Reviews For Vampyr
Reviewer: Loki MM
Date: 02/14/05 18:36
Chapter: Chapter Four: Visions of the Golden Glade

I'm out there. Sorry this took so long to read --- on the upside, you're an excellent author already if you got me to read something R rated. Excellent insight into Avril's character there, and I think you got Riddle in character very well. Therefore, in spite of the language, I enjoyed this chapter. *hands Zetera medal for getting her to say that* Update Soon! Cheers!

Author's Response: Oh yay, I'm so glad you read it, I was worried you wouldn't. The mods said I had to keep it at an R rating, but it was just the language, nothing else. If I ever use a R rating for this story, it will only be for language/violence. Oh yay! A medal! Thank you sooo much, I want to thank my family, mugglenet, J.K Rowling.....

Reviewer: Hoodoo
Date: 02/13/05 16:16
Chapter: Chapter Four: Visions of the Golden Glade

I like this chapter most of all. Your writing was very well crafted for the exchange between Tom and Avril, and I think it's an accurate protrayal of Tom's personality.

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I like this chapter too, but I was worried no one else would...

Reviewer: Zetera
Date: 02/11/05 6:21
Chapter: Chapter Four: Visions of the Golden Glade

Anybody out there?

Reviewer: Hoodoo
Date: 01/29/05 13:36
Chapter: Chapter Three: Broken

Parroting another reviewer, I too like where this is going. Snape owning a disused, memory filled house is intriguing, and I know you'll fill us in on his past. And this quote is quite elegant: "Snape's darkness had taken dominance in his marraige, in more ways than one." Thank you!

Author's Response: Thank you, this is my favorite chapter so far, I'm glad you're enjoying it!

Reviewer: Voldemort rocks
Date: 01/26/05 17:59
Chapter: Chapter Three: Broken

Once again awsome!

Author's Response: Yay! Thank you!

Reviewer: Loki MM
Date: 01/25/05 18:13
Chapter: Chapter Three: Broken

Wow, and we add another piece to this puzzle of mystery. Nasce really interests me, and the whole thing youve set up about Snape's wife and daughter --- what happened to them? Awesome chapter, really, and awesome build up. Cheers!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, you'll find out soon! I'm glad the tension is working. Thanks again!

Reviewer: OdDsbOdIkInS
Date: 01/22/05 17:07
Chapter: Chapter Three: Broken

Yay first reviewer! This plot is so original i really enjoy reading it! It doesn't bore me like most other ones, every chapter gets better!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I hope you continue to enjoy it!

Reviewer: Mrs H J Potter
Date: 01/18/05 18:15
Chapter: Chapter Two - Distrust

NICE!! Keep updating. I LOOOOOOOVE this story.

Author's Response: Thanks, chapter three has been submitted and it's my favorite one so far, hope you like it!

Reviewer: Hoodoo
Date: 01/14/05 11:59
Chapter: Chapter Two - Distrust

Throw a vampyr who has a history with Voldemort into the mix? Very nice. My only semi-nitpick is the 'casualness' of the dialog. It feels a little too light for both the seriousness of the occasions and the people speaking. Post a new chapter soon please! yours, Hoodoo

Author's Response: Thanks, I'll keep that in mind. I'm posting a new chapter today!

Reviewer: Hoodoo
Date: 01/14/05 11:56
Chapter: Chapter One - The Return

Very interesting. The idea of Snape knowing/dealing with/etc. a vampyr is intriguing . . .

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: hockykitten189
Date: 01/13/05 21:33
Chapter: Chapter Two - Distrust

that was really good.

Author's Response: Thank you very much, I'm glad you liked it. Chapter three should be up soon.

Reviewer: harriel1466
Date: 01/13/05 20:43
Chapter: Chapter One - The Return

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Author's Response: Thank you, I'll keep that in mind!

Reviewer: OdDsbOdIkInS
Date: 01/11/05 15:46
Chapter: Chapter Two - Distrust

Another fantastic chapter! I am intrigued, i think the plot is great, but don't kill off snape i love him!

Author's Response: I'm afraid I can't tell you my intentions with Snape but rest assured that I love him too. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: OdDsbOdIkInS
Date: 01/11/05 15:39
Chapter: Chapter One - The Return

That was great! i can't see snape as having a daughter, i love the vampire plot it is cool! keep writing = )

Author's Response: Thanks, I understand what you mean about Snape and the daughter thing, but hopefully as the plot unfolds and you learn more about him that will seem more believable.

Reviewer: Loki MM
Date: 01/08/05 20:33
Chapter: Chapter Two - Distrust

Another good chapter; I am much intrigued by your vampyr, and what she might have to do with Tom, and the discription and language are excellent. one small thing -- before adress, as well as after, its proper to use a comma. Other than that nitpick, very good story! Cheers!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review Loki, ahm...I'm afraid I'm not too sure what you mean about putting a comma before and after an address, could you clarify? Damn, now I sound really stupid.....

Reviewer: Zetera
Date: 01/05/05 9:18
Chapter: Chapter One - The Return

Thanks guys, I love to know what people think. More on the way!!!

Reviewer: chrislupin025
Date: 12/16/04 19:57
Chapter: Chapter One - The Return

I DO!! I WANT TO REVIEW! I like this! Snape has a daughter i never knew, well i don't know alot WHY DID I HAVE TO BE A BLONDE ME!! WHY! Keep up with the great work!!!

Reviewer: Loki MM
Date: 12/16/04 18:08
Chapter: Chapter One - The Return

I shall review you! I'm sorry, hadn't checked your bio in awhile, and I didn't know it was there -- you are good. Very good. Snape has a daughter? Must know more. And the fact that you used the proper term (vampyr) has me very, very excited! Good discription, good chaaracterization, and clean grammar. In other words, good fic! Cheers!

Reviewer: Zetera
Date: 12/16/04 6:04
Chapter: Chapter One - The Return

Nobody wants to review me...sniff...sniff...WAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!

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