Reviewer: Rita Writer
Date: 08/27/06 20:23
Chapter: Locked Away -- Years

Iím constantly in awe of how much you write. Youíre just a little bubble or creativity! Poetry has always been my weakness, so whenever I read other peoplesí, Iím always in a daze.

I like both the thing youíve chosen to describe (Iíve always loved Sirius), but mostly I like the format. The second section is my favorite, because of the things youíve chosen to put emphasis on. that thing. them.

The word choice youíve used is incredible and precise. Sometimes the format makes things a little incoherent, but this is debatable, especially considering that the poem is about a place that supposedly makes one go mad. You donít use any articles, and this is consistent, so itís perfectly fine (what else is poetry for if you canít break a few rules? English is pretty screwy anyway.)

I hope to see more poems from you, because your biggest strength is obviously creativity, and the best outlet for that appears to be poetry. Youíd have a lot more freedom to express what you mean, and you think outside the box so much that I think itíd suit you perfectly.


Author's Response: Awwww. *HUGGLESTACKLESLOVES* That has got to be the sweetest review I've gotten. Thank you, love, you've absolutely made my morning. Creative? Me? I try, lol. I'm happy that you enjoyed this poem since I had quite a lot of trouble with it, so -- thank you. *hugs again*

Reviewer: Blossomlily
Date: 08/19/06 5:39
Chapter: Locked Away -- Years

Oh my lord. I feel absolutely humbled that you wrote such a beautiful poem for me. *is awed*

Firstly, I loved your choice of words. They are very specific, and do their job perfectly, and I know I can't be as decisive when it comes to choosing words, which is why I drag, I suppose. Second, though I'm not a poetry expert and am ignorant of the term for such a scheme, I thought the fragmented stanzas were very very fitting. They sort of give me the impression of how being in Azkaban sucks away a person's clear thoughts, leaving them with incoherent thoughts which make sense... Splendid.

I so love how you injected the Dementor bit in. I could really understand how Sirius would feel reluctant to even think of the word, judging by the way he talks about them in PoA. *sigh* Poor thing.

Thank you so much, dear Anna. :) I'm terribly pleased and grateful to get such a valuable birthday gift.

-With love and hugs,

Manju

Author's Response: *grins and hugglese* I am so glad that you liked this, dear. =) Your comments are just so lovely and it was a pleasure to write this for you. *huggles more and loves*

Reviewer: A Excess of Phlegm
Date: 08/18/06 17:07
Chapter: Locked Away -- Years

this was really good. very deep. and it seems like something a person going crazy in azkaban mught think. very, very good.

Author's Response: Awww, thank you so much! I'm really glad you liked it. =)

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