Reviews For Bubbled Over
Reviewer: epitome
Date: 06/27/07 0:57
Chapter: One-Shot

I'm going to write a review pretending that I'm not texting you at this very moment. :]

Pansy's character is portrayed wonderfully. Pretty much exactly how I had her pinned down in my imagination from the books.

The story doesn't seem like it's finished though. Well it does, but it doesn't. Just kind of a loose ending.

I would say more. But my fingers are burning like crazy seeing as I burnt them on the side of the hot fudge jar.

Keep writing.

SARAH.

Reviewer: DanIsRad74
Date: 06/24/07 15:37
Chapter: One-Shot

HI HANNA!!!!!!!!!!! I red your story and it was FABULOUS!! You need to write more!! Now!!!! Or I will make a sour face {:

Reviewer: Gonz
Date: 03/21/07 21:55
Chapter: One-Shot

I enoyed your take on the challenge by making it more personal by focusing on the affect of the strike one person. Your characterization of Pansy was really good and I liked the introductory paragraph which really helped set up her character. That and the passivity of her father really convey the spoiled rich image. Also in the books Pansy comes off as the the standard depends on male girlfreind, but here she shows she is no pushover. Also the scenes were Pansy and her family struggled with the lack of House elves were very done.

Overall good job in working with a difficult challenge, it was an enjoyable read.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I really do appriciate it and I'm glad that you enjoyed the story! :]

Reviewer: tc015
Date: 03/17/07 13:24
Chapter: One-Shot

I liked the chatacterizaton of Pansy. I can imagine her acting like that. She probably has never done anything for herself. Watching her trying to do laundry was hysterical. I have never seen someone have such a hard time with it. To most, it is a easy task, but if you have never done laundry before, then it would probably be difficult. The scene with Mrs. Parkinson cooking was also hysterical.

I enjoyed reading the train scene. I like reading it from Pansy's POV. It would nice to shove some people in a compartment sometimes. You could relate to Pansy in that scene. I think that Hermione gave up a little too easily to Pansy. I could writing a sequel to this, explaining what Hermione does to Pansy to make up for this. Apart from that, I enjoyed the fic.

~ Teresa

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the great review! I'm so happy that you enjoyed the story-- the train scene is one of my favorites, too. Thanks for pointing that out about Hermione. I'll keep your suggestions in mind when I write her again. :]

Reviewer: kumydabookworm
Date: 03/16/07 22:33
Chapter: One-Shot

How lovely! Your interpretation of Pansy is very accurate, although something about this Hermione rubs me the wrong way. I can't quite see her giving into Pansy, regardless of what she does...Hermione is a very principled girl.

Anyway, I did rather like the attempt to wash clothes and the cooking fire. It was hilarious to see them struggle with those things. :) It would have been even better, I think, if Mr. Parkinson was so busy with work that he didn't come home to fix the problem - at the moment, he seems a tad henpecked, haha.

Finally, one last thing. I would have loved at least one Parkinson house elf to do something daring to push Pansy utterly over the edge. Maybe they come back and rant about how they deserve rights, or rig a household appliance to misfire, or use their magic against her.

Just throwing out some ideas if you ever want to flesh out the story a little. ;)

It was funny and witty, and a lovely read! Thank you!

Kumy

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll keep that in mind about Hermione. Thanks again for the review!

Reviewer: HPLoverForever
Date: 10/20/06 19:14
Chapter: One-Shot

I totally meant 'word'. ..... >.>

Author's Response: yeah... :P

Reviewer: HPLoverForever
Date: 10/20/06 19:13
Chapter: One-Shot

Weeee, Hanna! flopWHALEflop... >.>

I liked this one shot. I think you've got Pansy's character pretty in proportion, as well as Hermione's. Just a couple of gramatical errors I caught.

a deep midnight black that was so dark it shone purple in the some lights.

-magically removes 'the' and reforms-

a deep midnight black that was so dark it shone purple in some lights.

Yay!

"Really, there’s know need to raise your

-also re-spells the work 'no'-

"Really, there’s no need to raise your..."

chBAM!

“I don’t care at all about SPEW is about.

-inserts 'for what' for 'about'-

“I don’t care at all for what SPEW is about."

Those were really the only errors I found.

Thoroughly annoyed, she yelled for one of the Parkinson’s house elves.

I would take away the part about them being the Parkinson's elves and just make it:

Thoroughly annoyed, she yelled for one of the house elves.

I changed this because I thought it flowed a little easier.

Over all, I really liked this. If I were there, I'd give you a high five. Heck yes. :D!

Author's Response: :P Thanks for the review, Hayli!

Reviewer: Lurid
Date: 10/11/06 8:48
Chapter: One-Shot

Hanna, your fic had me immersed immediately. I’m the first to admit I make facial expressions in the mirror, and this fic cracked me up from the start. I’m not sure whether that was your intention, but I was laughing at Pansy. She just HAS to be beautiful, and it shows in the way she scrutinises herself. It’s a great way to start the fic. It introduces you to the self-absorbed lifestyle that rich witches and wizards like the Parkinsons and the Malfoys are accustomed to – an interpretation Hermione would be proud of.

The hilarity that ensured with Pansy’s mother trying to cook breakfast was great – I was grinning the whole way through. It really is funny seeing things that everyone takes for granter – making food, washing the clothes, everything. I laughed out loud when Pansy kicked the tap, because in all honesty – it’s something I would do }.}

I LOVED the train compartment scene, really I did, because it was so parallel to the Malfoy/Harry one, without the evil shadow Draco cast over it. You, using poor Hermione, let us view the situation through eyes that aren’t so prejudiced as Harry’s. Through Harry’s eyes in HBP, Draco is the supreme evil, but seeing as this is through ‘Poor Pansy’s’ eyes, you as an author give the reader a chance to see the fun in stuffing someone in a baggage compartment. {.{ you let the reader enjoy being a little evil for a while. Kudos to Hanna!

“You can enjoy some time down here.” Pansy cackles manically as she kicked Hermione’s wand out of her rigid hand before she shut her in.” - A small nitpick, but I think that ‘cackles’ is supposed to be ‘cackled’, and I’ve noticed that throughout the fic you’ve used a teeny tiny amount of Americanisms – ‘realize’ in canon is spelt with an ‘s’ as is the British and Australian spelling. It’s one of the most common mistakes authors make when writing, and sometimes, it’s not even their fault.

A great ending, I think, because it leaves it open for Hermione to retaliate – in other words, a sequel! *eyes sparkle* “She wasn’t going to give into Pansy that easily.” And neither would I, Hermione. *winks* Neither would I! Happy early Halloween!

Author's Response: *hugs Steph* Thanks so much for the review; I'm so gald you enjoyed the story. Those darn Americanisms get me every time!

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 08/30/06 16:09
Chapter: One-Shot

Hi there!
Nice job on your challenge story! I remember discussing this in the plot bunny thread! I'm so glad you decided to go with it. :) I thought you did a great job with Pansy's character. Seeing her react to the loss of her house elves was very funny - spot on for a spoiled rich kid. The washing scene was great! I have one question about the end: why do you think Hermione gave in so quickly? Is she simply more concerned about the house elves than her own embarassment at the hands of Pansy Parkinson? I'm just curious about how you approached the end because I could see Hermione zinging Pansy with a last hex as she left, or plotting revenge for being stuffed in the compartment. ;) But I can also see her sacficing her ego a bit for SPEW so I was wondering what you were thinking as you wrote it.
Great job, and good luck in the challenge!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Gina! Woot for being the first one. :D Well, at the very end, I was thinking that Hermione probably would have said something more to Pansy, but Pansy was already gone. I suppose if I wanted to make the one-shot really long, I could have made her follow her, but I just wanted to leave it off with Pansy having the upper hand. I think that yes, Hermione would be more concerned with the elves than her own embarassment, but in my mind the reason she didn't fire back was because Pansy wasn't there for her to attack. Thanks again for the review, Turnip buddy! ~Hanna

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