them being drunk. But it turning into much more is done very well.

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it! Thank you very much for your review!

Reviewer: PICHA
Date: 10/13/06 1:51
Chapter: Bohemian Rhapsody

Good

Author's Response: Thanks

Reviewer: Tinka Blinka
Date: 10/10/06 23:08
Chapter: And Afterwards...

akward conversatin with narcissa there....

Author's Response: Wasn't it, though?

Reviewer: Peaches_9
Date: 10/06/06 21:51
Chapter: And Afterwards...

aww How cute of harry and Narcissa to do that. I really elle oh vee eded your story. Perfect

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it, thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: StoryFromTheStars
Date: 09/18/06 18:24
Chapter: And Afterwards...

Wow.
Wow.
That was really well written.
Good job. I like the way you started this portion of the story. It made you almost believe that Draco was alive, or that that night had never happened.
Wow.
I loved it!
Star

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Yes, interesting, isn't it? I'm posting an "alternate sequel" eventually, which starts where the first part ends. If you're curious as to what would happen if Draco actually hadn't died, keep your eyes open. :) Thank you for the praise and the review.

Reviewer: Dumbledore Prince
Date: 09/18/06 8:13
Chapter: And Afterwards...

Ah, Maia ... you have a good way of stunning your readers.

Harry woke up, sweating and panting. It had only been a dream.

I was stunned on reading this. I was thinking something like "It was all a dream?" I think you've heard of an old theory - "Harry will wake up at the end of Book Seven and realise that it was all a dream ... blah blah blah ..." - I was reminded of it in an instant.

“I don’t want to know what happened in your room last night,” he said bluntly.

This dialogue was very Ron! Oh, he's so over-protective ... your characterisation is excellent, as always.

The conversation between Harry and Narcissa is very captivating. It had a lot of tension, even though I think that it would have been much more hostile. Then again, I've always thought that Narcissa is more subtle than Draco.

“Harry Potter,” she said, “do feel free to visit me. I live in London. Should you wish to come by, owl me and I’ll send you my address.”

I did find it hard to imagine this, though. Narcissa isn't this friendly to Harry in canon. Something tells me that Harry doesn't owl her or meet her after this meeting. Feel free to correct me if I'm wrong.

I'm sorry if I sounded a bit too critical; I was just trying to give you some concrit.

Author's Response: You sound in no way too critical! I love getting proper, constructive reviews.

This dialogue was very Ron! Oh, he's so over-protective ... your characterisation is excellent, as always.

Thank you! I thought it was a Ron thing to say. I'm glad I managed to capture him with as few lines as he had.

No, the conversatioin with Narcissa may at first seem a bit OOC. But I have always been of the oppinion that Narcissa isn't really a bad person. She cares about her family; indeed, she loves Draco enough to tell Severus about the Plan, even though she wasn't meant to speak of it to anyone. With both her husband and her son gone, her sister in Azkaban, and no other living relatives, Narcissa is really quite desperate, and would want whatever company she could get. She senses from Harry's attitude that he and Draco were somehow friends towards the end, which would actually make Harry the only friend Draco ever had.

I honestly don't know whether Harry will contact her or not; I leave this as an open ending. The real challenge lies in the alternate sequel (which I still don't know what to call).

Thank you very much for a gread, constructive review! I do so enjoy getting them from you. I'm so happy you enjoyed my story! :)

Reviewer: greeneyes
Date: 09/16/06 18:12
Chapter: Bohemian Rhapsody

I don't usually read slash stories, this one is pretty good! Slash doesn't bother me, but I tend to stick to canon pairings. However, I like this set up, and I love the title! And the summary! It's great! =]

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it, and thank you for reviewing! :)

Reviewer: HarrysGrl14
Date: 09/12/06 22:22
Chapter: Bohemian Rhapsody

Amazing. I really liked the ending... a bit morbid... not at all cliched though.

Author's Response: Thanks for your review! I'm glad you liked it. And I'm very happy it didn't seem clichéd! :)

Reviewer: Dumbledore Prince
Date: 09/12/06 11:57
Chapter: Bohemian Rhapsody

Wow, this was an intense and powerful story! I'm pretty picky when it comes to romance fics and I'm glad that the summary drew me in. Plus, you're a familiar author. :D

The characterisation and plot are very good. This is one of the very few Harry/Draco fics that didn't seem rushed to me.

It was the first time Draco had killed someone. It was not the person he had been sent to kill. This man was a fellow Death Eater, and somebody he had gone to school with. It was somebody he had shared a common room with, and spoken to on several occasions. This man had been sent with him to make sure the job was done. And now he was dead.

These lines are very powerful and they're in the right place. These lines make the reader feel for Draco a lot. Mind you, this is coming from a person who doesn't fangirl Draco, Snape or any Slytherin in general.

“The strongest you have,” said Draco, flicking his wand unnoticeably under the counter, wordlessly pronouncing an incantation.

A subtle way of informing the reader about the Memory Charm.

The initial conversation between Harry and Draco was completely in character, and gripping as well.

One of them raised a wand, and said the words, and as a jet of green light came at him, seemingly in slow motion, the wind blew in the trees and Draco laughed. Nothing really mattered anymore.

The ending took me by surprise. I do find it hard to believe that Draco would accept death so quickly and abruptly. It was good, though. This is one of those dark romances ...

It was an amazing read with substance, and made perfect sense. Well done, Maia!

*grumbles* The server logged me out when I hit the submit button first. Luckily, I'd copied this review prior to its submission. I hope you get many more reviews for this!

Author's Response: Wow, long review! I love long reviews!
First of all, thank you so much for reviewing, and I'm so very glad you liked it! I'm also very happy that it didn't seem rushed. I was kind of afraid that it would, since it all happens in one night, but I also felt that it was logical and realistic that Draco, the night before he knows he's going to die, clings to whatever little love he can find.
It also pleases me to know that I can make a reader who's not the fangirl I am feel for the character of Draco. I think that Draco is a far more complex character than people seem to give him credit for. There's more to him than meets the eye. The conversation between him and Harry is possibly the most dificult dialogue I've ever written. I rewrote it so many times, because I needed it to be realistic at the same time as leading up to the major plot point, which would be the romance.
The ending took me by surprise. I do find it hard to believe that Draco would accept death so quickly and abruptly.
I can understand that you would. Draco is initially a person who is afraid of death, pain and everything else. Basically a model Slytherin; ambitious, but not willing to sacrifice his own skin. However, I think that at the point when he failed to kill Dumbledore, Draco's entire attitude to death changed. Things would have stopped mattering to him, because right then he was sure he would die anyway. Such an experience will leave you numb and out of it for a while. Snape saved Draco's hide, but life stopped mattering much. In the end, he pretty much just wanted to be rid of life, but was too much of a coward to do it himself.
Again, I'm really glad you liked it. Thank you for a wonderful review. Hope you'll read the sequel too, when I get it up! :)


Author's Response: Wow, chunk of text... I wish there was a preview button here... Ignore it, try again: Wow, long review! I love long reviews!

First of all, thank you so much for reviewing, and I'm so very glad you liked it! I'm also very happy that it didn't seem rushed. I was kind of afraid that it would, since it all happens in one night, but I also felt that it was logical and realistic that Draco, the night before he knows he's going to die, clings to whatever little love he can find.

It also pleases me to know that I can make a reader who's not the fangirl I am feel for the character of Draco. I think that Draco is a far more complex character than people seem to give him credit for. There's more to him than meets the eye. The conversation between him and Harry is possibly the most dificult dialogue I've ever written. I rewrote it so many times, because I needed it to be realistic at the same time as leading up to the major plot point, which would be the romance.

The ending took me by surprise. I do find it hard to believe that Draco would accept death so quickly and abruptly.

I can understand that you would. Draco is initially a person who is afraid of death, pain and everything else. Basically a model Slytherin; ambitious, but not willing to sacrifice his own skin. However, I think that at the point when he failed to kill Dumbledore, Draco's entire attitude to death changed. Things would have stopped mattering to him, because right then he was sure he would die anyway. Such an experience will leave you numb and out of it for a while. Snape saved Draco's hide, but life stopped mattering much. In the end, he pretty much just wanted to be rid of life, but was too much of a coward to do it himself.

Again, I'm really glad you liked it. Thank you for a wonderful review. Hope you'll read the sequel too, when I get it up! :)

Reviewer: daylightisdying
Date: 09/12/06 1:37
Chapter: Bohemian Rhapsody

As you already know, I love this :) Glad to have helped!

Author's Response: Yes, thanks again for your help! It was really great of you! Now, if only I could locate Purplemage... I haven't heard from him in months... =S

Thanks for reviewing, and thanks for being a good beta! :)

Reviewer: Khrys
Date: 09/11/06 12:50
Chapter: Bohemian Rhapsody

What a powerfully beautiful story. The imagery was intense and the emotions overwhelming. Wow!

Author's Response: Yay! First review! Thank you so very much, I'm really glad you liked it! :)

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