Reviews For Safe Haven
Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 08/14/12 4:06
Chapter: Chapter 9 - Organized Chaos

The Malfoy charm, eh? Haha. It takes a saint to deal with Draco, and no one should have to deal with both him and Ron. Well, that’s actually not a bad point, but Draco’s been very well behaved, for once.

Draco’s calling Weasley Ron, and Ron’s calling Draco mate? Seriously? I gotta say that happened a little fast.

I’m also not loving Bella’s part here, and no this isn’t Bella. She’s evil. I get it. It’s just awkward. There’s more explanation than there needs to be about blood status. Anyone obsessed enough with HP to be reading fanfiction knows that stuff. And for some reason, her voice seems very childish rather than insane.

I am so anxious to see Draco take Lucius on. Not that I can explain why since I love both characters. I just know what Lucius did in this fic and that really upsets me… P.S. Still kinda mad about that. :p

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 08/09/12 15:32
Chapter: Chapter 8 - Finishing Touches

Why do I find these characters so darn cute in this? Really they’re just adorable. Even when they’re being idiots. Ron is still an asshat, but he’s annoying me less than usual so kudos to you.

I don’t have too much to say about this chapter. I enjoyed it. Made me smile a few times.

Honestly, I have no idea what I’ve written in these reviews thus far. I’m glad some of my comments have been helpful, but I really just keeping word open as I read and jotting down my impressions. This isn’t how I generally write reviews, but I know you’re doing a re-write so I’m doing things a little differently. And it’s kind of fun to write random observations. :)

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 08/07/12 22:33
Chapter: Chapter 7 - Building Bridges

Oh God, Hermione. Death Eaters invaded my house, they might be after my parents, and I left Draco and Harry alone with them, but how are you Ron? Anything wrong? I am so laughing right now. This actually reminds me of the DH movie when they Apparate from the wedding and nearly get run over and Hermione’s upset cause they didn’t get to have Harry’s birthday cake. I love Hermione, but she has the worst perspective sometimes.

S’mores and puppy dog eyes. God Draco is adorable. And Ron is an asshat. Excellent characterization of him, by the way.

Author's Response: All right, I am replying to them in a clump if you don't mind. I knew there were characterization issues which kind of fueled my need for a rewrite. You have been finding them and bringing them to my attention. THANK YOU. I just remember writing this thinking how I wish they could all just be friends, hehe! There has to be a way to do that and keep it relatively canon, right?

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 08/06/12 15:34
Chapter: Chapter 6 - Go Take A Walk, Hermione . . . NOW.

Well, well.

Interesting chapter. Our little Draco is getting a bit protective of his new friends. That’s nice. They’re going to be a force to be reckoned with as a group before long. I love watching these friendships develop.

I’m surprised by the amount of restraint Harry and Draco are showing in this chapter. At this stage in the books, neither of them seemed at all capable of that. The fact that they had Lucius and Bellatrix unaware and did nothing is a bit unbelievable. Very smart, but possibly too smart for pissed off Harry and Draco.

By the way, are Lucius and Bella an item in this story? They seem eerily close in this. You know, long ago I shipped them. Around book five, I think. Before we really got to meet Narcissa. Speaking of which, I’m still mad you.

And I see you’ve decided to bring Ron into the story. Too bad. I was really enjoying the lack of Ron. He’s going to be a total asshat.

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 08/05/12 15:46
Chapter: Chapter 5 - You Have My Attention

Ah, so this is the summer of fifth year. Harry’s starting to let his hatred of Bella show.

Oh yes, Draco’s a great spy. Let’s just refuse the Dark Mark and spit on Voldy’s favorite servant. That won’t draw attention to me at all. I love how smart these characters can be sometimes.

Awww, more adorable bickering. The shower thing was cute. Poor Draco. I’d have expected him to toss a pillow or something.

I’m a little surprised by how Hermione is turning out. She’s usually more mature than the other kids, but she seems worse in this. Her feelings her hurt at everything, even Harry! I think her character could use a little tweaking. But the boys are pretty much flawless.

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 08/05/12 4:56
Chapter: Chapter 4 - A Bit Awkward

Awww, Draco’s just as trusting as Harry and Hermione. So cute. Poor Draco. He thinks they’re going to starve him, which would actually be a much more valid concern if Ron were around.

I’ve really only written these characters together post-war, but there are certain advantages to playing around with them prior to anything major happening in canon. They’re more snarky and less broken.

Oh hell. You killed Narcissa. I remember this now. I’m not very happy with you right now, Nicole. I’m also pretty sure I remember how you killed her and the foreshadowing on the topic seems to agree with my recollection. My poor Malfoys!

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 08/05/12 2:10
Chapter: Chapter 3 - An Adjustment

Poor Draco! Oh, he’s bleeding and unconscious; I think I’ll kick him just to make sure he’s not planning to kill us. Silly Harry.

Extra credit assignment! I love it. That was so Hermione’s idea. Harry’s not that clever. A very nice touch.

I can’t believe Dumbledore expects the two of them to know what to do. It seems pretty likely that Draco could’ve been hurt. This seems very Dumbledore-like, don’t get me wrong. It’s completely disrespectful to all three of them. He should’ve, at least, kept Tonks around in case of situations beyond the abilities of teenagers to fix… Yeah, I don’t like Dumbledore, but you write him very well.

Enjoying the banter between Harry and Draco. He can’t sit up, but he can still pick a fight with Harry-very Draco. They really are cute. Hermione’s going to have her hands full just listening to them.

Nicole, I forgot how great this was. So cute. If it wasn’t late and I didn’t want to write to a chapter in my own fic, I’d keep going, but I need to log off for the night. I can’t wait to get caught up with this again. :)

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 08/05/12 1:51
Chapter: Chapter 2

Ha! I knew Ron wouldn’t be invited due to the fact that he’s a tosspot. Although, Dumbledore tends to overlook these things. Remember his genius plan of making Severus and Sirius play nice. Maybe he learned something from that and decided not to test the hatred Ron and Draco have for each other. Although it’s more childishness on both parts than actual hatred. No idea why I’m rambling in this review…

“I am unable to share that information with you at this time.” “ Dumbledore. Nicole, you nailed him. Oh he drives me. Harry, Hermione, guess what I want you to work with someone you’ve fought with for years, but I’m not gonna tell you why cause I’m a jerk. No wonder Ron isn’t here. He’d never give in to this.

Ha! I love this. Draco should live at Hermione’s house, says Dumbly. I foresee no problems with that. Now if only Lucius and Narcissa were coming… Where are they anyway? They’re always so much fun in these situations. :)

Ah yes, this is fun. I can’t wait until we start working on it. Hope you don’t mind my reviews which are more rambling observations than anything else…

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 08/05/12 1:34
Chapter: Chapter 1- Taking the Bait

Well, this is a fun start. I vaguely remember pieces of this, but forgot most things. Don’t feel bad. I have fanfictions on my page that I don’t even remember writing. I reread a few and was like, where the heck did this come from. Did you know I wrote Severus/Amelia and a Draco/Susan cause they’re on my page, but I have no memory of it.

Anyway, my burning question right now is what time period are we in? It’s obviously summer vacation, but I can’t guess the year. It feels like fifth, but shouldn’t Harry be railing about Sirius’ death around now? Just wondering about that.

I love that Tonks is in this, especially since I already know who the mystery student is. I love throwing the Tonks and the Malfoys together. I always thought Tonks would be the most sensible in such a situation, which kind of dampers some of my post-DH writings. Anyway, I’m looking forward to reading more of her in this fic.

I absolutely love the way you write Tonks. It’s rare that I read her and she feels right, but you’ve done well with that. She feels like Tonks. She’s silly and clumsy and just loveable. The part with her meeting Hermione’s mom is priceless. She’s exactly what your opening chapter needed.

Author's Response: EllaBella - I wrote this in 2006/2007 . . . Let me think about that, hehe! :-) I think, aside from the general overhaul that I am due for with this story that I also need to redo the warnings. This was written before the last book was out (before book 6 also?) so a lot had NOT happened yet. I wish we had a "Book 5-7 disregard" warning! Let's rework this thing! <3 ~Nicole

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 06/28/10 7:35
Chapter: Chapter 21 - Calm, Cool and Collected

Haha, Lovins Draco's comments! Very well written :-) Cannot wait to see the next chapter

Author's Response: Thank you for brightening my day!

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 06/24/10 9:42
Chapter: Chapter 20 - Awkward Explanations

Yay! I am caught up again! Cannot wait for th next chapter :-)

Author's Response: This is in reply to both comments - I thank you for being kind enough to read the story after all this time. You give me a reason to continue!

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 06/24/10 9:40
Chapter: Chapter 19 - Fancy a Walk?

Interesting chapter...Sorry I am so late keeping up with this story...Been a little busy :-/

Reviewer: lobo_blanco1986
Date: 11/29/09 0:16
Chapter: Chapter 18 - Shady Secrets and Yummy Desserts

I love it absolutely love it. Please continue, I've been wanting to see a story like this with reconciliation between Harry and Draco as well as the others for some time now and you have given me precisely what I wanted.

Author's Response: I too got tired of reading of the (realistic) relationship between the two of them. Thanks for your positive feedback.

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 10/25/09 22:52
Chapter: Chapter 18 - Shady Secrets and Yummy Desserts

Really good chapter! Cannot wait to see what happens when classes start :-) Hope you can update soon!

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 10/25/09 16:27
Chapter: Chapter 18 - Shady Secrets and Yummy Desserts

i love the way this is going, keep up the great work

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 08/06/09 18:23
Chapter: Chapter 16 - Confessions and Legillimens

Hahaha, Poor Harry. I am def. liking Draco more and more in this fan fic :-) Cannot wait for the next update!!

Author's Response: Why, thank you! I'm glad you are enjoying yourself. :-) I will try to update this weekend. Thanks for the incentive.

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 08/06/09 18:18
Chapter: Chapter 15 - Just Act Normal . . .

Oooo, nothing good can come of Pansy seeing them...Draco is going to have a very rough year ahead of him... Great chapter though ;-)

Author's Response: What is a HP fanfic without a bit of drama? :-) Draco is on a lot of lists, I'm sure!

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 08/06/09 18:18
Chapter: Chapter 15 - Just Act Normal . . .

Oooo, nothing good can come of Pansy seeing them...Draco is going to have a very rough year ahead of him... Great chapter though ;-)

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 08/06/09 18:13
Chapter: Chapter 14 - Busted!

Hahaha, very nice to see Draco and Harry teaming up for a good joke there! Funny chapter :-)

Reviewer: ProfPosky
Date: 07/11/09 22:07
Chapter: Chapter 16 - Confessions and Legillimens

I've read all the way here. I'm enjoying the story. I don't know what kind of reviews you like, so I don't know if that's enough, or if you want concrit. If you do, just pm me. If not - well, I'm going to keep reading...

Author's Response: Well hello, Professor! I'm honored that you've taken up my story. What great incentive, hehe. :-) You can be as brief or detailed as you'd like to be. I love reviews when the reader feels strongly about certain scenes or even if they didn't like something I wrote. If I messed up somewhere, let me know that too! I'll be around . . . ~Nicole

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