Reviews For To Deny Duty
Reviewer: Lycanthropist
Date: 12/31/06 18:05
Chapter: To Deny Duty

I believe this was one of the first stories I read by you, my dear, and to this day I still adore it. Your style is so fluid and descriptive, and your analysis of particular characters has always intrigued me.

I'm not usually a Harry fan. I feel very neutral toward him most times, but your depiction of him and his struggles leave me thoughtful and wishing to pick into his brain like you do. This internal argument he's having is very realistic, as we all do it. His physical pains as well as his mental scars are so darkly personified that it even has me questioning why he hasn't quit. Of course, he wouldn't be a Gryffindor if he gave up, now would he? ;) Though, that doesn't necessarily mean he doesn't question his actions (after the fact).

On a more constructive note, I do have a couple criticisms and notes.

As I was reading, you strayed into first person in one paragraph. Itís a shame that I should be stuck in a home with a ceiling. It so limits the possibilities. I believe you meant he not I. Though, I'm probably mistaken, as it sounds more like a thought than actual narrative. If it's his musing, it probably should be italicized or placed inside single quotes to clarify.

This sentence here: He let it wash over him, like misery and angst had so many years back. The words 'and angst' sound awkward, and I think it reads better without it.

Other than those two small things, I didn't see anything else that caught my eye. Your vocabulary in this piece astonishes me, and I do believe this is your best written one-shot that I've read.

Author's Response: Thank you for re-reviewing, lovely Kay! In response to some of your edits, yes, I think it's meant to be italicized. I probably missed it when I uploaded it the second time. Thank you!

Reviewer: PotterFan22
Date: 08/26/06 17:28
Chapter: To Deny Duty

This one was absolutely great! Extremely well written! It was perfect! :D

Author's Response: *grins*

Reviewer: halfbloodprincess22
Date: 08/26/06 16:42
Chapter: To Deny Duty

I really liked this...it was exactly, i think, how harry probably feels right about now and VERY well-written. well-done!!

Author's Response: Thank you very much. It's still my favorite piece to this day. :)

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