Reviews For Taking the Plunge
Reviewer: ebohlman
Date: 09/07/07 18:53
Chapter: Taking the Plunge

Excellent. Quite a bit of what you wrote was droll in a very Rowlingian way, like the whole exchange about the cleanliness or lack thereof at the Hog's Head (especially since, according to his daughter, Ted isn't all that much better than Aberforth) and the bit about how Alphard's stories didn't use pureblood surnames. The overall theme of the story made a lot of sense; the Blacks aren't going to be happy under any circumstances, but there are ways to reduce the damage (someone ought to write a similar story involving Arthur Weasley's parents).

Minor nitpicks: you could use some basic copy editing (things like "your" where it should be "you're"; a few dropped words). "Cygnus was no longer asking me to watch the girls for him while he frantically studied for his NEWTs" gets major credit for NOT saying "NEWT's", but unfortunately JKR pulled the rug out from under you with her wonderful math skills; in preparation for the OOTP movie, she revised the Black Family Tree so that Cygnus was born in 1929 (and therefore must be no more than 4 years younger than Alphard, and might well be his twin if, as I suspect, Pollux and Irma were told to go at it until they brought another male into that branch of the family) instead of 1938 and so was childless when cramming for his NEWTs (though Pollux would have had a harder time finding babysitters under the same circumstances).

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 06/11/07 15:29
Chapter: Taking the Plunge

That's a sweet take on Andromeda/Ted! I really liked your Alphard and the way he talked to Ted; it really made sense and it showed what was necessary. I'm glad Ted and Andromeda made the right choice, :D. A really well-written and lovely fic!

Reviewer: Chaser921
Date: 02/10/07 18:58
Chapter: Taking the Plunge

Yay! I like Alphard! He's the best! You brought to live three characters that we barely know about, and I think that your portrayal fits with what we know about them. Well written and thoroughly enjoyable.

Reviewer: GinnyRox
Date: 11/23/06 22:10
Chapter: Taking the Plunge

Very good story! Your wording was fantastic and all your characters were so believable. The only thing I noticed was that this story didn't show as much interaction between Ted ans Andromeda as I would've liked. But nevertheless you did an awesome job on this fic!

Reviewer: GinnyRox
Date: 11/23/06 22:09
Chapter: Taking the Plunge

Very good story! Your wording was fantastic and all your characters were so believable. The only thing I noticed was that this story didn't show as much interaction between Ted ans Andromeda as I would've liked. But nevertheless you did an awesome job on this fic!

Reviewer: WunderWitch
Date: 11/11/06 19:09
Chapter: Taking the Plunge

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!! That is so cute!! I love Andy/Ted stories!!!!!!!

Reviewer: shimotsuki
Date: 09/09/06 13:39
Chapter: Taking the Plunge

Aww. Nicely written, and the characters are very real. The Black family and their interactions provide plenty of scope for speculation, don't they.

Many fans seem to imagine Alphard as having been openly opposed to the family all along, but I like your take on him -- a lot more subtle. His oblique comments about Aberforth being good for overshadowed siblings are poignant. (I'm not quite sure that I understand the reference in "unlike the average fourteen-year-old," however.)

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