Beautifully written and interesting, yet unexpected. Great!
Very interesting story, the kind that makes you think. I like seeing someone question Hermione’s value system for once, since I do think she can be somewhat self-righteous and hypocritical. Not that I dislike Hermione or anything, but we all have our flaws. For example, I don’t think she was right in leaving the clothes she knitted in the Gryffindor common room in order to trick the house elves into getting their freedom. If she’s forcing them to become free, then they’re not really free, are they? They still have no say in their own lives. And since she’s done some morally questionable things herself, she really has no right to pass judgment on others (not that anyone has that right, imo).
I have to say that I didn’t quite understand the ending until you explained it in one of your review replies. As a DHr shipper, I appreciate that aspect of the story as well. :) Anyway, you’ve done an excellent job with this!
"How can you tell what is moral and what isn’t, if all morality is based upon individual opinions? I can assure you, there are myriad opinions. What makes your version of ‘values’ superior? Hm?” Loved that part. that was a rly great one-shot, but i rly didnt like the way you ended just like that. even if, its still a great oneshot. nice work.
especially the funny ending
that was awesome! i liked when you had malfoy say:
"How can you tell what is moral and what isn’t, if all morality is based upon individual opinions? I can assure you, there are myriad opinions. What makes your version of ‘values’ superior? Hm?”
that was truely amazing i loved it! you are truely an amazing writter you are tallented how did you come up with that? truely amazing really GREAT JOB EXCELLENT!
Author's Response: Well, I've been always known as the moral advocate, and I wanted to play the part of someone working against a perceived morality. In this way, this story was me playing devil's advocate against myself and the natural inclination to believe that your morals are THE morals. It was...an amazing story to write, and your praise was very generous. Thank you!
I remember reading this fic quite a while ago, and simply adoring it. Now I’ve *finally* decided to leave a review.
Hermione strolled the corridors, pleasantly engaged with her own thoughts. It was a perpetually stormy Sunday. Such weather was her favorite. Other grumbling students were stuck catching up on homework while they bemoaned the lack of sunlight. Hermione, on the other hand, could amble through endless hallways in virtual peace. Serves them right for putting it all off until the last minute. They’re lucky the weather offered no temptation today, she thought while taking in the rushing sound of a waterfall.
I just love the way you open this piece. Hermione is extremely in character with her thoughts about the other students not having done their homework already. I just love how you write her. It’s so… Hermioneish, as I am at serious lack for a better word.
Who would say those things about me?
Excellent! Truly excellent! I love how you show her weakness; a thing that a lot of authors don’t bother with while writing Hermione. They always make her so self confident, but I’ve never really seen her this way. I’ve always thought that she does care what other people think, and I love the subtle way you add that into this story.
“I am not!” she shouted furiously. It was one thing to be called “Mudblood;” it was quite another to be accused of hypocrisy. It was a brooding, terrible trait. It was the real insult. “How dare you equate freedom with your sick version of segregation! I have a moral position.”
“Oh, and is it moral because you believe it?”
“N-no . . .”
“How can you tell what is moral and what isn’t, if all morality is based upon individual opinions? I can assure you, there are myriad opinions. What makes your version of ‘values’ superior? Hm?” He visibly gloated at his ability to make her squirm.
This conversation made me laugh! “Oh, and is it moral because you believe it?” That’s too funny! It seems like something that Hermione would think; ‘it’s moral because I think it’s right’. The way that Draco keeps keying into her weaknesses and insecurities is just lovely! I think what makes this a Hermione/Draco, as opposed to just a general fic, is this type of relationship where they keep challenging each other. When I’m reading it, I can’t help but to think that they’re both enjoying this debate to some extent.
One thing that I don’t understand about the formatting is why sometimes you use bolding, and sometimes you use italicizing. Is there a particular reason for that?
She caught his eye. He was leering, of course; the self-obsessed brute. For a moment, nothing but cold silence passed between them. Then it gave way to something much more pervasive and sinister. She became less aware of the pounding rain, and the fact that she was quite chilled, or that it must be getting close to curfew. Something lurked and kissed the former silence. It giggled in her ear. Yes. I could. It wouldn’t be so bad, would it?
I love how the reader can see the immediate change in Hermione when she learns to accept a different POV. But I’m a bit confused; when she says ‘Yes. I could. It wouldn’t be so bad, would it?’ what exactly is she referring to? Other than that, I really, really, liked this paragraph.
This is a very interesting Draco/Hermione story. No lust/smut/ or any of that. No physical attractions, which are so often portrayed in D/Hr fics. What I like the most about your story is just that… the way you write their relationship. In a way it doesn’t even seem like a romance story. But that’s just because this centers on Draco and Hermione’s exchange of thoughts and emotions, unlike something obvious and physical. The subtlety of this story is just astounding! I love the writing style as well; I didn’t find a single nit-pick! Which is odd… considering that I always nit-pick…
A truly brilliant story!
Author's Response: Thank you for this wonderful review! I rarely get these lovely long ones anymore. I italicize when there's merely an emphasis on a word, and bold when they nearly shout a word. What wouldn't be so bad, to Hermione, was to kiss him. They were in a very close position, and suddenly, her boundaries began to fade away, and she forgot for a moment that it was 'Draco' and allowed herself to become attracted to him. Thank you again for the fantastic review!
This is amazing! Keep it going!
Nice Chapter. Can't wait to see how it goes.
I've always thought that SPEW was a bit off, but I like Hermione, and you don't usually want to argue against something done in the name of freedom. Then again, isn't the supposed "War on Terrorism" done in the name of freedom? I think I just like Hermione too much to argue with her most of the time (in my head, of course).
Also, it is really hard to concede a point to someone who is leering at you and questioning your moral fiber while being about as moral as an ivory poacher or a Nazi.
I like this story. It makes me think. I never quite saw Hermione in this light before; I mean, I know she's not perfect (see Hermione's Punishment @ the North Tower on Mugglenet) but I've never thought of her being as bad as, well, malfoy. The real trouble is, we don't know what goes on inside the head of a house elf, and we may never know since they are so loyal. Plus, dobby actually did want to be freed, which complicates things.
Do house elves have their own version of morality?
Author's Response: I think their morality is very black and white. 'Do as you're told' and if you don't, you're being immoral. Which is why Dobby still finds it to be very hard to resist a direct order.
hehehe. Very cute! I loved this one-shot! It was very interesting! Everything was very well written, their thoughts were realistic, and, i just loved it all! Great job!!! :D
Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to read. :)