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Name: xxpod (Signed) · Date: 10/25/06 18:45 · For: Chapter 6: Sentiment and Sensitivity
I really enjoyed this.

Not much you could improve on ... perhaps a bit of repetition? You've repeated some sentences in one paragraph:

"At first everyone felt light hearted. They had all been infected by Harry's enthusiasm. Harry himself was almost ebullient. He had a new romance, and he expected a very good friend to wake up from a coma. /As time went on/, the atmosphere became more tense, and they started to worry. Draco could feel Harry’s hand tighten /as time went on/, and noticed how rigidly he was sitting. He was the only person in the room who was not a friend of Hermione’s, so he tried to carry the conversation as best he could, for which Harry was grateful. After about half an hour, he got up and fetched everyone some weak black coffee, which tasted terrible, but gave them all something new to think about and do with their hands."

Otherwise, it was brilliant and I am looking forward to reading more! :)

Author's Response: Ooops! I will have to go back and fix that. Thank you for pointing it out - I hate to reread my stuff and find things like that! Thank you very much for your review.

Name: inuzumarose (Signed) · Date: 10/19/06 19:52 · For: Chapter 6: Sentiment and Sensitivity
oh gosh please update this it is marvelous! And if we could have more action between the couples...

Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I am hoping to get the next chapter ready for posting soon - work got in the way. Don't worry, you will get more action!

Name: SunMoon (Signed) · Date: 10/15/06 11:42 · For: Chapter 6: Sentiment and Sensitivity
I can't say much for a lack of words. It's just great!!! I LOVE your story.

P.S.: I'm starting to think of opening a fanclub of yours ;)

Author's Response: Wow! That is very extravagant praise, thank you. Sorry for the long silence, work caught up with me. I hope to be able to get the next chapter up soon. Thank you so much for your uplifiting review; it is much appreciated!

Name: bluebunny (Signed) · Date: 10/14/06 19:47 · For: Chapter 3: Harry Arrives
Other than a few misspelled words in this chapter, I liked it. I think you did very well in interpreting how Harry and Draco would react in this situation. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Sorry about the misspelling - I had two beta's quit on me, and because I wanted to post this before George's birthday I went ahead and tried to fix it on my own. I am dyslexic and also since I have been living in America for eight years now, get very mixed up between English and American spellings! I am glad you like the story so far though, I hope it is interesting enough to keep you reading. Thank you for leaving a review.

Name: bluebunny (Signed) · Date: 10/14/06 19:22 · For: Chapter 2 Draco Settles In
This is a good chapter. It's well written and goes into more detail about Draco's Death Eater activities than the previous ones. I can't wait to see how you put together the confrontation between Draco and Potter.

Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I do put in a little more about Draco's Death Eater activities, but it is very hard finding excuses for everything he has ever done! I hope you like it enough to keep on reading.

Name: broken memories (Signed) · Date: 10/13/06 13:47 · For: Chapter 6: Sentiment and Sensitivity
Using a bezoar is an amazing reference! Can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your reviews! I love them. (What is not to love about a great review?)

Name: Matrixman (Signed) · Date: 10/13/06 0:56 · For: Chapter 4: Watching Harry
great chapter

Author's Response: I am glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for your lovely review.

Name: broken memories (Signed) · Date: 10/12/06 15:47 · For: Chapter 6: Sentiment and Sensitivity
EEK! This chapter was AMAZING! I didn't even think of a bezoar! Very, very good reference. I look forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you thought it was a good reference. I thought about it a lot, but since the comment was handwritten in the Half Blood Prince's book, I squeezed it in. I am so glad you like this chapter. I hope you like the next one too - it is my favourite!

Name: Gryffindor Alfy (Signed) · Date: 10/10/06 23:26 · For: Chapter 6: Sentiment and Sensitivity
wow can't wait to read the next chapter

Author's Response: I'm very glad you are enjoying it. I hope you like the next chapter too, it is my favourite. Thanks for reviewing!

Name: dancergirl117 (Signed) · Date: 10/10/06 21:23 · For: Chapter 6: Sentiment and Sensitivity
omg!! you HAVE to write more. I'm going insane trying to figure out what's going to happen!!

Author's Response: Only two more chapters, I'm afraid! I am so glad you are enjoying it and thank you for leaving a review!

Name: pottergeekk (Signed) · Date: 10/03/06 17:36 · For: Chapter 6: Flying
wow. i loved the harry/draco kiss. i was waiting for it for so long! thats a quality that a good writer should have.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for those kind words. Reviewers like you make my day!

Name: dmhp (Signed) · Date: 10/02/06 20:27 · For: Chapter 6: Flying
Sentiment and Sensitivity...WHEN IS IT COMING.this is such a good story!!!!!! i cant wait to read the rest.

Author's Response: Sorry... The chapter has been in the queue a while...perhaps it is a bit risque? I hope it is validated soon, because I can't wait to post the rest! Thank you very much for your review!

Name: KJazzer139 (Signed) · Date: 10/02/06 16:09 · For: Chapter 6: Flying
Ahhh I need to read the next chapter! But it has't been validated yet! This is amazing! You really hit it off. Instead of the usual harry convincing his friends draco is okay, its the other way around. I love it!!!

Author's Response: Shades of HBP eh? I thought Harry would take more convincing than Ron. I am so glad you like it. I hope they validate the next chapter soon! Thank you for writing a review.

Name: profcoldheart (Signed) · Date: 10/02/06 10:44 · For: Chapter 6: Flying
Just read the whole thing from the beginning and love it. Story line is great; you are a very talented writer. I'm looking forward to the next part.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I really appreciate the reviews. I hope the next chapter is approved soon!

Name: broken memories (Signed) · Date: 10/01/06 16:02 · For: Chapter 6: Flying
This is a lovely story. I do hope you update soon, I'm not keen on cliffhangers! :)

Author's Response: Trying... My chapter has been in the queue for over a week now. Glad you like the story, and sorry about the now major cliffie! Thanks for reviewing.

Name: DracoQueen (Signed) · Date: 09/29/06 8:08 · For: Chapter 4: Watching Harry
Wow. The emotion created in this piece is so...intense.. I LOVE IT!

Author's Response: Cool! Exactly what I intended. It is nice to know it comes across! Thank you so much for your review. Reviews mean such a lot.

Name: I lovesmesomeHarry (Signed) · Date: 09/24/06 0:47 · For: Chapter 6: Flying
Darn! It was such a good ending to a chapter, and then you have to throw that cliffy in there! I'm hooked!

Author's Response: Ha! I'm not usually very good at the cliffie bit, but I have been practicing. Glad it paid off. I hope you like the next chapter! Thank you so much for reviewing, it means a lot to know someone has appreciated the amount of time I spent losing sleep at the computer!

Name: I lovesmesomeHarry (Signed) · Date: 09/11/06 23:23 · For: Chapter 2 Draco Settles In
I really like where this story is going. It's not rushed but it's not extra wordy. I also like the way you devlope the characters letting us know that they aren't just silly teenagers anymore. Ron's devotion to Hermione just stills my heart! Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review, I really do appreciate hearing from readers. Ron has been pretty devoted to Hermione on and off through all the books, so I couldn't really see that changing, besides, I am a Ron/Hermione fan! I am sad enough to usually pair Harry with Ginny too, but this was a special request!

Name: peacock_girl15 (Signed) · Date: 09/03/06 19:59 · For: Prologue: The Goblet of Choice
uh, i think you posted a second AR for both reveiws. I never asked about the story Hormones. Just thought you'd like to know.

Author's Response: Sorry; I haven't a clue how that happened! I should try to multi-task less. Mary-Anne

Author's Response: Also, I notice from your bio that you have written some stories. I was going to read and review them since you have done me that courtesy, but I can't find them! Did you delete them from your account or not put them up yet?

Name: peacock_girl15 (Signed) · Date: 08/31/06 23:28 · For: Prologue: The Goblet of Choice
Ooooo! I never reveiwed this when i first read it! I think i was too tired then lol! But anyways, I am really lovin this so far! I was really sad to see the second chapter hadn't been validated yet when i first read. The whole mention of R/D was kinda interesting. And Ron is sooooo sweet! His poor Hermione is still in a coma and he sees her everyday and talks to her. I don't remember what if you said what caused the coma or not though. No, i don't think so. Will we find out though in later chapters? I also hope that she wakes up. And I can't wait for the Harry/Draco action lol! Meaning they get together! sheesh! Anyways, keep up the good job and I think this fic is going into my favs if it isn't already ;D!

Author's Response: Thank you, I am glad you are liking it so far. I warn you Harry doesn't come in for another chapter though! There are still some Ron/Draco issues to sort out. And you will find out why Hermione is in a coma. Hope you keep enjoying!

Author's Response: I went and read Hormones and you are right - it could be the prequel to this story. Unfortunately I didn't write it. I enjoyed it though - thank you for pointing it out!

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