Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 02/26/10 13:42
Chapter: Chapter 4 - The Denial Continues

Why is it we sometimes hate to accept that the obvious is true? So it sounds like Amos was a pretty boy but a little too caught up with himself. I think Shane and Arthur are better friends than it looked at first. Shane seems to have Arthur's best interests at heart. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 02/26/10 13:13
Chapter: Chapter 3: Competition

When I pictured Amos Diggory all I could think of was Rob Pattinson:D Maeve is so mean. I suppose she means well--she did say she didn't want Molly to go out with Arthur out of pity but who's to say that's the reason? I hate to think of poor Arthur with hurt feelings. I can understand though--Arthur's the steady, kind, and weird guy who probably no one wants to date--you know, the nice guy who finishes last. Even Shane seems confused by Maeve's actions. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 02/26/10 13:06
Chapter: Chattings About Children

Aww--that was so sweet. I'm beginning to think that Maeve is mean and rude. To think that Arthur already knows he wants seven children and he's not afraid to say it:P It's funny--young Alastor already sounds like older Alastor. Great chapter.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 02/26/10 12:57
Chapter: Prefects & Fellytones

How sweet. I can see how Arthur would be very annoying but also endearing with his "crazy" love of all things muggle. I just smiled at his description of his visit to a muggle art museum. I thought I'd try out some of the featured stories. That's how I discovered my very favorite author, Kerichi. Great start to what promises to be a very sweet story.

Reviewer: coolh5000
Date: 09/30/09 17:26
Chapter: Prefects & Fellytones

I love reading about Molly and Arthur’s relationship but find there are so few good fics out there about them. Luckily, so far this is definitely appears to be one of them!

This was a great first chapter and set up what I think is going to be a very interesting story. I like that you’ve started off before they fell in love, when Molly wasn’t really bothered about him, and Arthur was just having to pine in secret, though the seeds of thought have been placed in Molly’s head by Maeve’s casual and somewhat jokey comment about Arthur loving her. I’m looking forward to finding out how he eventually wins her over or why she comes to be attracted to him.

As we only ever see them as adults in the books, your characterisation of the pair as Hogwarts students is really interesting, and the first thing that struck me is that you’ve managed to effectively work in aspects of each of their children’s characters without being too obvious about it. Molly’s similarities to Percy – her responsibility as a prefect and strong belief in sticking to the rules, if maybe not quite with the same rigidness as her son - were a really good example of this. Percy always seems like the ‘odd one out’ child in the Weasley family, and I’m glad that you showed his personality had to have come from somewhere rather than just appearing out of nowhere. Equally, a sense of the twin’s mischief can be found in Arthur’s character as the two talk about prefecting. I think there are also elements of the other children to be found in there as well, though at the same time, Molly and Arthur both remain individuals and I feel like you really thought about their characterisation and making them original as well as maybe slipping in a few hints to their future children.

One other point about the characterisation is that even though you have understandably shown the differences between their teenage and adult selves, there are still parts of their characters that are seen when they are grown ups that you have shown to be already present. Arthur’s love of all things Muggle is definitely a part of him that I can see as having been present since he was a very young child and so I’m glad you chose to use it here. I did laugh at his moment of clumsiness, which I thought was very well written, but also made me cringe with embarrassment for poor Arthur!

I felt so bad for Arthur at the end, and indeed all the way through, especially when Maeve was being so mean about him, with this sentence: She never noticed – and Arthur was beginning to believe she never would and even though I know what is going to happen between the couple eventually, it didn’t stop me feeling a pang of sympathy for him and his unrequited crush, as well as a hope that Molly would notice him, rather than just seeing him as Muggle-loving Weasley and finding the idea of love funny.

This was generally written very well and though there were some places where the dialogue punctuation slipped, it was nothing that took away from the flow of the story. I’m now going to dash off to read the next chapter!

~Hannah

Reviewer: lupinluver
Date: 03/19/08 19:57
Chapter: Chattings About Children

they're so cute! its adorable! omg arthur! hehehe! i love him! i like this story!!!!

Reviewer: DMTAT003
Date: 09/29/07 23:25
Chapter: Chapter 10: The Beginning

A great story...always refreshing to see some of the older characters...fun to re-read. Arthur and Molly are characterized very well. Extremely believable.

Reviewer: flaming_phoenix_fire
Date: 09/18/07 0:03
Chapter: Chapter 10: The Beginning

I absolutely love this story. I read it awhile back, but I was too lazy to log in to review, but I've remembered it. I had to come back and read it. Loved it AGAIN. It is so sweet. I really wish there were more of these type fics out there. Great work.

Reviewer: princessesierra
Date: 06/26/07 8:09
Chapter: Chattings About Children

Awwww.... He'll b on cloud nine 4 d next 2 dayz!!!

Reviewer: Meryl Montgomery
Date: 07/21/06 0:45
Chapter: Chapter 10: The Beginning

Arthur/Molly is actually my favourite 'ship, since Arthur is one of my favourite characters in the series. Unfortunately, those who do love this particular 'ship as much as we do, don't generally stumble across a lot of fanfiction of it, so you can only imagine my delight when I stumbled across this (absolutely well-written) story. So cheers, and thanks. C=

Reviewer: GWeaz
Date: 07/04/06 10:19
Chapter: Chapter 10: The Beginning

"She briefly considered the sound of ‘Molly Weasley’ at least once a day." Very cute. And I love that they do name their firstborn William. I am so happy for them, this was beyond good. I loved every minute of it and am so glad that I read it. I have always loved Arthur and Molly together and your story made me love them even more!

Reviewer: GWeaz
Date: 07/04/06 10:07
Chapter: Chapter 9: Fred and George

Dumbledore is too funny. Too bad he had to come in at the wrong moment though. Anyway, great chapter!

Reviewer: GWeaz
Date: 07/04/06 9:57
Chapter: Chapter 8: The Shane

Oh dear. Drama. I loved Shane, Maeve, and Molly at the end, that is exactly what that conversation would sound like. Anyway, too funny. Can't wait to see what's next!

Reviewer: GWeaz
Date: 07/04/06 8:04
Chapter: Chapter 6: Are You A Gryffindor?

Awesome chapter. I cannot wait for Arthur to finally tell her how he feels. He was so cute describing Molly. Had that been me I think I would have fainted.

Reviewer: GWeaz
Date: 07/03/06 21:35
Chapter: Chattings About Children

Moody? Very nice. I love that you are incorporating characters that we all know and love. Arthur is great, he seems just right.

Reviewer: GWeaz
Date: 07/03/06 21:27
Chapter: Prefects & Fellytones

Awwww, this is soooo cute. I absolutely love Arthur and Molly in the series and have never had the opportunity to read a story about them. I am beyond excited about reading this. It is already very good and well written, so I am looking forward to more!

Reviewer: bookworm2011
Date: 06/13/06 11:51
Chapter: Chapter 10: The Beginning

Took me a minute to get it, but then I realized, they DID name there firstborn William! Because Bill is short for William! Yea me! I figured it out! Awesome fic by the way don't mind my ramblings! Usually i'm a bit slow on the uptake!

Reviewer: Leahr
Date: 05/03/06 20:17
Chapter: Chapter 10: The Beginning

This is a really great idea for a story, and very well written and charaterized. I liked all the little hints to the future, like the names, and the line about how "I'll still have the marks in 30 years" like in the book. Excellent job! Molly/Arthur deserves more fanfic than it gets.

Reviewer: ladymedc
Date: 04/21/06 10:44
Chapter: Chapter 10: The Beginning

A very precious story. Not many think to go back and tell how those that are already together got togther...Thanks.

Reviewer: Cinderella Angelina
Date: 02/11/06 18:17
Chapter: Chapter 10: The Beginning

Oh, well, from Nikki's review, about making a ship in the Madam Puddifoot's forum, well, she did, and, because of this story, I'm part of it. This story was sweet and believable, and one of those stories that says "This is canon that JKR just didn't have room to put in the books." I thought you did a great job.

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