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Name: TOMROHT (Signed) · Date: 09/03/06 3:13 · For: A New Arrival
Interesting...Tonks wants to talk to her Auntie Bella...hmm...

Nice job...it's 3:15 a.m., but I think I'll keep reading...

"...but Bella knew her niece was going to as impossible as she could manage..." Shouldn't there be a be in there somewhere...?

"Youíve already hurt enough." Eh?


Author's Response: Hehe. More like Tonks wants to tell her Aunt Bella off, but meh. Anyway, I thought she was pretty impossible. And I assure you she is not going to be any nicer to Bella later on. Thanks for the review! :D

Name: ForbiddenLove (Signed) · Date: 09/01/06 10:17 · For: The Baby-Sitter
Firstly, I really liked the chapter title for this one. My, Ted's not very thoughtful of his sister-in-law, is he? But I guess that's understandable when you think of what she's done. I can't wait to read more, there's so much that I can sense will happen. I really want Bella to apologize to her family, and I want to see what happens. Great chapter!!

Author's Response: Chapter title, huh? I wasn't so sure about it. I'm usually not. So glad you liked it.:D

Yes, Ted was a jerk to poor Bella. But Tonks was the one who slapped her. Of course, their anger is justified, but it would be kinder of them to wait til she's capable of standing under her own power before they rip her to shreds. But more than anything, they're both worried about what her presense will do to Andromeda.

Bella apologize to her family? Well, I suppose she does apologize, but I doubt it's what you have in mind. *grins mysteriously*

Thanks so much for the review, and I'm glad that you're enjoying my story. :D

Name: TOMROHT (Signed) · Date: 08/30/06 23:04 · For: Vulnerable and Helpless
Hmm...Pureblood/Mudblood tensions, even in Bella's weakened state...

Very well written overall I think...though I was a bit confused at one point:
Again, Elizabeth quickly regained her composure. After all, what was Bella to her but an escaped Death Eater? She was lucky this woman wasnít having her hauled off to Azkaban. She certainly shouldnít be expecting pity from her. She didnít want it anyway. She didnít want pity from anyone. I don't even know what to suggest here...there are some unclear pronoun references here. It's difficult to tell if "she" refers to Bella or Elizabeth at times.

Very nice job!


Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you're enjoying this. :D

I see what you mean about that paragraph. I think I know how to fix it. Thank you so much for pointing it out.

Name: TOMROHT (Signed) · Date: 08/29/06 18:49 · For: Death Eaters At Large
Wow...good. I read this after chapter three...no idea how that happened. It's nice to know how Andromeda found her sister...I wondered...

Well, nice job; keep it up...


Author's Response: Hehe! Thanks for reviewing. I love to hear that people like this story. It was kind of like an obsession when I wrote it.

And, yep, reading the chapters in order will cut back on confusion. I promise. *giggles*

Thanks again for reviewing!

Name: TOMROHT (Signed) · Date: 08/29/06 18:39 · For: Bella's Story
Wow...I've never thought of Rodophus as a very kind person...but then...Bellatrix...yeah...

So, nice job...very well-written...


Author's Response: I always write Rodolphus as the more evil one. I think he is. But in this particular story, he simply got the upper hand because he was able to get Bella's wand before she knew he was there. Obviously, she would have fought back if she had of been able to.

Thanks for your compliments. Glad you liked it.

Name: TOMROHT (Signed) · Date: 08/29/06 18:30 · For: Darkness
Very good so far...one question, though.

"...She jumped into a setting position..." Would that be a 'sitting position,' or...that's one of those I'm unsure of...just wondering...



Author's Response: Glad your liking it.

And yes, you're right about the sitting thing. I will fix that up. Thanks for pointing it out. I make a lot of silly errors like that. You should see my rough copies. :D

Name: ForbiddenLove (Signed) · Date: 08/27/06 17:20 · For: Bonding
Aww! that was sweet! I feel very sad that Cissy didn't have a chance to bond with Andromeda. Poor Cissy! And I really wish both Bella and Andy could get their wishes. But alas they can't. What is done is done. Damn! She should have married my Lord MacLaine (tee hee!) Then everything would have turned out right! Great chapter! Looking forward to the next!

Author's Response: Thanks I'm glad your enjoying this.

And I think rather it's in my fan fic or J.K's books the Black sisters got a bad deal. I have always felt bad for all them.

Should have married Lord MacLaine, huh? Well Voldie probably would have been an improvement to my Rodolphus, so I'm not sure if your foreshadowing something in your fic or just pointing out that my Rodolphus is an evil git, which of course, he is. *ponders*

Thanks again for reviewing!:D:D

Name: ForbiddenLove (Signed) · Date: 08/27/06 17:15 · For: Death Eaters At Large
I'm sorry I don't have time to review each one of the chapters, but I would like to revie all the chapters as a whole. I'm sorry this took me so long, I've been tied up. But anyway, your vie wof Rodolphus is very different fomr mine. He's just so cruel, especially in this story. Poor Bella blind.... that's really a shame. This is a wonderful story all the same though. I love Andy and Ted is wonderful too. You have such a flair for characters. And the Muggle-born Healer was a touch of inspiration!

Author's Response: Hehe. Rodolphus. Yep, we sure think of him very differently. And if you think he's cruel now. There's more to come. I think he probably is at his nastiest in this story. At least, the nastiest that I have written him, yet.

I'm glad you liked Elizabeth. I was trying to think of something that would really upset Bella, show that she is still the same person and her views haven't changed, show how helpless she is feeling, and at the same time I wanted it to be something that was meant to help her. Elizabeth was born!

Thank you so much for all of your compliments. I absolutly love your reviews.:)

Name: JewellPotterFan (Anonymous) · Date: 08/26/06 21:39 · For: Bonding
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! Sweet.

Sorry, that's all I have to say today.

Author's Response: :D I'm really glad you like it. Again, thank you so much for the reviews.

Name: JewellPotterFan (Anonymous) · Date: 08/26/06 21:36 · For: A New Arrival
Wow. Tonks's additude is terrible, but perfectly understandable if you think about it. You're wonderful.

Author's Response: Awww...I'm glad you're enjoying this. It's really my baby. I've put a lot of work into this one.

Yeah, Tonks doesn't seem particularly nice, but I just can't see her understanding what her mother is doing. I also do not see her warming up to Bella. She has only ever seen her aunt as someone her threw Andromeda from her life and followed the Dark Lord without questions. These are not good things and that is all Tonks is able to see in Bella.

Name: JewellPotterFan (Anonymous) · Date: 08/26/06 21:31 · For: Vulnerable and Helpless
Very different chapter than the others. Bella's attidude toward Elizabeth is very interesting after her sentimental additude toward Andromeda.

Author's Response: Hehe! Bella may love her sister, but she's still Bella. She's not ready to give up everything she has every believed. To her, someone like Elizabeth is trash.

Name: JewellPotterFan (Anonymous) · Date: 08/26/06 21:27 · For: Bella's Story
The last chapters left me feeling all worked up and sort of...trapped. But after this one, I was touched and felt sort of beatiful inside. It's wonderful to see how love can stay the same through everything.

Author's Response: Well, after HP, I saw a really strong bond between Bella and Narcissa. I assumed they probably had that bond with Andromeda once, too, and that kind of thing doesn't just die. Thanks so much for all of your reviews!

Name: JewellPotterFan (Anonymous) · Date: 08/26/06 21:21 · For: Darkness
Oh my gosh! This is amazing and extremely--oh, I can't think of the word--but I'll tell you in a later review. Bella's view on the world is rather hard to capture, you have done a terrific job.

Author's Response: Hehe! Thanks so much! It's nice to hear that you think I've captured Bella's view of the world. She's my favorite HP character.:D

Name: JewellPotterFan (Anonymous) · Date: 08/26/06 21:15 · For: Death Eaters At Large
This is an amazing story, and very interesting. I will review your other chapters, also, as soon as I get done reading them. You are an amazing writer. Keep going!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Reviews make me happy. It really means a lot. I'm glad you're enjoying my story! :D

Name: dragon mystique (Signed) · Date: 08/23/06 0:15 · For: Death Eaters At Large
This is really interesting. I've never read a story from Andromeda's point of view. I always assumed that the Black Sisters were very close as children but this shows a lot of emotion on Andromeda's part. I really enjoyed this. :)

Author's Response: Yay! Whining in the CR got me a review.:) Thanks so much!

I have written one other story in Andromeda's POV, "Nowhere to Go" but the rest of this one is from Bella's POV. She's my favorite. I've also always thought of the Black sisters as being very close in their youth.

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks again for the review! :D

Name: ForbiddenLove (Signed) · Date: 08/22/06 12:39 · For: Death Eaters At Large
Oooh, bravo!! I love it! Bella's fun to write, isn't she? So is Andromeda. And you write both sisters very well. I love how you introduced the bracelet first and then revealed Bella! Nice twist! I was sure the metal object was just a metal object until you said it was connected to a hand. This is going on my favorites!!!

Author's Response: Everytime I try to respond to you the computer logs me out!

Okay, let's try again. I absolutly love writing Bella. It's funny that Sirius was my favorite character and now it has changed to her. But I just love her now!

The bracelet took me a little while to think of. I needed something that would get Andromeda's attention so she would find Bella. I thought of something shiny, cause I had been writing about it being a sunny day. And then the bracelet popped into my head. I tried to wait as late in the chapter as possible to announce her presence. I wanted to get as much of the back story out as possible first.

This story is my new baby. I spend countless hours on it daily. I already have the first seven chapters written. I'm going to edit chapter seven in a few minutes. I'm really excited about this story and your review just made my day. Thanks so much!:D:D:D

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