Reviews For Love of a Kind
Reviewer: Cinderella Angelina
Date: 09/16/07 17:11
Chapter: Chapter 1

Dear Preethi,
You did a wonderful job really examining and analyzing the love of Minerva McGonagall and Albus Dumbledore. I really think that’s the way their relationship was, and I applaud you muchly for getting it so right.

I also think you did a good job with your ... similes, metaphors, general diction, etc. When you describe the loss of Dumbledore as “a solid wall that crumbled, a limb lost, a crutch gone,” etc, that was really powerful and made it clear just how much Minerva missed him. And just the right kind of missing, too. No lust in leaning against a wall.

The situations you put the two of them in, too, really illustrate the mentor-like status Dumbledore had with Minerva. And (this is just me being a canon freak) I liked that you were careful to make McGonagall become a teacher in December. Because that is when she started. It was a little weird that Dippet, who was an old man anyway, had to be murdered by his son, but it was a nice contrivance.

I do have a couple little picky things to mention about this story. First up is it’s actually “A Cauldron Full of Hot, Strong Love.”

The first paragraph was mostly good, I would just get rid of one word to really get your point across. (My favorite part is the Ancient Runes expert part, incidentally.) You said that the expression on her face was “neither a smile or a frown,” but then when you describe the way her lips curved, you mention it as a “smile.” I would probably change that to “her lips curved vaguely.”

In the next paragraph, that comma right before the parantheses is unnecessary.

And since that’s been a couple little picky things, I shall now stop being picky. Because really, good stories like this don’t need an awful lot of nitpicks. And you really got across the message of your story quite well, and that’s the important thing.

*hug* Miss you. Have a nice day!
Sincerely,
Leslie *D*

Author's Response: Aw, thanks for reviewing, dear! And for pointing out those typos; I'll fix it asap. :)

Reviewer: LoveStory815
Date: 07/15/07 8:26
Chapter: Chapter 1

Good Story. I like the way that you show the bond these two have without the usual graphic scenes of passion that would make it seem more shallow. Nice ending too. Just one thing. What happened with them between the Order forming and Dumbledore's death? Other than that, excellent job.

Author's Response: Thank you! About what happened between the Order forming and Dumbledore's death, nothing much, really, otherwise it would've found a place in the story. ;) Thanks again for the review! :)

Reviewer: tc015
Date: 09/08/06 19:40
Chapter: Chapter 1

I loved your story. The interaction between McGonagall and Dumbledore was very realistic. I liked how you described McGonagall's past. Overall, great story.

Author's Response: Thanks for your comments, tc! :D

Reviewer: pandafan81
Date: 08/26/06 1:14
Chapter: Chapter 1

AWWWWWW This is so sweet! I love the relationship you've built here. Both Dumbledore and McGonagall are PERFECTLY in character. The timeline was well thought out, and the circumstances well placed. I loved the background you created for McGonagall. She has always fostered a soft spot, and I think the history you created would support that well. I also like how you pointed out that their love was not "lustful", you're right! He's twice her age! Anyway, I think you did a marvelous job!

Author's Response: Oooh, I get a review from Amanda? :D Thanks for your kind words, dear. You've made my day!

Reviewer: mcgonagallfan
Date: 08/21/06 2:54
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was so brilliant! I loved every bit of it! Defintely 10/10 stars!

Author's Response: Thanks, McGonagallfan for reviewing! :D

Reviewer: hogwartswannabe
Date: 08/19/06 19:21
Chapter: Chapter 1

this was so good!!! i loved all the flashbacks, it was definitely a 10/10!!

Author's Response: Thanks, Hogwartswannabe for your wonderful comments! You made my day, dear!

Reviewer: Khrys
Date: 08/19/06 17:50
Chapter: Chapter 1

What a beautiful story. I love the background on Minerva, and the interactions between her and Dumbledore. This is a very touching story. :) Great job.

Author's Response: Thanks, Khrys for reviewing! You know, I just saw that Love of a Kind had been approved and I come here to find two reviews as well :) What a glorious morning!

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