that was ridiculously good! first of all .. well done! you're an amazing writer.
secondly.. i liked how you said in the summary that you didn't see james as a 'smooth talking first year' that's so true.
and thirdly, and i'm being completely honest now, like hand on my heart etc., that was EXACTLY how i saw james and lily's relationship and how they got together. ok maybe not EXACTLY, like exact words and everything but really, reeeeaaally close. i can't believe that so many writers on this site had to write over 300 stories, each describing different ways in which james and lily paired up and then you write a one shot and get it perfectly, down to all the details in just one chapter. you should seriously get an award or something.
sorry this is long but i really had to tell you that was the best JP/LE story i've ever taken the time to read
wow! That was amazing! I really really liked it. It was really well-written and I don't know exactly what it was, but there was capturing and unique about your story. good job!
Wow. This is totally amazing. I love your style. The way you switched from telling the story to showing it happen. Very nice. 10/10
hello there my old china- you know I love your work but I thought I'd drop you a line to re-iterate the fact for you. Hope to read some more soon, keep in touch x
This was really good... its a realistic look at Lily and James. 10/10
awww that was sooo sweet!!!!!
i loved it
i hav read many james/lily fics this was one of best
Nice job, a very believable character change. Sometimes Lily/James fics have James become a gentleman with no explanation at all, but this was done very nicely.
This was really great. I loved it, from start to end.
that was absolutely brilliant.
i really enjoyed it and everything you wanted to portray you did. it all just fitted so well. I'm impressed. i've read many of your other stories and I enjoy them all. you've definetly got talent.
Awww. That was cute. Altho, i kinda do think that was like a fairytale ending. I mean, one minute Lily despises James and the next shes telling him she loves him. That only happens in fairytales. Other than that, it was good.