Something VERY close to it was said in "Aquamarine." Very good story!
Your poetry is absolutely fantastic. Enough said.
Umm I'm pretty sure I WILL forget those poems. At least I hope I do..
Umm I'm pretty sure I WILL forget thos poems. At least I hope I do..
What a beautiful line at the end! Wonderful, absolutley wonderful! Well done!
OH! 'Nother thing. The bit about the stairs: that confused me. A boy can't go up the girls' stairs: they turn into a slide. THe girls can go up the boy's stairs; that's how Hermione got up to talk to Ron and Harry in the books at Christmas. So, review that and make some corrections.
-"Lily broke there gaze and turned to go as James climbed up two of the stairs, but then stopped." "There" should be "thier".
-"..a boy said silently to himself as he lye awake staring at the ceiling." "lye" is a type of plant, i think. "lie" is the word you're looking for.
-"Or, maybe that I maybe it is I hate you." I know it's part of the poem, but that doens't make sense.
-The poetry was good, I'll admit even though I'm not a big fan of poetry. But, I know that there was something missing from this story. Real emotion, maybe. But, don't beat yourself up; I'm just another author. But I can't say that this was extremely great. Good, not great.
Don't hate me.
that almost made me cry! did u come up with those poems? if u did, ur good! great story, i luv it
Author's Response: yeah, the poems are all mine. thanks!
*sniffsniff* that was so cute. he broke it off to try and protect her. At least now they know how much they love each other.
Your fic is amazing! It was so good! I wanted to cry at points. And, the poetry was really good! I'm not very good at it, but ur amzing!
That was great! Aww. I'm going to think about that as I go to bed tonight seriously. Hope you don't mind, but I'm going to tamper with the ending, of course. Cute story, and great last sentence.
i loved your peoms. but i loved you last sentence it's so touching, it's also made me cry, almost.
It was awsome!
But...he broke up with her because she was in danger because of him? How was he in danger in order for her to be in danger?
Oh, God...I just totally confused myself back there.
Was it just for the purposes of the story...?
Author's Response: was just so the story would work, i was thinking of changing it around a bit so it was a H/G
wow that was so sweet... love the poems. Great job!
This is an awfully sweet story. I love your last line!
Really sweet, nice, and the poetry was all real. Longbottom was the misfit though, he doesn't register even as the messenger. Does lend snazz to the name though.
