i love it! i really think you should write more about Neville & Skit. they make a cute cople.
Hey Ashley!!!! This is your spew buddy speaking!! This story was just lovely! It really was, from beginning to end. It made me want a Tadfoal!! I want one in my bathtub :) Ok, I don't have a bathtub, but I still want one.
Neville's characterization was lovely. Most people portray him as pee-in-my-pants kinda person, but you didn't, and I'm glad you didn't. He's still awkawrd and clumsy, like the Neville we've all come to love, but he's his own person. I especially liked the part where he's looking at Skit swim with Farrah. He stares at first, but then realises that he shouldn't. Most people would've stayed and watched.
Skit was also an interesting character. She really called my attention from the very beginning. I especially liked her actions and reactions. They were not typical and unespected. She always kept me guessing. The scene were she cries is just beaaaautiful. I just imagined her tears falling and the sun setting and it was really espectacular.
The scene at the beginning was really cute. I just thought of the two of them poking at the worm-like creature and it made me chuckle. It was cute. The scene in the library was also nice. Skit always keeping Neville on his toes. He never knows what she's going to do next.
The fic is full of beautiful imagery. I especially liked your descriptions of the swims. Both Neville's and Skit's. But I liked Neville's better, because of course it was longer and we were seeing everything in Neville's POV. The scene were Neville first sees Farrah is very powerful also. I can imagine the rain falling down and them helping the poor animal, not minding if they're uncomfortable.
Farrah is a lovely character! She should have her own fic: "The adventures of Farrah!" LOL Ok, I was joking. But seriously I feel in love with the little creature.
Lovely fic, Ashley! Seriously it was a very nice read.
Yeah. I like this story better every time I read it. Which has been a few times by now. I especially like the interplay between the three main characters – Neville, Skit, and Farrah.
I like how we find out just how Neville views Skit right away – she’s intimidating and hard and emotionless. But even from the beginning he senses that there’s something more to her; he just can’t figure it out. It takes the introduction of a third character to show him the sort of girl Skit is. Neville also changes as a result of Farrah.
Skit’s characterization is great. I like how she’s obviously a Slytherin – she frightens Neville, laughs when he falls down, and knows how to get what she wants (i.e. Object Barrier Charm). But it’s also clear that she isn’t that bad at all; she really cares about Farrah. And sometimes we get a little tiny glimpse of someone truly sensitive underneath.
Farrah, as an animal, doesn’t really have character to analyze – she’s just a nice playful animal. But her effect on Neville and Skit it clearly visible and it changes their relationship with each other as well. Something about loving the same creature makes a bond between them.
The section headings reflect Neville’s changing perspective. First it’s “The Slytherin.” Then “The Tadfoal.” Then, simply, “The Girl.” I really like that.
I don’t have any particular grammar nitpicks but I just saw something a little strange. In the last paragraph or so, Neville and Skit are making their way back to Hogwarts and the trees are going by “in a blur.” They’d have to be going pretty fast for that to happen, unless you mean that his turmoil of mind is making them blurry. You might consider making that more clear. Or not. It’s not a big thing.
It’s so hard to say all I want to on this. I really like it. It’s an engaging little story. And, yeah. It’s nice. *feels herself going in circles* I guess I ought to just tell you to have a nice day, Ashley, and run away before I can’t get out of this hole I’ve dug. Have a nice day! *D*
Oh PS I like the way you characterize Neville too. With the allergies and stuff...you did a good job on him. I forgot.
Poor Skit. She seems like such a sad and lonely person *would hug her, but is too intimidated* I think it's great that Neville finally is the one who has the stregth to let Farrah go, even if Skit always pretended to be the tougher one. I'd love to read more about her!
Wow. Just wow. Great work! Neville is one of my favorite characters in the Harry Potter universe, and you really managed to keep the essence of his character that I love to read. I loved your descriptions of Farrah, I love horses myself, and aqua is one of my favorite colors. So that, and your beautiful descriptions were absolutely wonderful to read. I really like how you revealled a lot about Skit's character through Neville's observations in the bushes and her reaction after she found out that he was spying. She's definitely a more caring person than Neville's first impression of her, which showed her to be rather cynical. I like it how you had her come to Neville, even though most other people wouldn't think twice about enlisting his help. Neville develops an affection for Farrah throughout the story, he starts not really liking animals much at all, and then it ends up being extremely difficult for him to say goodbye. Once again, great work, and I've added this story to my favorites! ~ PheonixTears
Author's Response: Oh wow. Thank you so much for this lovely review! I wasn't sure if this story topic would really appeal to many people, so I was hesitant to put it up. *glares at Anna* But knowing that you enjoyed it this much made it worthwhile! Thank you again, for taking the time to review. It means a lot. :)
I liked it a lot. You did a really good job writing this story!
Author's Response: *squee* My first review on this story. Thank you so much!