Reviewer: RememberDumbledore
Date: 11/19/06 11:14
Chapter: Chapter 3: Masquerade Time!

Wow. I really hope, for your own safety and sanity, that you're making Mary-Sue so disgustingly Mary-Sueish on purpose, and you're making fun of Draco/Hermione-with-perfect-hair-and-model's-body-in-make-up-and-tight- clothes.
Very funny, though. Good job!

Author's Response: Yes, this IS a parody... I hope no one actually writes a serious story THIS full of clichés... Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Mind_Over_Matter
Date: 11/06/06 23:24
Chapter: Chapter 3: Masquerade Time!

You updated! *Does the update-dance*

This chapter was, of course, great. I especially can't believe how much I love your Dumbledore. He is simply divine! Although this just came out, I eagerly await the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review! :D I'm glad you're enjoying Dumbledore, I'm having a lot of fun writing him!

Reviewer: GinnyPotter808
Date: 11/06/06 17:09
Chapter: Chapter 2: The Bemusing Musings of Dumbledore and Draco

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! Not Draco and Mione! I want Draco!

Author's Response: Well, we'll see how long-lived this romance is... :D Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: GinnyPotter808
Date: 11/06/06 17:04
Chapter: Chapter 1: Who is this "Half-Blood Prince," Anyway?

OOC!Harry. Never thought I'd see the day...

Author's Response: :D Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: GinnyPotter808
Date: 11/06/06 17:01
Chapter: Prologue: Meeting Mary-Sue


Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Schmerg_The_Impaler
Date: 11/06/06 16:33
Chapter: Chapter 3: Masquerade Time!

HAHAHAHAHAH! I love this chapter. It has the dorms! My favourite part of all was when he said: Something big. Something exciting. Something scary. Something hairy. Something crazy. Then I realized that Hagrid was missing. That really cracked me up... and Draco and Hermione's stupidity, of course. I kind of missed Mary-Sue, since she wasn't around as much in this chapter. Ah, well.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Don't worry, everyone's favorite character will return soon - with new schemes and thoughts and plans for romance! Glad you're enjoying this fic!

Reviewer: erm
Date: 11/05/06 14:30
Chapter: Prologue: Meeting Mary-Sue

Hee hee hee I love this! You almost made me choke on the chocolate I was eating... And then the water I was drinking... But anyway, It's great! Good job.

Author's Response: Eeek! I'm not trying to kill anyone! :D Glad you enjoyed the story though, and thanks for the review!

Reviewer: HPwizzzard
Date: 11/05/06 14:22
Chapter: Chapter 3: Masquerade Time!

OOooooooh, first reviewer! You have managed to work in yet another annoying cliche- congrats!

Author's Response: :D whoops...

Reviewer: HPwizzzard
Date: 11/05/06 14:21
Chapter: Chapter 3: Masquerade Time!

OOooooooh, first reviewer! You have managed to work in yet another annoying cliche- congrats!

Author's Response: Yay for reviews! Thanks, I'm glad you're enjoying it!

Reviewer: angel_in_ink
Date: 10/19/06 18:05
Chapter: Chapter 1: Who is this "Half-Blood Prince," Anyway?

nice parody! work in more funny, try mocking a bit more.

Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to review! I'm trying my best to get the most annoying clichés into the fic!

Reviewer: Schmerg_The_Impaler
Date: 10/10/06 19:57
Chapter: Chapter 2: The Bemusing Musings of Dumbledore and Draco

Wow. You have managed to cram every cliche into one story. The only thing this story needs now is a head boy/girl shared dorm and time travelling to Marauder era and future generation portions to incorporate all of the cliches! (This was pointed out to me by the suddenly extremely handsome Severus Snape, who is for some reason wearing tight leather pants and being really, really nice, despite his cold exterior.)

Author's Response: Oh, you guessed it! Snape will be feauturing next chapter. I'm not sure about Time travelling, though. Maybe some sort of sequel though... hm... Mary-Sue Jr... *runs off to feed plot bunny*

Reviewer: Schmerg_The_Impaler
Date: 10/10/06 19:53
Chapter: Chapter 1: Who is this "Half-Blood Prince," Anyway?

Ha, I love this chapter! Especially the dry commentary on Ron's characterization, and the part that talked about Harry having had a growth spurt. That particular part made me laugh, because I imagined him having a very FAST growth spurt, right before Mary Sue rested her head on his shoulder.

Author's Response: Thanks for yet another review! I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter! *What an original response, eh?*

Reviewer: Schmerg_The_Impaler
Date: 10/10/06 19:50
Chapter: Prologue: Meeting Mary-Sue

That's fantastic! MAria-Susana... that's an interesting one. I want to see Harry's reaction to Mary-Sue.

And I read your profile, where you talked about your fondness for Lavender and Parvati. I can see why you're spoofing their characterization here.

Author's Response: Yeah. I really hate when they're characterized like I have in this fic... if it's meant seriously, of course... Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Seeker_Girl
Date: 10/07/06 9:23
Chapter: Chapter 2: The Bemusing Musings of Dumbledore and Draco

i love it! *laughs at the idea of a masquerade the applauds* please continue!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'll be updating ASAP...!

Reviewer: Mind_Over_Matter
Date: 09/25/06 8:57
Chapter: Chapter 2: The Bemusing Musings of Dumbledore and Draco

^^ Haha!

You did it again - the descriptions just come across as natural, but are really funny! Like with Dumbledore... you know, for a moment, the mind reads,

Dumbledore, who had become increasingly senile over the past week, was sitting in his office, humming to himself while popping lemon drop after lemon drop into his mouth.

Suddenly he heard a loud commotion outside his door. Being the senile old coot he was, however, he just let whoever it was continue banging, and lay his head on his chest to take a little nap.

And just sort of goes, 'Hmm. Alright then' subconsciously, for a moment, before realising how ridiculous that is. My mind, anyway. Also the description of 'Mary Sue's sappy words'... I don't know, there's just something about your style of humour that I've just completely fallen in love with.

I was a little worried when the Hermione/Draco stuff was introduced - to me, parodies of that cliche feel done, ever since Eilime's 'Not Going to Happen, Chica', but I really think that Draco talking to himself just completely and utterly saved it. Another brilliant chapter in my high opinion!

Author's Response: Thanks for another review!! I'm so glad you're liking this story *hopes she can continue to keep readers* You're right, "Not Going to Happen, Chica" has got to be the most succinct and funny summary of Draco/Hermione clichés. I just figured a masqerade was neccesary for this fic...We'll see if Draco really ends up with Hermione.... :D

Reviewer: PhoebePreble
Date: 09/23/06 19:34
Chapter: Prologue: Meeting Mary-Sue

*chokecoff* Congradulations on getting awarded the prestigious Make Phoebe Snort Her Lemonade contest. I think it was a little too fast paced and brief in some places, but you've got the whole exchange student from California thing DOWN. Hope to see more of this story!


Author's Response: :D Thank you, thank you *bows to audience watching her recieve award* I'm glad you're enjoying the not at all boring *sarcasm* character of Mary-Sue!

Reviewer: nadine29
Date: 09/23/06 14:38
Chapter: Chapter 2: The Bemusing Musings of Dumbledore and Draco

ok...umm .a little. too happy n quick paced n, just soo...ooc for harry..and my make that gurl have one single flaw for goodness sakes!

Author's Response: umm... This is a parody... Harry is ooc on purpose, and Mary-Sue is supposed to be perfect... The happy and quick paced is on purpose, too. It just bugs me how so many fics have "the new girl" come and save the day and then the story becomes completely sappy and ridiculous.

Reviewer: KitKat517
Date: 09/18/06 18:55
Chapter: Chapter 1: Who is this "Half-Blood Prince," Anyway?

Ahh! No! The first line of my review dissapeared! Where did it go!?Oh well. Here is what it said:

Very funny! I love it. Now I must go do homework because a) I don't want to fail school

Just put that at the top of what's under this. Sorry. Bye again.

Author's Response: :) I did wonder about that line... Oh well... Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: KitKat517
Date: 09/18/06 18:53
Chapter: Chapter 1: Who is this "Half-Blood Prince," Anyway?

for that would be bad, b) I just heard my mom tell the person she is talking to on the phone that I am doing my homework and I don't wish to make a liar out of her, and c) my sister is doing her homework and I refuse to let her show me up by being a better student. Therefore (doesn’t that word make this sound so much smarter?), I will finish this quickly. I love this story so far and am looking forward to reading the next chapter almost as much as I am looking forward to the day when my teachers will say, "I don't think you should have any homework tonight because you deserve a night off.” (This will probably never happen, unlike the next chapter). Oh, right, I'm supposed to be finishing quickly so, great story, great chapter, keep up the good work, people really do use the words good and great too much in reviews (at least in my opinion), and teachers are evil and give too much homework.
P.S. Sorry to complain about my homework in your review. I promise not to do it again. I love this story. Okay, I’m going to make myself stop now. GET AWAY FROM THE COMPUTER SELF!

Author's Response: Lol!! I know how you feel... I just joined the procrastinators club on the forum... :D And yes, teachers are evil!! Thanks for the review, though! I'm glad you like the story so far!

Reviewer: Mind_Over_Matter
Date: 09/17/06 1:04
Chapter: Chapter 1: Who is this "Half-Blood Prince," Anyway?

*Is miffed*
I just left a review, and it didn't work. Which does not bode well with me, my friend, because I really wanted to give a review!

Anyway, to the point. I really love the way you've handled this story. Although it's blatantly a Mary-Sue story, of course, you treat it with a certain subtlety that just really makes it a well-written piece.

You say everything in a manner that's so clear and concise, and feels very natural - like, for example, the description of Ron's IQ and sense of humour dropping off. Just excellent!

I can't wait for more, and I'm quietly hoping that we'll see more characters in chapters to come. Like Ginny. Or Malfoy. Etc.

So well done, and keep writing! You've really got something here!

Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, Malfoy, Ginny etc. will be appearing soon! Sorry about the review not working... :D Again, thank you for the review!

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