Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 07/22/07 17:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

Something VERY close to it was said in "Aquamarine." Very good story!

Reviewer: Chuchi
Date: 07/12/07 19:48
Chapter: Chapter 1

Your poetry is absolutely fantastic. Enough said.

Reviewer: thesmart1
Date: 07/07/07 19:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

Awwe, that was so cute!!!

Reviewer: StodgePoopin
Date: 07/06/07 15:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

Umm I'm pretty sure I WILL forget those poems. At least I hope I do..

Reviewer: StodgePoopin
Date: 07/06/07 15:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

Umm I'm pretty sure I WILL forget thos poems. At least I hope I do..

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 07/05/07 0:05
Chapter: Chapter 1

What a beautiful line at the end! Wonderful, absolutley wonderful! Well done!

Reviewer: LaneTechFreshie
Date: 06/07/07 20:44
Chapter: Chapter 1

OH! 'Nother thing. The bit about the stairs: that confused me. A boy can't go up the girls' stairs: they turn into a slide. THe girls can go up the boy's stairs; that's how Hermione got up to talk to Ron and Harry in the books at Christmas. So, review that and make some corrections.

Reviewer: LaneTechFreshie
Date: 06/07/07 20:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

-"Lily broke there gaze and turned to go as James climbed up two of the stairs, but then stopped." "There" should be "thier".
-"..a boy said silently to himself as he lye awake staring at the ceiling." "lye" is a type of plant, i think. "lie" is the word you're looking for.
-"Or, maybe that I maybe it is I hate you." I know it's part of the poem, but that doens't make sense.
-The poetry was good, I'll admit even though I'm not a big fan of poetry. But, I know that there was something missing from this story. Real emotion, maybe. But, don't beat yourself up; I'm just another author. But I can't say that this was extremely great. Good, not great.
Don't hate me.

Reviewer: Queen_Lily
Date: 05/18/07 21:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

that almost made me cry! did u come up with those poems? if u did, ur good! great story, i luv it

Author's Response: yeah, the poems are all mine. thanks!

Reviewer: pottergurl92
Date: 04/07/07 8:38
Chapter: Chapter 1

Amazing!!!!!!

Reviewer: DogLover4Life
Date: 12/26/06 20:28
Chapter: Chapter 1

*sniffsniff* that was so cute. he broke it off to try and protect her. At least now they know how much they love each other.

Reviewer: heartachin4harry
Date: 12/25/06 22:32
Chapter: Chapter 1

Your fic is amazing! It was so good! I wanted to cry at points. And, the poetry was really good! I'm not very good at it, but ur amzing!

Reviewer: A House Elf
Date: 12/20/06 0:02
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was great! Aww. I'm going to think about that as I go to bed tonight seriously. Hope you don't mind, but I'm going to tamper with the ending, of course. Cute story, and great last sentence.

Reviewer: dracoshottie
Date: 11/18/06 22:41
Chapter: Chapter 1

i loved your peoms. but i loved you last sentence it's so touching, it's also made me cry, almost.

Reviewer: adalittle
Date: 11/12/06 12:44
Chapter: Chapter 1

awww, that is really sweet!

Reviewer: Banana Shroogle
Date: 11/11/06 16:13
Chapter: Chapter 1

It was awsome!

But...he broke up with her because she was in danger because of him? How was he in danger in order for her to be in danger?

Oh, God...I just totally confused myself back there.

Was it just for the purposes of the story...?

Author's Response: was just so the story would work, i was thinking of changing it around a bit so it was a H/G

Reviewer: draco_slytherin
Date: 10/06/06 21:29
Chapter: Chapter 1

wow that was so sweet... love the poems. Great job!

Reviewer: sinfonia_concertante
Date: 09/20/06 19:22
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is an awfully sweet story. I love your last line!

Reviewer: sirius_rox
Date: 09/16/06 23:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

aw.. so cute

Reviewer: lovelilyjames
Date: 09/15/06 10:53
Chapter: Chapter 1

Really sweet, nice, and the poetry was all real. Longbottom was the misfit though, he doesn't register even as the messenger. Does lend snazz to the name though.

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