Reviewer: wiltedrose
Date: 07/07/09 14:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

hey umm this is a really good fanfic so far and i would really love it if you could continue it or if ur working on it already then thanks im really looking forward to reading the rest

Reviewer: Kara Zor-El
Date: 05/08/08 11:21
Chapter: Chapter 1

PLEASE REVIEW SOON!!!! :) I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!!!!!!!

Reviewer: lucygirl2789
Date: 12/01/07 13:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

Love! Great idea i hope to read more.

Reviewer: shadow123
Date: 11/06/07 19:12
Chapter: Chapter 1

OMG that is such a cliff hanger!!! great start can not wait for more

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: roarke delcon malfoy
Date: 03/10/07 10:27
Chapter: Chapter 1

Are you ever going to finish this? I found myself actually liking it and wanting to see where it went.

Author's Response: Yep. I am.

Reviewer: callmehermione
Date: 02/04/07 23:38
Chapter: Chapter 1

This chapter means a lot to me in particular because you sent it to me while I was at Oxford and I read it in the East Garden one sunny day between lectures, Kelli peering over my shoulder. I felt very loved. So now I really want to leave it a SPEW review.

I like the characters of Molly and Ginny that you've presented - Molly an insistent mother, GInny simply the victim.

You used to fancy him, I recall. Is Molly really this dense, or is she just desperate? It seems rather silly, I must say.

Smiling indulgently at her mother, Ginny realized the only course of action that would allow her to escape a well-intentioned fix-up with her old flame was to lie. Oh, poor Molly. This line has always made me smile because Ginny is wily that way, and I like the way you present her.

it was hard to find someone who didn’t feel intimidated by her relationship with the savior of the wizarding world. This is an interesting concept that one doesn't often see in D/G fics but makes perfect sense. Harry's relationship would make Ginny's finding a boyfriend difficult. You mentioned 'men' a few times, and I'm assuming you meant wizards? You may want to include that.

There are a few times when it appears as though your spacing is off - there's a sudden 'enter' in the middle of paragraphs. You may want to check that.

Anyway, I like the way you develop your story to show that Ginny is getting desperate.

“Idsroodo,” she mumbled from her impromptu hideaway. Oh, I love that you managed to actually make this confused garble make sense. It's still a goal of mine to add this to a story.

The news upset her mother so badly that she had been in high dudgeon for a month. This little backstory adds nicely to the tale. Also, dudgeon is a delightful word.

At 'Ginny's eyes went wide,' the spacing goes funny again.

And Ginny had understood. I like the sudden realisation here! However, it doesn't need to be in the pluperfect because you weren't telling a story. In other words, you don't need to put 'had' there.

The next name announced hit her like a bucket of cold water. Ha! I can see why. This is a line characteristic of your writing, and I enjoy it wonderfully.

It's interesting that you began with fibs and ended with honesty being Ginny's salvation, an interesting combination. I've read several of the fics written for this contest, and I find this one easily the most believable and memorable, greatly because of your conclusion.

You know, I've never understood the concept of 'mail-order brides', and your story does a good job of showing it, in my opinion. Excellent work, dear Kate.

Author's Response: Oh my dear Delaney, I was so tickled to get a SPEW review from you! It's taken me forever, but I am finally getting around to responding. First, I really appreciate the thought and analysis you put into reviewing this chapter. I know that you put in a lot of effort to make your reviews constructive and thoughtful, and I have a lot of respect for your opinion. Second, it pleases me to no end that you have a happy Oxford memory associated with reading this. Really, I'm smiling quite broadly. Now, a thoughtful review requires a thoughtful response. [i]Is Molly really this dense, or is she just desperate? It seems rather silly, I must say.[/i] Molly is just a fussy mother who wants to see her children happy and in love. She'll seize any opportunity she thinks might lead to the desired result. Unfortunately for her children, Molly is [i]not[/i] subtle. [i]Oh, poor Molly. This line has always made me smile because Ginny is wily that way, and I like the way you present her[/i] Unfortunately for Molly, Ginny (like a few of her siblings) [i]can be[/i] subtle. Subtly deceptive, at any rate. I'm pleased you like this portrayal. [i]This is an interesting concept that one doesn't often see in D/G fics but makes perfect sense. Harry's relationship would make Ginny's finding a boyfriend difficult. You mentioned 'men' a few times, and I'm assuming you meant wizards? You may want to include that.[/i] I do think that Harry would be a tough act for any man to follow. I do tend to use 'men' and 'women' more often than 'wizards' and 'witches', and there is a reason behind that. All wizards are men, but not all men are wizards. They are human, and their magic is portrayed in canon as a genetic trait. 'Wizard' just specifies that this trait is present, it does not supersede the fact that a wizard is a man. I'm not sure what is up with the spacing. I'll have to play around with it when I have some free time. [i]Oh, I love that you managed to actually make this confused garble make sense. It's still a goal of mine to add this to a story.[/i] I'm so glad you liked that bit! Deciding how to spell that out took a bit of time. I was very pleased with the end result myself. It would make me incredibly giddy if you did put that in a story. I'd giggle myself silly. [i]This little backstory adds nicely to the tale. Also, dudgeon is a delightful word.[/i] Thanks, I hoped Laura's brother's experience would add a bit of credibility. I'm glad you think it worked. I also feel compelled to note that I stole the phrase 'high dudgeon' directly from P&P. It is used to describe Mr. Collins after Lizzie refuses him - at least in the BBC adaptation of the book. [i]I like the sudden realisation here! However, it doesn't need to be in the pluperfect because you weren't telling a story. In other words, you don't need to put 'had' there.[/i] Little things like this are why my favorite beta is not allowed to go abroad when I feel like writing fic. *cough* [i]Ha! I can see why. This is a line characteristic of your writing, and I enjoy it wonderfully.[/i] I have specific writing characteristics? And they're good things? Good God, that's thrilling! I always feel like I'm throwing things together all higgledy-piggledy. It's very nice to know that there is some commonality - and that it's enjoyable. [i]It's interesting that you began with fibs and ended with honesty being Ginny's salvation, an interesting combination. I've read several of the fics written for this contest, and I find this one easily the most believable and memorable, greatly because of your conclusion. You know, I've never understood the concept of 'mail-order brides', and your story does a good job of showing it, in my opinion. Excellent work, dear Kate. [/i] I'm happy you caught that. I like it when aspects of stories come full circle, or have some sort of secondary theme throughout. I try to incorporate those little additives in my fics, although it's a lot easier with one shots than multi-chaptered stories. And thank you for the praise. As I said before, I value your opinion and I know that you don't just hand out sugary niceties. It means a lot to me to know that you think I've done a good job.

Author's Response: Ok, that mess was formatted when I typed it.

Reviewer: stareywomen
Date: 01/30/07 14:53
Chapter: Chapter 1

i liked it alot!

Author's Response: I'm glad to hear it!

Reviewer: Spottedcat
Date: 01/01/07 18:00
Chapter: Chapter 1

But what happens next? Talk about a cliffhanger! Must know!

I like the way Draco comes across, by the way. Not precisely pleasant, but not really horrid anymore.

But I can hardly wait to see the Weasley family's faces if Ginny gets engaged, then shows up at home. "Okay, Mom, Dad, everyone... here's the man I'm going to marry."

(collected gasp; Molly faints...)

Author's Response: Hee. I'm working on the next chapter, but it's slow going. I'm glad you're enjoying it! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: dr324
Date: 11/08/06 15:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

Luv how short it is and how it gets to the point.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing.

Reviewer: LovelyxLena
Date: 09/30/06 15:19
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh wow. That is interetsing. Haha, update!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing.

Reviewer: mugglemommy
Date: 08/29/06 19:48
Chapter: Chapter 1

I am intrigued! Write more!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad it's caught your attention. The next chapter is in the works, but it may be a little while.

Reviewer: satansrighthand
Date: 08/23/06 10:56
Chapter: Chapter 1

BEAUTIFUL!!!! I'd love another chapter!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you! More will be coming, hopefully before too long.

Reviewer: num
Date: 08/21/06 6:26
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is a beautiful story. Are you planning on continuing it?

Author's Response: Yes, there will be more. I'm a slow writer, though, so I can't say it will be very soon. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: lovegood02
Date: 08/20/06 23:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

great love it addin to favs update soon

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying it!

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