that was good
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It is a little disturbing that I find this oddly sweet. I mean he hits her, which makes me despise him, then he does that and it makes me adore him. I do believe he is sorry, but he never said it wouldn't happen again. Which makes you believe that everything Won't be alright. Good story. 10/10. I hope you will write another.
Author's Response: Thank you for the nice review! I don't have a story written taking place after this, but I do have a poem based on this story, if you're interested :).
Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Well written, as always. But I still think this should be expanded a bit. I think there is a lot in Draco and Pansy's relationship that needs to be developed. You clearly have a very good idea of how they act together and how they feel about one another, and I would really just like to see them spend more time together so we can see this more. I'm really enjoying this unique take on Pansy, nice job!
This is a good story. The only thing I could suggest is to make it clearer who Monica and Amber are, because it is a bit confusing for people who haven't read "Take Off Your Mask." I'm off to read it right now... this story has intrigued me. Maybe you should make it a series; I also read your poem "The Waves Will Wash It Away" and you seem to have a whole mask, finding your true self thing going on. I like it a lot. The only other thing I would suggest is that this doesn't really exactly stand on its own. While it is a good one-shot, I would like to see it continued or with a sequel. It has a great first-chapter potential. Anyway, its been a pleasure to read and I'm off to read more!
Author's Response: This is actually the sequel to Take off Your Mask, and the poem is based on the stories. So I guess I should make it a series. I'm thinking of adding more, but I'm not too sure yet. Take off Your Mask was supposed to be just a one-shot, but I kept getting ideas for ways to add to it, so...Anyway, thank you so much for the review!
Author's Response: This is actually the sequel to Take off Your Mask, and the poem is based on the stories. So I guess I should make it a series. I'm thinking of adding more, but I'm not too sure yet. Take off Your Mask was supposed to be just a one-shot, but I kept getting ideas for ways to add to it, so...Anyway, thank you so much for the review!