I absolutely love this story! This is one of my absolute favourites. The fact that it's about how Ginny first wrote in the diary and the fact that it's written from Tom's POV just makes it more awesome.
A good story. You have written an admirable Voldemort. The first paragraph is a great characterization snippet; he is rambling, just like in the graveyard. I can see him pacing, as he speaks, and so he would, if he had a body. My only slight issue with this piece is a whiff of softening toward Ginny in the middle. The "Ho cute" and the remark "shame that she will die" give a bit of the wrong idea. I think you are letting your own affection influence this. Otherwise, Great Work!!
This is amazing.
I love how it's told from diary Tom's POV. I've never seen anything written from this perspective, and I really enjoyed it. It's amazing how much Tom sounds like the adult Voldemort. The way he talks to Ginny has the charm that the young Tom Riddle was known for. The diary Riddle here seems to combine the ruthless of the adult Voldemort with the charm of the teenage Tom. I love the combination of the two, and it really works well in the story.
Ginny is great here too. She sounds like an extremely self-conscious, confused eleven-year-old. She is very much like Ginny in COS, and after reading this, it makes sense why Ginny fell prey to Tom. She was confused and needed someone to talk to about her feelings; the first person to do that just happened to be the darkest wizard of the age. I love how Tom manages to exploit Ginny's weakness. Just by listening to and talking to her, he is able to manipulate her.
It's interesting how little, yet how much Tom knows. He knows that his adult self was murdered, and that Harry Potter was responsible for it. He also knows that a good friend of his (Lucius, I assume?) so that he could use it to open the Chamber. I'm curious to know how Tom heard about his downfall. Could he hear snippets of conversation from his hiding place in Malfoy Manor? Or did Lucius scribble little notes in it to keep him at least partially informed on the state of the wizarding world?
I hungrily absorb the information she gives me about Potter with the fervor of a malnourished child presented with food for the first time in months.
This line is so interesting. It really shows you how in the dark Tom is about the things going on the world. It also helps you understand what causes Tom to go from hunting Muggle-borns to hunting Harry. It's interesting how you manage to weave hints of Tom's obsession with Harry in; it really makes everything more interesting.
Overall, great job. I really loved reading this fic. Your writing is amazing; I have to read more of your fics.
(oh I almost forgot to add:) Great job!
It;s very interesting. I never thought of it from the book's/memory's point of view. Very interesting. I'm very curious, is there any chance you can expand this into a story of all of Ginny's and Tom's times in book together?
that was really good, it was chilling and really well written
yay great story. continue it
Gasp! That was great :) Are you going to expand on this? I really like it :)
This is AMAZING. It is very true to the characters' personalities, and it is well-written. I would love to read more of you writing!
cool. what ginny writes is very believable. i never really imagined what riddle must have been thinking while writing to ginny. awsome, 10/10!
whoa, absolutly brilliant!!
keep it up =p
wow!! great story!!! its like explaining something part of the chamber of secrets *the book* and.. well great story above al!! keep up the great work =)
Great store, I love your writing style. Keep it up, I'm looking forward to the rest of the story!