Wow, this is really good! i love the character of Iris Borgin, she's so much like me! get chapter 3 up soon, cause im drooling just thinking about it. wait, that was kinda gross...anyway, keep up the good work and i think you could publish this as a real story. well, not just like this, but with the same plot things and different names and stuff, if you know what i mean
I really enjoyed your story, it was captivating,well written and unique, awesome job!
This chapter really shows this isn't just a romance story! I thought how you started it with the part about Draco's father and the dream was excellent. The only thing I was a little confused about was the fact that it said Draco woke up with Pansy next to him and I was confused of whether they had slept together or not. I doubt that your intention of that passage was that and maybe you should change it so not confuse any more readers. Besides that, I really liked this story. The lightbulb in the head part was excellent. Great job!
Author's Response: Nope...they didn't sleep together. I fixed it a bit. Thanks for pointing that out.
I think this story has got a lot of potential, although I don't quite see how Borgin's daughter would end up in Ravenclaw. Also, I doubt Draco would like anyone who wasn't in Slytherin, but you never know. This is quite good for a first fic; much better than my own. I really like Iris's character. While many authors experiment with the romance category with their first fic (often with disasterous results!) you wrote this very well. I look foward to reading more of this story. This is a good first chapter and with a little tweaking, this could develop into a very good story.
Author's Response: Thanks! Your comments mean a lot to me. I guess the reason why Iris is in Ravenclaw is because she is more intelligent than ambitious, regardless of her family background. Chapter 2 is up, please read. =)
Good job! I think it very good, you chould continue! I don't think i've ever read a fic with Mr. Borgin's daughter in it...
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm well into chapter 2 now.
I love love love!!!!!!!!! ur story its the best one out of all these other storys!!!!! please OMG please update this story soon its great!!! and good luck!! lol
Author's Response: Oh wow! thanks for the compliments. I actually submitted this story about 3 wks ago but they rejected it for some reason. I'm glad i decided to try again =)