Reviews For Alone
Reviewer: icevanilla3
Date: 01/08/07 21:39
Chapter: Meaning in the Meetings

When will your next update be? It is really quite intriguing!



Author's Response: Soon, dear. I have it written, I just figured I'd give it a bit before I updated because not everyone has even read chapter six... Maybe the end of the week? I'm glad you're intrigued by it. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: AurorGirl101
Date: 01/07/07 13:44
Chapter: Meaning in the Meetings

Ohoo! It was spine-tingling. I enjoyed it very much. You're doing a great job with this, can't wait to read more. This isn't the Severus I am used to reading in the Marauder Era fics, but it's a nice change, and I think I like it. I am very interested to see what will happen with these two. Good luck!

**Love and huggles,***

~Jessie

Author's Response: Good to hear you like it! You might not have to wait too long for chapter seven. GOOD NEWS EVERYONE! Chapter seven is already written and Beta'd. I'm just waiting a while for people to catch up and read chapter six before I submit it. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Sunny Christian
Date: 01/05/07 21:45
Chapter: The Wind's Whisper

Finally, a great writer! I like you - you remind me of myself, haha! I, too, get loads of inspiration from music, as it is my first gift. (I ADORE Immy, by the way.) So I'm going to keep up with you and your stories! Best wishes, Sunny Christian

Author's Response: *blushes* Thanks so much! It's good to hear that people like your writing. I'm so happy that you like it. Thanks for the comment.

Reviewer: Lily Roxy
Date: 01/05/07 20:17
Chapter: Meaning in the Meetings

First review, yay! Awesome chapter, you never know if you really like the characters in the story unless you read something like that note and kind of go into a mini panic attack:). I still think it's Severus, but that could easily be me since my story doesn't put him in the best of lights *wonders*.

Author's Response: Merci Beaucoup

Reviewer: Lily Roxy
Date: 01/05/07 20:16
Chapter: Meaning in the Meetings

First review, yay! Awesome chapter, you never know if you really like the characters in the story unless you read something like that note and kind of go into a mini panic attack:). I still think it's Severus, but that could easily be me since my story doesn't put him in the best of lights *wonders*.

Author's Response: Yay for reviews!!! So the panic attack means you like the characters, right? I'm going to assume Yes and say that I'm glad you like them. I'm also glad you like the chapter. Thank you for the review, Dear!

Reviewer: tc015
Date: 12/30/06 19:48
Chapter: Stand By Me

I love your story. After reading the first chapter, I was hooked. Each chapter keeps getting better. The way you potray Nell makes her seem so real. The way she acts around Remus and the others feels real. I can't wait for the next chapter.

~Teresa

Author's Response: It's so good to hear that people like my story. the next chapter is coming soon. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Celestial Melody
Date: 12/23/06 21:23
Chapter: The Wind's Whisper

(continued from previous *malfunctioning review*
well, vary the sentence patterns a bit more.

Please understand that I'm not trying to be critical because I truly liked this chapter, however, I am trying to help your story along with a bit of con-crit. =) *giggles* (That sounds so much like 'concrete'.)

Therefore, I have a few more, itsy-bitsy criticisms. In the ninth paragraph, there is a sentence about the mansion that reads like this "It had vines creeping up the sides and looked as if they’d been there for over a hundred years." I really like that sentence--I'm a sucker for imagery, =)--but it could be improved by changing "sides AND looked" to "sides WHICH looked" or "sides THAT looked" because you're talking about the vines.

Towards the middle, too, there is a sentence, "Nell’s face was so full of fear." That doesn't quite flow. If you deleted 'so,' it would work much better.

I'm sorry for the nit-picky review. I truly DID enjoy this and I'd love to read more when I've the time.

Good luck with your story, dear! =)

~Julia~

Author's Response: I actually liked the nit-picky-ness. Thank you for such a good review. Without a review like this every once in a while, how am I ever going to improve??!?! I appreciate the review. Have a grood holiday, and I look forward to another review from you... when you have the time. :)

Reviewer: Celestial Melody
Date: 12/23/06 21:21
Chapter: Alone in a Crowd

(continued from previous *malfunctioning* review)
...well,

Author's Response: *continued from previous fully-functioning reply* ...so,

Reviewer: Celestial Melody
Date: 12/23/06 21:17
Chapter: The Wind's Whisper

This was a very promising beginning to a cleverly-named story. I must admit, I was searching for the motif of 'alone' as soon as I found: "She headed toward the spot she always went to, to be alone." Really wonderful job on making that pattern come out in the story.

I'm a touch confused about why Nell (a very believable and potentially likeable character) is fighting with her mother. Is it normal teenage blues? Because if it is, I completely understand. =) *giggles* I'm curious, therefore, to find out what happens in Nell's relationship with her mother.

You know, this isn't a humourous story at all, and I realize that it isn't, yet I still found this sentence, "She didn’t like the idea of being trapped between some humming person and a ledge." to be really funny. =) I can see Nell thinking that. Which only reinforces the complete and thorough grasp you have on your character.

All in all, I really enjoyed this first chapter although, for me, it seemed to move a touch too fast. For example: When Nell was fighting Severus Snape (I'm assuming that the greasy young lad is he,) she seems to be talking to him in one paragraph, thinking about fighting him the next, and being dragged into the house right after that. No preamble, really, just a quick transition. I believe with an intermediary sentence--something along the lines of "Though Nell desperately clawed and scratched at the boy, he seemed oblivious to pain and continued to pull her up the drive towards the house..." etc. That's a very minor change and need not be implemented unless you really want to. Your writing style is engagning and I enjoyed this. However, you might want to watch your "so's." You seem to start the majority of sentences with 'so' or 'so,' with a comma. This isn't crucial, but I believe you might have a little more variety if you would... well,

Author's Response: Thank you for the amazing review!!!!!!!!!! Yesh, Nell is just fighting with her mom because she's a teenage girl. I love the word so... I'll keep on mind that I use it too often though.

Reviewer: mynameismary
Date: 12/20/06 22:07
Chapter: Stand By Me

Sludgehorn was sooooooooooo ooc.

Author's Response: I had noticed that a bit while I was writing the chapter, but I couldn't figure out how to fix it. I figured it might be alright considering it's not a huge part of the chapter and because I have a bit of flexibility with Sluggy's character since we don't know much about him. Thanks for the comment.

Reviewer: superstitious
Date: 12/17/06 10:58
Chapter: Stand By Me

oh my god, please please please post some more, i wanna knwo what happens, ive read some good stories but none as cliffies as this

Author's Response: Are big cliffies a grood thing?? I hope so. Thanks for the review. I'm trying to update ASAP.

Reviewer: christian0girl0
Date: 12/15/06 17:23
Chapter: Stand By Me

more! more! more!! lol. good story!!

Author's Response: I'll do my best!

Reviewer: muggler180
Date: 12/13/06 21:18
Chapter: Stand By Me

ong update soon it is so good

Author's Response: I shall do my best!

Reviewer: muggler180
Date: 12/13/06 21:07
Chapter: Hidden Scars

it is so good

Author's Response: Why thank you, my dear!

Reviewer: AurorGirl101
Date: 12/13/06 12:55
Chapter: Stand By Me

Oh! I forgot to say, I read teh reviews, and I have to agree with Kasey!

GIRL POWER ROX!!!!

Author's Response: WOOT

Reviewer: AurorGirl101
Date: 12/13/06 12:53
Chapter: Stand By Me

great chapter! I was so happy to se you updated. This was totally worth the wait. I can't wait for the next one. Leah must work amazing magic, because this was pretty great. I'm glad there is more coming soon!!!!!

~Lve, Jessie.


BTW, Who was the new character you intro'd in this chappie? *wink*

Author's Response: LeahFace DOES do an amazing job. I think she's more magical than Harry Potter. By the way, the new character is DEFINATELY not named after you, dear *smirk* :D Thanks for the review! Again!

Reviewer: AurorGirl101
Date: 12/13/06 12:45
Chapter: Hidden Scars

Wow, has it been a long time!! This was a very interesting chapter..... It was worht the wait though. I had to go back and re-read chapter three, but then, I had to go back to one, just to understand everything again. Let me tell you, it is good. I had forgotten how good. I cant wait to move on!!!!!

Author's Response: Yay for the review!! I'm sorry I took so long updating that you needed to re read the whole story. It makes me so happy to see that people like my story. Thanks for reviewing *scrolls up* three times!

Reviewer: ilovetheweasleys_7
Date: 12/12/06 3:31
Chapter: The Wind's Whisper

This is a great story! Well, not the subject itself, but it's well written and the plot is strong and the OC's are pretty good, too.
I'd also like to add, you really should read Speak. It's a very good book. If you haven't read it already, that is. Or read it again!

Author's Response: I have the book upstairs in my room... I just haven't read it yet. Thanks for the review, dearie.

Reviewer: ilovetheweasleys_7
Date: 12/12/06 3:26
Chapter: Stand By Me

This is a great story.

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: blackpaw93
Date: 12/11/06 19:14
Chapter: Stand By Me

Aww... poor Remus... lol. Gabby, you left me waiting! But it was well worth it!

I think Addie and Nell have a wonderful friendship. Addie is like Nell's rock, and Addie loves her. I hope they stay friends, but that quote “Mystery man… His name is Severus Snape.” scared me. It sent shivers down my spine. I wonder what will happen? Will Addie forget about him for the sake of her friendship with Nell, or is she that boy-crazy? Brilliant semi-cliffhanger Gabs.

"No magic, my arse,” Addie muttered, pulling out her wand and quickly getting rid of the spilt potion. Haha, that's something I'd say.

After those few short seconds, without saying a word, Remus broke the stare and walked back out of the Hospital Wing, softly closing the door behind him. That was a really awkward paragraph. Not the writing, the writing is perfect, the vibes given off by it. You could just feel how bad Remus must've felt. And the paragraph above it is the same. Very goodness.

This may just well be the longest review I've ever written. I bet you I'll look really short, hey?

Gabby, you're a wonderful writer. Keep up the good work, and buy lots of shoes!-- Georgia

Author's Response: Well, I wrote a reply last night, but it got all screwed up on me. Yay for long reviews that aren't one-liners! Thanks for reviewing, G! *I didn't buy any shos...*

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