Reviews For The Sun Has Risen
Reviewer: quiggler
Date: 04/16/07 18:36
Chapter: Chapter 1

Great work!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: electronicquillster
Date: 01/29/07 2:17
Chapter: Chapter 1

Well, my lovely Kay, Iíve definitely been meaning to read your work for a while. Whenever itís brought up, I only ever hear raves about it. So Iím very glad to be your SPEW buddy this time around. It gave me the perfect push I needed to finally get into your author page. I found such an array of things there and I really meant to read your Remus story...but Iím an absolute sucker for James/Lily.

I know itís a pain to get a correction at the beginning of a review, and itís also a pain to go fix it, but this one had to be mentioned:

She gazed out the window at the blurred images that past... Iím guessing that should be ďpassedĒ as in passing by. I really love the first sentence of this story though. It paints such a real picture. Iíve totally been there (granted I donít have a magical wand, but still) and so I immediately start to identify with Lily and her present situation. I know exactly how Lily must feel - to finally get away from everyone else (whether or not you love or hate them) to simply have quiet time. Uninterrupted ďmeĒ time.

I liked the way you described Lilyís feelings about the Muggle paper that Petunia had used for the letter. And the letter itself felt very appropriate - not over the top OMGIHATEYOULILY, which....can get annoying in James/Lily fics. It had the right amount of zing.

It felt sort of awkward to have the description of so many not-important characters after Lily read the letter. The one that I didnít mind was Craig. His background and position in the fic was simple and it felt more natural than Elisabeth, Wendy, Isabelle and the other people with them.

James was really a treat in this. He was an annoyance to Lily, and then he was an interest, and I felt that as a reader. I even felt that unconscious change that Lily did. And I laughed at the fact that he just sat there while she read. Thatís so Jamesly of James. This was a very nice read. A smashingly well-constructed one-shot, as well, I might add. It doesnít demand any continuation, but if you ever decided to continue it, you could - it fits nicely as a developing romance.

Author's Response: This was really more of a Lily one-shot with implied James/Lily, with her introspections and whatnot. The others that were placed in this were kind of random, I know. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: sinfonia_concertante
Date: 08/16/06 14:34
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very nice!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: goobersam9
Date: 08/15/06 18:51
Chapter: Chapter 1

Great! That was really original and cute. I liked it a lot.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it! Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: KASK
Date: 08/13/06 23:29
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was cute. I liked it a lot. Maybe a sequel?

Author's Response: I'll consider a sequel. : )

Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: Indhira
Date: 08/13/06 23:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

Nice one-shot! I like it because it's a glimpse at how it all began in a very natural way, and I really think it must've been somethin like this. Very well written too. Good work!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it and that it flowed well. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Teary Loser
Date: 08/13/06 21:10
Chapter: Chapter 1

This was awesome. Thank you.

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: hannah mickie
Date: 08/13/06 19:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

awww...that ending was way sweet.
Do you have anymore J/L stories?


Author's Response: Currently, I do not. This was written on a whim, but there may be others in the future. Who knows? : )

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: lilyevans91
Date: 08/13/06 18:57
Chapter: Chapter 1

well, i must say, that while this wasn't phenomenal, it was fairly good! one problem was that it didn't really have a point; it was just kind of...random. it was well written though, and i like the last few paragraphs especially; they were clever and sweet. over all, a pretty good read! good job.

Author's Response: Yeah, it is kind of random, I know. I've never written James/Lily before, but this idea kind of popped into my head that maybe there was a slow progression to them getting together before seventh year, that maybe something struck a chord with Lily that James wasn't just a marauding jokster who was hex-happy. I thought the train was a perfect place for her to start dawning on that.

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