Well, my lovely Kay, I’ve definitely been meaning to read your work for a while. Whenever it’s brought up, I only ever hear raves about it. So I’m very glad to be your SPEW buddy this time around. It gave me the perfect push I needed to finally get into your author page. I found such an array of things there and I really meant to read your Remus story...but I’m an absolute sucker for James/Lily.
I know it’s a pain to get a correction at the beginning of a review, and it’s also a pain to go fix it, but this one had to be mentioned:
She gazed out the window at the blurred images that past... I’m guessing that should be “passed” as in passing by. I really love the first sentence of this story though. It paints such a real picture. I’ve totally been there (granted I don’t have a magical wand, but still) and so I immediately start to identify with Lily and her present situation. I know exactly how Lily must feel - to finally get away from everyone else (whether or not you love or hate them) to simply have quiet time. Uninterrupted “me” time.
I liked the way you described Lily’s feelings about the Muggle paper that Petunia had used for the letter. And the letter itself felt very appropriate - not over the top OMGIHATEYOULILY, which....can get annoying in James/Lily fics. It had the right amount of zing.
It felt sort of awkward to have the description of so many not-important characters after Lily read the letter. The one that I didn’t mind was Craig. His background and position in the fic was simple and it felt more natural than Elisabeth, Wendy, Isabelle and the other people with them.
James was really a treat in this. He was an annoyance to Lily, and then he was an interest, and I felt that as a reader. I even felt that unconscious change that Lily did. And I laughed at the fact that he just sat there while she read. That’s so Jamesly of James. This was a very nice read. A smashingly well-constructed one-shot, as well, I might add. It doesn’t demand any continuation, but if you ever decided to continue it, you could - it fits nicely as a developing romance.
Author's Response: This was really more of a Lily one-shot with implied James/Lily, with her introspections and whatnot. The others that were placed in this were kind of random, I know. Thanks for the review!
Very nice!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review!
Great! That was really original and cute. I liked it a lot.
Author's Response: Glad you liked it! Thank you for reviewing!
That was cute. I liked it a lot. Maybe a sequel?
Author's Response: I'll consider a sequel. : )Thank you for reviewing!
Nice one-shot! I like it because it's a glimpse at how it all began in a very natural way, and I really think it must've been somethin like this. Very well written too. Good work!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it and that it flowed well. Thanks for the review!
This was awesome. Thank you.
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
awww...that ending was way sweet.
Do you have anymore J/L stories?
Author's Response: Currently, I do not. This was written on a whim, but there may be others in the future. Who knows? : )Thanks for the review!
well, i must say, that while this wasn't phenomenal, it was fairly good! one problem was that it didn't really have a point; it was just kind of...random. it was well written though, and i like the last few paragraphs especially; they were clever and sweet. over all, a pretty good read! good job.
Author's Response: Yeah, it is kind of random, I know. I've never written James/Lily before, but this idea kind of popped into my head that maybe there was a slow progression to them getting together before seventh year, that maybe something struck a chord with Lily that James wasn't just a marauding jokster who was hex-happy. I thought the train was a perfect place for her to start dawning on that.Thank you for reviewing!
